Reviews for Mahou Senki: Lyrical Days
PasiveNox chapter 4 . 10/24/2023
Oooooof anyway great chapter wonderful
PasiveNox chapter 2 . 10/23/2023
Great chapter
Pixelitus chapter 4 . 5/5/2023
“Resignation. That was an emotion that he wasn't entirely familiar with. He had seen it, but he never experienced it. He was a person of action, well, he was now. If he saw a problem he worked towards a solution. Though working towards the solution usually involved several mistakes and accidents he didn't let himself fail or wait for failure to reach him. Resignation was only something he's seen on Kiritsugu. Why would that kind of emotion be on a girl his age?”

….the fire? Seriously man? The hell? And where’s the survivors guilt? The ‘emptiness’ Shirou has from the fire? Where is the Shirou that can only find joy and self-worth in helping others?

Ah. Yes. Random girl meets random boy and yells at him to stop being depressed, thereby making him human.

Oh. There he is.
Pixelitus chapter 3 . 5/5/2023
“"But we're going to have to teach you how to not burn your nerves out as you create a Magic Circuit."”

Wait…but Shirou only made Circuits because he got incomplete knowledge from Kiritsugu, not because Kiritsugu didn’t know. There’s just no way that Kiritsugu, knowing just how god damn *dangerous* making circuits is, would have Shirou knowingly make them. The only reason Shirou is even alive after doing that for years is because of Avalon. Without that…well…there’d be no Fate Stay Night.
Pixelitus chapter 2 . 5/5/2023
“"Ah." Shirou remembered his injury from last night and pressed a hand to his chest. He took a deep breath.

"No pain. I guess it healed." Shirou smiled. That was great. He was worried about going to school with cracked ribs. He must have judged the wound a lot worse than it had been.”

But…how? He doesn’t have a contract with Saber, so Avalon wouldn’t be able to act as a Master’s Phantasm…

“He would have to wait until Kiristugu came home from his trip to ask about that. If he did actually possess Magic Circuits that meant that he could be an actual Magus instead of an imitator like he was. He could be a Hero just like Kiristugu.”

Wait, but…Shirou doesn’t know that some people have genuine magical circuits and don’t need to create them. At least, not at this point in time.

Mmm. Yeah. Without Archer to pass down his abilities, Kiritsugu barely teaching him Magecraft, no Saber to give him Caliburn dreams, and no servants to trace Noble Phantasms from, Shirou is in a very bad position strength-wise.

Oh god. Sakura. Poor Sakura. I just remembered. Jesus Christ, Sakura has to deal with all of that alone? Poor girl…
Pixelitus chapter 1 . 5/5/2023
Kiritsugu isn’t a Sorceror. He’s a Magus. Think of it like this. One is a water gun, the other is a nuclear warhead. Kiritsugu is the water gun in this scenario.

Hm…Shirou was seven in Fate/Zero, and since the 4th Holy Grail War took place in 1994, it should be 1996 right now since Shirou is nine. The timeline adds up on Kiritsugu still being alive. Odd thing is, Shirou only learned about the Hero of Justice in 1999, the year Kiritsugu died because Kiritsugu told him on his deathbed. With that in mind, how would Shirou know about being a ‘Hero of Justice?’ Also, I get the feeling it was a *really* bad idea for Kiritsugu to leave Fuyuki.

“A rush of heat invades Shirou's body, almost as if someone shoved a blowtorch into his spine and replaced the blood in his veins with lava. His head grew heavy as he pushed past the pain.”

I remember the description of creating a Magic Circuit having been ‘inserting a hot metal rod into his spine’ or something like that, but that’s it no consequence. Doesn’t really matter so long as it’s hot and painful I guess.

“"E through S plus." Yuuno mumbled. "D is below average and A rank is something like one in one thousand on Mid-Childa. That's just magical level. Most people can't really use it right even if they have enough magical energy."”

No no, Shirou has above average Magic Circuits, they’re just atrophied. The average Magus has 20, but Shirou has 27(…atrophied)Magic Circuits. Frankly, he’s above average.

Oh, wait, you mean that’s his Magical level without activated Circuits.
frisbeeg70 chapter 8 . 7/17/2022
I hate to say it but kind of disappointing. Every time I thought it was going somewhere it fizzled out and nothing happened. It's confusing because what is the point of this crossover? What changed? It seems like nothing really changed. The whole Jewel Seed arc basically ended exactly the same as if Shirou was not there. He did a lot of running around but in the end accomplished nothing.

The same thing seems true for Shirou. He's gained a jewel seed and yet he doesn't seem any stronger or different than he was after canon Fate got going. After a whole bunch of changes and a big crossover all that's changed is he's in a new city with new friends. That's not exactly exciting or living up to what this crossover could offer.

It seemed like a whole bunch of running around with a lot of lights and explosions that ended up with no changes of any significance to either part of the crossover. That's what makes me ask what was the point?
Lazy Servant chapter 9 . 8/5/2021
Thanks for the chapters.
RDDash chapter 5 . 6/23/2021
The story is okay, but it's getting nonsensical occasionally.
Tryson chapter 9 . 1/27/2021
Binding to the bed you say
Selias chapter 8 . 5/2/2020
Damn it. What's the point of even writing a crossover with Shirou in it, if you're just going to make him completely useless and have zero impact on the story?
Selias chapter 7 . 4/28/2020
Oh, hey! Shirou's slightly less useless in this chapter!
ApekingBobo chapter 4 . 2/17/2020
Allusion is a figure of speech, in which an object or circumstance from unrelated context is referred to covertly or indirectly. It is left to the audience to make the direct connection. Where the connection is directly and explicitly stated by the author, it is instead usually termed a reference.

Elusion is the act of successfully hiding or escaping from someone. Your cat's Elusion makes it hard to find her when it's time to take her to the vet. When you avoid being found or caught, that's Elusion. Playing hide and seek is all about Elusion, as is being a successful prison escapee.

the word you are using is wrong, this is why.

other than that your doing great, probably more than this that was done wrong, but this is what stuck out to me.
Exodus12345 chapter 4 . 2/15/2020
Well if he got kidnapped her mother would immediately cut him open and kill him to get the seed.
Exodus12345 chapter 3 . 2/15/2020
So is Shirou going to keep being completely useless?
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