Reviews for Unlocked Hearts
AngelSlayer135 chapter 2 . 5/21
I reviewed the Lemon aspects of both chapters on your DeviantArt account, I wanted to review the normal parts here. I want to start off by saying, you are a jerk... when I first started into the Bleach fanfiction I never really though of Ichigo and Yoruichi being a couple, until I read this story and now I ship them so hard it is painful. So thanks for adding yet another to my ever expanding list. Anyways...

The Good:
-I loved the first chapter, the slow coming together of the two of them, the normal situation in which is happened feels like it could have been in real life.
-Yoruichi's thoughts post sex were extremely mature and well thought out, I might be using her comments about his scars in a future story if I ever get around to it, not word for word of course but the idea behind them.
-The interactions between Yoruichi and Ichigo flowed so well I feel like you could have just skipped the Lemon aspect and just made a friendship piece without losing anything.
-The background behind Sui-Feng just made her a likable character for me, before I mostly was annoyed by her in other stories, always being the super possessive almost crazed stalker type.
-Yoruichi was extremely well done in character, the start of Ichigo was as well less later on when he was seducing Sui-Feng though.

The Bad:
-I did not enjoy the second chapter as much, generally I do not like Sui-Feng as a character but you made her likable, still her reason for falling in love with Ichigo after hanging out with him for "a week" seemed lacking as was his reason for suddenly falling in love with her, it seemed rushed even with skipping around with the time frame.
-I wish you would consider making a follow up as I now want a steamy threesome, or at least an explanation into what Yoruichi, the demon neko that she is, said to Orihime and Tatsuki.
-Sui-Feng, as I understand her, seemed out of character for most of it, even though this was the point of chapter two it still seemed a bit rushed but as a one shot I can see why.

Overall I really enjoyed this story with or without the Lemon. The first chapter was amazing and the second, though slightly less so, was also very good.
8579 chapter 1 . 1/26
That's sooo romantic & the omake is hilarious. Hope you will write another Ichi/Yoru story in near future.
Sir Falinn chapter 2 . 9/7/2014
I love it. Thank you so much for so nice story.
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matt chapter 1 . 12/9/2012
hi i would like to read the lemons but Yourfanfiction is no longer available and i cant read it at Diviantart
Rashomoun chapter 2 . 11/4/2012
Read that story a bunch of times now and it never gets old ! Keep coming up with good stuff will you ! ;D
Galf chapter 1 . 10/3/2012
A good Ichigo/Yoruichi story, where both remain in character, have good development, and has actually funny humor in it? Thank you for writing this gem of a story. I very much look forward to the continuation of this story. Of particular note I enjoyed that you were able to keep the fact that Ichigo is rather innocent and naive in mind and bring it across so well, most authors find it very difficult to write romance where the male is the innocent one in the relationship and I've seen many authors simply forget it or invent a reason for its absence rather than trying to bring that aspect of Ichigo's character into their narrative. Yoruichi was in character most of the time, with only one or two instances were the ooc'ness didn't fit with the story, the "I'm serious" line of hers comes to mind. Overall the story as of this chapter looks well done with a believable pairing between Ichigo and Yoruichi, my favorite Bleach pairing. Good luck on your other stories and hope to see more from this story soon. Will review chapter 2 shortly.
Ryan2212 chapter 1 . 9/23/2012
I like the story a lot so much so that I went DA to read the uncensored version. I'm sure you got other things to do beside writing bleach stories, but please continue this story. The relationship between Ich/Yor is really great and you seem to have a unique take on the characters. I want to note that I read the 2nd chapter as well good job with balancing the pairings between Yor/Ich/Sui. Anyway thought I just pass along my thoughts.
SilverIceRing chapter 2 . 9/17/2012
Awesome chapters. Had to read them on deviantart to get the maximum enjoyment, but it was worth it. And although you yourself say it might be a long wait, I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Especially with the vague promise you made with Orihime and Tatsuki. THAT is something worth waiting for in my book.

Great job, and I hope you get your muse under your control soon!
Blackstriker94 chapter 2 . 9/9/2012
Put the lemons back in it's OK now
Anonymous chapter 2 . 8/8/2012
To be honest, I wasn't expecting you to take Yoruichi's suggestion seriously. Pairing Ichigo and Soi Fon is a lot trickier than pairing up Ichigo and Yoruichi.

Their relationship was very sweet, and I loved Soi Fon's determination to come out of her shell. And the little moments between Ichigo and Yoruichi were cute, and I like that Ichigo's not as flustered by her as he usually is.

To be perfectly honest, Ichigo and Soi Fon's relationship didn't feel as natural as the previous chapter. However, the two have very few canon interactions, and it's hard to convincingly pair them up with you're only working with one chapter. But despite that, I thought you did the best you could.
Guest chapter 1 . 7/20/2012
I agree, lemon's always shape the story. It's such a vital part, after all. But this is wonderful. I've not been to this section of the Bleach tag for so long. So glad to find something worth the read.
BlackFlash chapter 2 . 7/9/2012
Great Story
MAROON STYLO chapter 2 . 7/6/2012
This fic was pretty nice, I guess I kinda like the way u "Brought it home" but I really hope theres more to it :)
SoulsLastResort chapter 2 . 7/5/2012
That was just as great or greater then the first! I'm glad you finished the chapter instead of quitting, thats inspirational. Keep writing, never stop.
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