|Reviews for Dawns of Yesterday|
| Lily Lovett chapter 27 . 6/19
I thought this story was very creative, even with your use of several tropes that can be over done (major character death, "i am your father", etc). I thought your take on them was well-handled, and I am not one for action scenes, but yours were handled well.
I think grammatically/stylistically this story falls short. Your use of the word "safe" instead of "save" becomes distracting. There are typos where words are missed. It wasn't overall detrimental to the story, but at times I felt the flow of what was going on was really broken up by those types of errors.
As for the characters, I think I really loved your use of the Order as being an integral part in helping and supporting Hermione. I think Hermione was fairly in-character, although the initial bit where she had been getting off to Bellatrix for a while even after she was dead seemed a bit odd? And even unexplained. I thought the fact that you didn't try to "change" Bellatrix was very well done, and had her stay true to character.
However, I am probably of the few and far between that will say that I did not feel like the Narcissa/Hermione relationship was natural. In fact, I think your Narcissa was mostly out of character. It's not really a criticism of the story in of itself, but I felt almost like I was reading about an entirely different character.
Regardless, your story was really well put together. You did a good job of developing a plot with many twists and turns-and following up my closing them and letting us readers know that they lived (somewhat) happily ever after. Thank you so much for sharing!
| Grand Witch Alliance chapter 27 . 6/3
After reading Masquerade, I can't help but notice how much better the plot for this was, even after you had to throw in the stupid Voldydaddy thing. That worked out better than I thought it would actually since Hermione didn't suddenly gain awesome powers or join the forces of evil.
| Trisskel chapter 27 . 5/11
Ow, my feels.
| Leolaws chapter 27 . 12/25/2014
Well, this was amazing. Took me roughly four delectable hours to read it, and I just wanted to say thank you. It was beautiful in its heartache. You write beautifully.
| Guest chapter 27 . 7/3/2014
Thanks again for writing such wonderful stories!
| AdamTobiasGrayson chapter 26 . 12/3/2013
wait no wonder ur name is familiar u did the unhony trinity triology and got me stuck on Andromeda/hermione
| AdamTobiasGrayson chapter 27 . 12/3/2013
i love this. but I need to stop reading so much Bellatrix/Hermione. Narcissa is always the odd women out and that just makes me sad I want her to be happy too. This story did at least end with her happy though. I don't see how a Bellatrix/Hermione can end happily, though im sure someone could do it if they really wanted, things would be stretched though.
| Leah chapter 27 . 6/7/2013
That was absolutely incredible! The entire story was deep, creative and professionally written. I have stayed up insanely late two nights in a row because I couldn't stop reading! Loved it! Thanks for all your hard work, your stories are well worth your effort I can assure!
| theunchosenone chapter 6 . 1/7/2013
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| theunchosenone chapter 3 . 1/7/2013
looks like hermione has bella's horcrux
| theunchosenone chapter 2 . 1/7/2013
I wanted to point out after Voldemort "killed" Harry his horcrux was destroyed thus his scar disappeared.
| theunchosenone chapter 1 . 1/7/2013
interesting i like!
| BlackBird16 chapter 27 . 9/7/2012