Reviews for While You're Dying
Kingdom Lover123123 chapter 1 . 1/25/2014
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Topaz18 chapter 1 . 3/14/2012
I thought the same thing as I saw the turrets! Not the whole ending and everything, though... I love when Caroline took over GLaDOS, you described it really well! Pale spherical thing full of bullets, hehehe...
Guest chapter 1 . 10/15/2011
You're story is really good. I just finished the game and was surprised by the ending and wondered what would happen if GLaDOS changed her mind and your story fit that perfectly. I loved the twist of Caroline being Chell's mother. Honestly, this ending is cooler than the one in the game. Great job
The Great Susinko chapter 1 . 9/9/2011
"Surprise!" GLaDOS called. "We went with the surprise medical procedure after all."

BRILLIANT! This has to be one of my most favorite Portal stories ever! I can see this happening. In fact, this may actually be a better ending! I love it! Thank you for writing it.
knighthawker chapter 1 . 9/4/2011
... You are a crazy messed up writer. I like it and hate it at the same time.
Uzi212 chapter 1 . 8/4/2011
*sigh* there isn't enough android Chell stories
Luna144 chapter 1 . 7/21/2011
Well...since you said pretty please...

Great fic! Truely loved it, i did, i did! _

I smirked when Caroline told GLaDOS 'no' and...OMG i just realized that whenever i read 'Caroline' I read it like the way GLaDOS says it at the end of Portal 2 when the computer says:

"Caroline Deleted"

and GLaDOS says:

"Goodbye, Caroline..."

...

*ahem*

...

well, good job!
hanfan26 chapter 1 . 6/23/2011
Good story! I like it a lot, but I totally never knew the test subject's name was Chell. Wow, blonde much? Yeah, I did the whole game without knowing her name.
Eternal Density chapter 1 . 6/21/2011
good one! :D
name none given chapter 1 . 6/17/2011
Well, that was...interesting...kinda cool...I guess...

It's an interesting, dark take on an alternate ending for it.

Yeah, I fail at writing reviews.
xXOriginXx chapter 1 . 6/14/2011
I like how you included the suprise medical expriment, you should realy continue this
Lazarian chapter 1 . 6/14/2011
Dammit you made me cry! I dislike crying at 1.29 in the morning...Dammit just *sniff*. *goes off to cry*
Mystic 777 chapter 1 . 6/13/2011
You know, I had wondered if anyone was going to go with the "suprise medical proceedure"... You did "tragic consequences" too! Well done... Poor Chell, she never catches a break, does she?
PotterPhantomKitten chapter 1 . 6/13/2011
Poor Chell, getting shot up by the turrets and betrayed by GLaDOS! At least GLaDOS and Caroline healed her though, even though she is an android now.

I really like how you pot rayed GLaDOS and Caroline as two separate people, since for some reason a lot of people tend to think that GLaDOS and Caroline are the same person. And you did great at keeping everyone in character, by the way! :)
Faux Promises chapter 1 . 6/13/2011
Interesting. While I adore SomewhatRedeemed!GLaDOS, I have to say this is a really fascinating alternate version because you gave a realistic portrayal of what could have happened had she not taken anything away from the experience and the conclusion WAS a Broken Aesop. I tend to think in my own interpretation of canon that GLaDOS did learn something but chose to blame it all on Caroline because she's way too goddamned proud to ever admit it. But like I said, this is a neat idea because all of us had a moment of "OHGODNO" when the elevator doors opened on those turrets.

I think GLaDOS had every intention of letting her go at that point, but if she was gonna give her that opera, then it wasn't going to be without a really mean-spirited fakeout like those turrets. ;p

So I liked this and also should say it strikes a chord with me, because it would just be the most awful thing she could have done to Chell at that point. Gewd Jawb!

Best wishes,

-FP
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