|Reviews for Bite Me|
| Kira Ria 18 chapter 1 . 5/15/2013
Shit! Not the cliffhanger, anything (well, not any) but cliffhanger!
| Kuro Yoshi chapter 1 . 7/24/2011
Update it quick. The suspense is killing me.
| HawkRider chapter 1 . 7/10/2011
This is a great story. The only thing it needs is more chapters! Please continue the story!
| baileymermaid95 chapter 1 . 6/7/2011
Wow, ok! A few things to say! First of all I really like the story so far. Really unique idea, developed plot line, distinctive characters. Good job!
Iwould like to make two suggestions though that you can apply or disregard, doesn't matter to me. It would help the understanding of the story if you either specified whose point of view you're changing to, or at least use a page break or something to seperate so that the reader can tell that the point of has in fact changed.
Also, I feel like there is a whole lot more you could do with this story. This chapter seems to just be a rough outline of what the story will be. I don't say this to be rude, but I think that if you sectioned the events so that each event was its own chapter and elaborated adding more detail, the story would not only flow smoother, but have more appeal. I seriously believe that it would make your story that much better!
Either way, I like it! Keep up the good work!