|Reviews for Dirge|
| Irradiance chapter 8 . 5/21
You might never see this, but I wanted to leave a comment anyway because your story has been such an enjoyable read.
The Xing trio's dynamic in this is great; three vastly different personalities and you make them mesh so well. Mei being - not hostile, but not super friendly either with Ling and Lan Fan was great and made a lot of sense considering she's only just come to terms that she can trust them at the very end of the series. There's a burgeoning sense of camaraderie there between her and the Yao clan pair. I also like that you kept Mei's sassiness - that same audacity she showed when she met Lan Fan in Dr. Knox's house, only now it's got more of a playful edge to it.
I love that you display a more playful side of Lan Fan through childhood references and interactions with Ling. She's still got her solemn demeanor as Ling's devoted guard, but she's not a robot. The childhood familiarity they share adds a nice wrinkle to their lord-retainer relationship.
Ling is my favourite and you did such a great job balancing his lighthearted personality with his more serious beliefs and motivations. He's so multifaceted and each aspect of him shone through in your writing; he's the goofball complaining to the camels (Ling vs. the camels is my favourite feud, by the way) and the kid who viciously defends a dumpling with his life, but he's also shrewd and extremely protective and caring towards the people close to him. The scene where he pins Lan Fan down so Mei can heal her arm with the Philosopher's stone always gets me. It was so in-character, right down to the calm, cruel tone of his voice serving as a stark contrast to his kind motivations.
Also, I appreciate the confession scene. It wasn't sappy or melodramatic, but genuine and felt true to their characters.
So, this might never get continued but regardless, what I have read is fantastic.
| Guest chapter 8 . 2/19
Man, this is a good story. Truly a pleasure to read every time. And, if you ever came back to it, I know I'd love to read more.
| Random Person chapter 8 . 1/7
Oh wow...Please write more! You’re very talented in bringing these two characters to life. I love it! Please write more!
| Anon chapter 8 . 12/22/2015
they are so cute ohmygod i can't
okay so this story was like abandoned? in 2011? i have no idea why you did that this story is so awesome
i really, really love ling and lan fan, and i feel like you did their relationship perfectly - ling is so ling, it's just - amazing characterization oh my god
and this chapter eSPECIALLY they confess to each other, without really confessing, and AHHHHHHHH I'M JUST SCREAMING OVER HERE
this is just amazing. back to front. i'm gonna save this to favorites and look through your other stories now, hope you keep writing -
| Justpassingby chapter 3 . 12/19/2015
I absolutely adore your writing but a few things bugged me. 1. Ling ever being too afraid of helping Lan Fan "because of how she'll react" 2. Mei and Lan Fan disrespecting each other when they shared blood wounds back in Amestris 3. Greed (the character) non- existent in Ling. They've become too OOC in what I thought was a continuation, so I'm stopping here. I do like your writing and I hope you continue with it.
| blithers chapter 8 . 11/8/2015
This story is so wonderful - I really love the voices you have for all of the characters, and the line between openness and constraint that you walk so beautifully well. The way you describe the desert and the little, practical details of journeying back to Xing make everything truly feel like a different world, with all these fantastic world building details. This is just wonderful, all of it. 3
| AsianObsession chapter 8 . 11/8/2015
You haven't updated in forever but I just wanted you to know that this story was amazing. I think you captured their characters perfectly and I have a soft spot for Talib. Thank you for gifting the lingfan fandom with such incredible talent.
| greed chapter 8 . 3/7/2015
IT HURTS SO MUCH I MEAN LIKE THEY ARE SUCH DORKS AND IT JUST KILLS ME TO KNOW THAT XINGESE TRADITIONS HAVE TAKEN WHATEVER FREE WILL LAN FAN HAS AND TO SEE HER SAYING SOMETHING FOR HERSELF FOR ONCE MADE ME CRY OMYGOD LING I KNOW U LIKE LAN FAN JUST TELL HER ALREADY FOR REAL DAMN BRAT AND GOD THE FEELS ARE JUST WOW THIS CHAPTER MADE ME INTO A PATHETIC BALL OF SAPPY EMOTIONS GOSH WHY DIDNT YOU UPDATE THIS BEAUTIFUL MASTERPIECE ITS SO WONDERFUL AND SO IN CHARACTER IM SOBBING GOODBYE
| SophieNewman chapter 8 . 9/28/2014
Whoa This is so awesome! I love this story already! :D
You haven't updated in... such a long time... is this story abandoned? Or are you on a hiatus or something? If you aren't, then the least you could do was inform your readers about it...
But if this story's not abandoned, I hope I can read more of this! It's really great. :)
| TheDarkKunoichi chapter 8 . 9/5/2014
OOOOOHHHH... Ling's so straightforward. He's probably cursing his hormones by now.
I love how you describe their relationship. You never stray too far from master/servant, but somehow you end up in the lovers relationship. I don't know how you do that, but it's awesome.
The way you describe the desert, and the hotness, and the sandiness, (I know it's not a word) is so realistic I can almost feel it through my wildest imagination (and my bones). But I guess it's so typical here already because my country's one of the hottest around. (Go Philippines!) And it didn't help when you described every inch of that hellhole, thank you very much.
I really loved the part where they got caught by a sandstorm and Lan Fan's automail got burnt and Ling's all like: "Use as much of the Philosopher's Stone as you need, damn it!" It makes me want to laugh and cry at the same time. It's my favorite chapter along with this one. I love all the feels!
I like ALL the scenes with Ling in them. Lan Fan's awkward moments are also good (I wonder how she catches all that meat!) Mei's like, meehh... I never really liked her. Even her panda's so goddamn annoying. I hope Li kills her, but of course that's not gonna happen. (don't hate me Mei fans!)
Update soon! I WANNA SEE WHAT HAPPENS NEXT! Maybe at some point in the story, make Lan Fan injured or something and Ling's gonna be so desperate because he doesn't know how to heal and stuff. Super angsty! I would love it if you would do that. And please don't abandon this or I'll personally send the sandstorm after you. And this time, there will be no Philosopher's Stones around... MWAHAHAHHAHA!
| Titan Flavoured Birthday Cake chapter 8 . 6/20/2014
This is an amazing read so far, I wish that you'd continue because I doubt that's the conclusion!
| Cookie chapter 8 . 4/25/2014
This fic is absolutely amazing! I just love the way they interact with each other. I couldn't believe you described the desert so well & I could almost really feel the hotness of the desert while reading this fic (the hot air in my country helped me in my feeling-the-hotness session - go Indonesia!). You are one helluva talented writer. I'm gonna wait for your update, I started reading the fic yesterday & was kinda disappointed knowing that you haven't updated in a very long time. Update! Update! We LingFan readers that are excited & crazy for the continuation of this fic are hoping that you will update & finish the story. Don't leave us behind, oh lovely writer. We are desperate
| lousii chapter 8 . 3/10/2014
Excellent! Excellent indeed. Cheers for this fanfiction.
| Delightness chapter 8 . 1/28/2014
I didn't get a chance to review last time I was reading this. So I've decided to do now:) It really is an excellent story. I hope you actually plan on finishing it. I now it's been a couple years but I still have hope for another chapter. I wonder what's going to happen to Mei and Ling and Lan Fan's relationship.
Anyway I hope to at least hear from you:-)
| Chloe chapter 8 . 10/2/2013
Your an amazing writer, you know that? The way you illustrate the desert setting is beautiful, and I feel that you are really in tune with the characters and their emotions.
When watching brotherhood, I instantly fell in love with our friends from Xing, and the interactions between them in this fic are PRICELESS! The way Mei is always reprimanding ling for his un-kingly behavior is hilarious, and the LingFan is PERFECT. I love the way you write their characters. This fic is making me love the pairing a million times more than I already did!
Omg, and that last chapter Ling was totally like "um, here Lan fan let me touch your neck seductively-you know, just to understand your automail and all!" XD
Sooooo, as you can probably tell, I am greatly enjoying Dirge, and would love it if you updated soon! I'm worried about poor Mei- but Xiao mei will protect her! That panda can kick some ass!