Reviews for As the World Falls Down
Ange noir Ayame chapter 13 . 3/28/2013
Lmfao love the ending. You just highlighted my day and put me into a seriosly good mood.
NuPreacher chapter 13 . 7/9/2011
You said you are trying new ideas. How about Sarah DOES take the crystal and she gets all of his power and he literally does become her slave.
artseblis chapter 13 . 7/9/2011
If he had asked her to offer him his dreams, maybe she would have finally gone with him...
glasshibou chapter 11 . 6/30/2011
Ah, he's back, but only to comfort Sarah?

I find it interesting that he /keeps/ her dreams (though I'm probably reading way, way too much into it) instead of simply conjuring something each time. It's pretty interesting to me becuase I kind of imagine him pocketing it every time she refuses, going "oh well, there's always next time!" which I'm pretty sure you don't intend...

And Jareth doesn't know how to comfort people, aww. ):

(As for killing Toby, I'm curious as to how you feel about it only because I did the same thing [not the same circumstances, though!] in one of my fics and I still feel like a jerk.)

And, yes, I'm going to continue to review every chapter you put out. :)
glasshibou chapter 10 . 6/30/2011
Oh no. ):

The kids got their hopes up and he just stops showing up... and it's not pleasing Jareth, either.
JHaines chapter 10 . 6/28/2011
I just found your story. The only thing I can see missing is Sarah giving in? Hehe. No seriously though. Love it! Cant wait for more.
Perfectly English chapter 10 . 6/28/2011
I'm so enjoying this, it's really nice to have a quick read, and it keeps me captivated. I can't wait to see what happens next xxx
glasshibou chapter 8 . 6/27/2011
I'm not sure why it appears as if nobody's reviewed this chapter...

Upon reading chapter nine, I can definitely see why the kids think they're getting a new father, and it's a little more heartbreaking reading this chapter over again.

Sarah cooking as opposed to getting takeout must seem like a very, very big thing that heralds (to the children) very, very big changes. The fact that they're already attached it noteworthy too and will probably cause Sarah herself a lot of heartbreak.
Perfectly English chapter 9 . 6/26/2011
I'm really enjoying this right now, it's really different so keep up the good work!
Anonymously chapter 7 . 6/21/2011
You changed persons several times in this. It was first person and then second person all in the same sentence!
xSonnis chapter 6 . 6/18/2011
I love how I can kind of feel the tension in Sarah; she won't take his dreams, yet she invites him to sit with her. It's-...oh, this story is just lovely. And Jareth is so in character! :D And the pizza bit made me laugh. Poor, naive Jareth. :P

I'm so anxious to see what happens next! ;)
Anonymous Reviewer chapter 3 . 6/14/2011
Is this a discontinued Fanfic, or do you have plans of extending this piece in the future?

Amazing how you capture the point up in just a few paragraphs. Equally amazing is your ability to write without need of elaborate monologues, or tedious character analysis.

I really enjoy the briefness of these chapters. It is kind, yet unrestricted - your writing lets the audience enter your universe and identify with your thinking, without compromising or stifling, nether yours, nor the readers individual reaction. The reader can then formulate their own impression, without being bogged down with the writer's interpretation. It is subtitle; beautiful.

Please write more, or announce this fiction as no longer active.
xSonnis chapter 2 . 6/11/2011
Oooh, I liked this chapter as much as the first! That never happens. o_o LOL. I can just feel poor Jareth's desperation in this story! Sarah, take the damn dreams already! :P

Anyway, good chapter! I'll be looking forward to more. 3
BelovedSlayer chapter 2 . 6/10/2011
Good chapter, though a bit short. I have no idea or can picture what will happen next. A good thing though.
ThePsychoFairy chapter 1 . 6/8/2011
Ooo! This is good! Do you plan on continuing it? It would make me ever so happy If you did
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