|Reviews for Gambling Apocalypse Kai|
| whodidthewhatnow chapter 1 . 6/30/2011
Just don't pull any punches on this one. The original work have Kaiji losing his ear, fingers, being sold as a slave while naked, doing slave labor...
It would be interesting to see what kinds of spins Kaiji being a woman will change the series. On the sequel, she could very well carted off to prostitution, and instead of chinchirorin she would be playing Hanafuda or something less 'mainly'. Either way, don't be afraid to change things later.
| Spiders Wearing Tiny Hats chapter 1 . 6/9/2011
Your writing is strong, and I do like how you characterize Kai for the most part. At times you abuse the commas a bit (ex. "She would still, inevitably drown," the comma is unneeded because there's a natural pause). I think since Kaiji defied stereotypes and convention, a female version of him would do so as well, and not end up marrying and having a child. I do like how Kai and her sister interact, because I can definitely see a female Kaiji acting like that. At times I felt like you were characterizing Kai as passive only because she was a woman. I never saw Kaiji as passive, but just apathetic and self-hating; that could've passed onto Kai. This may be a difference of opinion on characterization, though, so no worries! Your writing style is very good; I recommend using more active verbs (instead of "have/had past tense") to bring the reader into the story more. Otherwise I think you did a good job and I'd like to read more of your work. The ending was my favorite part. It was very strong and roped me in really well.
I hope I wasn't too harsh. I just believe we may see Kaiji differently.