Reviews for Ordinary Heroes
Guest729 chapter 15 . 5/18/2017
Your FFXIII stories are too cute to not read it!
Skye chapter 9 . 9/18/2016
Ya lucky. now i wanna to play
ZombieSlayerOfTheUnderWorld chapter 2 . 4/26/2016
This inspired me to write family first with these pairings; Vanille x Fang, Vanille x Lightning, Lightning x Serah (don't judge me), and Serah X Vanille. The only difference is that the kids would be sons, since there's a lack of sons when it comes to Yuri family fanfics. Can someone please tell me why?
Meathead chapter 1 . 4/19/2016
I have an idea to expand on your story once you rewrite these and have them take place after Final Fantasy 13 Lightnings Return just a suggestion and also don't forget to have light and tell them about what it was like to be the see The Purge fight in Valhalla as a valkyrie Warrior Guardian to the goddess of death and life etro and then the battle when she had a battle against the God of Light then you story have more credibility and on top of that when you refer to the characters you have to refer to stuff on Gran pulse does lightning turn back the hands of time to before the chaos infected everything so no references streets only thing you should references stuff that will give him the game that should exist and I don't want to hear that there's a fact that that's no excuse for being lazy unless you're writing it on a more personal level story then I understand why you're breaking it but I suggest you take my suggestion because I'll make it much more believable to what happened Roofing game time but that's just me a true artist try to make that believable not unbelievable and I don't want to hear fict issues that you don't hear
Guest chapter 5 . 12/28/2015
I thought Mr. Cuddles would've died and they'd have to buy a new hamster
Leonard chapter 1 . 12/8/2015
If I was you I'd make a sequel to this story called ordinary heroes chapter 2 the new adventures of the farron sisters happy holidays
Review chapter 14 . 4/9/2015
I so ship Averia and Diana. Is that wrong? Sorry, I can't help it.
Lenny mosca chapter 1 . 2/1/2015
I'd like to ask you a question about the ordinary heroes series that you were in how come you can't go back and set it at the lightings return send you have more story to work with hey can you do me another favor can you not named the Friends of the chapters of the other Final Fantasy characters come up with some original names would be nice but other than that I love the story you will ordinary heroes great story to keep up the good work and do me a small have saz chocobo name chocolina and have a story with chocolina Lena can transform into a humanoidself I will call it the mystery of misadventures of chocolina and rather than wight and how the story take place 5 years after lightnings return and by the way just so you new bodtham new game is set on a beach so is in the neighborhood you should plane you play Final Fantasy 13 &final fantasy13- 2 and lighting return and you'll see what I m and then go back and rewrite your story the reason I'm saying is you play the game so you can get inspiration for your story are not taken from a person life but the store is it good info you I go back in a week and then put a time sequence in it from the proof of Diana and sister in adulthood that's just me my opinion and when I believe real write is would do and try not to take too many things on their own personal lives at the story but takes small parts of the live's the added into the story I have no doubt you proud of your family but it does a disservice to the characters you writing about but you have done the job this you want a story and it is fine but the humor an impressive original characters of the daughters of Diana and Avia but I really wish now that all for 3 Final Fantasy games out now you can go back and correct any problems in the story that's what a real write would do I'm just saying you can make this a sequel to lightnings return I really hope you take serious what I suggested here if not then that's your problem I call this constructive criticism because your story is very very good and if you but much better so thank you for writing a good story
greivergf chapter 15 . 1/12/2015
I love your Flight stories!
As for the girlfriend I would say Paine(FFX-2)or Quistis Trepe(FFVIII)would be great girlfriends(Paine would finish up the girls of FFX,while Quistis would introduce FFVIII to the world with Squall and co could be Guardians.)
Hope to read more soon(WotG,Vestige,Stranger,CaF,TWHM and OH are my favs)
Ja Ne
Black Rabbit 17 chapter 15 . 12/24/2014
Laughed the whole way through I think my most favorite chapters were the video game battle royal, the orange zombie apocalypse game , the girls at the club and this one I can't wait for the next chapter
Happy1K1nob1 chapter 15 . 12/14/2014
This was an absolutely amazing chapter and I really loved the action you put into this! I'm gonna go straight to the others in this series and I just know I'm gonna love them just as much! See you there! :D
Happy1K1nob1 chapter 11 . 12/12/2014
Another awesome thing to read. I agree that chapters can have their own mind, that they can decide where they end and where they begin. In fact, I was trying to find a way to continue my Winter Rose story in the food court but I couldn't so I asked mom and she said, a paragraph before where I'd stopped, was where the story had a pretty good endpoint for the chapter. So that's basically what I did.
(I kinda hope that you can find the time to read it some time. I like it a lot, I've typed up a full 5 chapters, which currently comes out to 22.5k words, and if I've already mentioned this then I'm sorry that I'm forgetful, but I kinda want you to read it. I do this with stuff I like, I share it where I can. I'm not sharing my story because it's *my story*, I'm trying to share it because I like it. It's well-written, and my characters are pretty fun. I also do need outside help seeing things sometimes, and I almost never know what people actually think of my stuff. So... I should shut up now. Sorry about taking up your time, and I'm really loving this story. I can't wait to see what happens next! :)
Happy1K1nob1 chapter 9 . 12/10/2014
This was just absolutely amazing! I really, really loved it a whole lot, and while reading this at work, I got that whole "Nooooooo!" sort of feeling when I couldn't finish because my half-hour break was over! I truly enjoyed this one and I can't wait for the next chapter! :)
Happy1K1nob1 chapter 8 . 12/10/2014
This was absolutely wonderful, and I especially loved the interview, as well as the serious points that it brought up. Once again I am astounded by just how amazing your stuff actually is.

You know, odd and seemingly unrelated thing that is actually directly, tangentially related to what I just said? I figured out a little while ago that twisting the hellmouth . org (tthfanfic) and what I read here on fanfic . net has me pretty spoiled when it comes to good fiction. (well, those sites and what I normally read) And you know why that's important? Because it amazes me that I can be so astounded by such good things still. That I am not so completely (insert phrase here) that I cannot enjoy the good stuff and say as much! Thank you for contributing to my addictions and have a wonderful day! :)
Happy1K1nob1 chapter 7 . 12/10/2014
That was awesome! I truly enjoyed this chapter (and my brain made a little omake of a character of mine asking Diana why she was dressed up as a cross between Angel [from Buffy the Vampire Slayer] and Alucard [Hellsing] with a claw [a part of me wanted a better description, but I couldn't come up with one] and a tri-barrelled gun) and I gotta say, my favorite part was the Store. I just loved that Store Owner! Please tell me he got a bigger part in this series than just these little tiny cameos! ;) Anyways, on to the next chapter! :D
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