|Reviews for Could it be|
| Guest chapter 1 . 4/8/2013
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| SassyBlackcat chapter 1 . 5/18/2012
omg this is wonderful! i love it i really think you should continue it u rlly r a good writer and i just wanna keep reading!1 so please please please update or continue writing!
| LachlainMacRieveLover chapter 1 . 6/21/2011
Will be interesting to see Evan's point of view for sure! Update soon please :)
| Katherine Julia chapter 1 . 6/11/2011
it's OKAY. it definitely needs to be beta-ed, because there are a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes. also, a beta could help improve the sentence structure and fluency. you might want to work on the voice and the dialogue, because they're both VERY stiff and awkward. work on the tense the story is in (meaning present, past or future) because you kept switching between them, and that shouldn't happen.
and also remember that some characters don't know certain things. specifically: evan probably didn't know megan had a huge crush on him. he flirts with girls all the time, so why would it occur to him that megan and all those girls LIKE like him? Plus, he wouldn't really have anything to compare them too. What I mean is that since he flirts with everyone and is especially attractive, most girls like him, so he wouldn't know the difference between girls who like him and girls who are just friends (since he has none because they all LIKE). Anyways, the point is, Evan probably never knew megan was super into him. And he never "had" her, like you said. She liked him, he was indifferent. there was no relationship there. he COULD have, but he DID NOT.
It could use a lot of work, but it's an interesting idea.