|Reviews for Rex et Regnum|
| pixileanin chapter 15 . 3/13
Oh gosh, this chapter was so riveting, I can't stand it! The whole non-feeling, bloody, back-stabbing... everything! I don't know where to start. This is when I wish I had done a running review. *mumbles incoherently*
The whole thing with Doe just killed me. When Annek recognizes that thing in her eyes... simply chilling.
Okay, so when all the little leaflets came falling down and Ore was making himself look good, I had a crazy flashback to those reality shows that I hate. You really had me hooked with the insane suggestions, and I am so glad that Annek had one more trick up his sleeve.
Hearing the cannon and thinking it was for him... no words there.
"I was dying. I was okay with that."
I don't know how you did it. It was so moving when I read that. After all the horrific things that you put him through, the physical, the psychological, everything. I only figured that he survived because 1 - the chapter wasn't over yet, and 2 - there were several chapters after this one, and I didn't think you'd pick a second MC. :P I can only imagine the place you put yourself in when you wrote this. It must be a dark and twisted place to be able to deliver something like this. I thank you for it.
The end of the chapter, with the non-feeling was brilliant. I love the tie-in to the PainAway. It seems that this not feeling anything is a theme to the whole chapter. I love it! I loved this chapter!
| Edhla chapter 20 . 3/10
[nearly incoherently high] okay, I'mma start with a critique for a change :p This sentence tells rather than shows, and frankly, you are waaaaay better than telling :D As you so neatly demonstrate with the rest of that section- we aren't sure if Annek is literally feeling and experiencing these things or whether he is hallucinating (since he's high, after a..)
As someone almost completely canon blind, the differences in people's accents, etc, continue to fascinate me, and your attention to details pleases me :) Also, damn, it's not fair that you can put words like "timbre" into a fic and make it work and ugh, beautiful.
So poignant that he initially mistakes Meghan for his mother. For some reason I was reminded of someone telling me soldiers most often cry for their mothers when they're dying.
Clever reveal when Meghan mentions the tube and we finally see he's in a hospital (or what passes for one in that universe.)
Oh, Kitten. I was hoping so hard Annek wouldn't remember why he was hurting, at least, not for a while, so he can recover. You went there. Ouch, freaking ouch. And "eye" in the singular is brilliant. Did I use that word enough? Because BRILLIANT. XD
| Blex Luthor chapter 1 . 3/10
I'm not quite fandom blind, I read the first two books a few years ago but couldn't really get into the the third, so I guess I have fandom astigmatism? Something like that. Anyway, review-ward, ho!
Straight up, your OC, Annek, seemed very, very unlikable. At least in the first part of the chapter. It gets a lot better by the end and I even start feeling for the cat when it's obvious the guilt of all the killing he's done is really eating at him. That said, the first part still leaves a bad taste in my mouth. Even with the context of what he's been through and how insultingly ignorant Glinter is about, well, everything, I still can't get behind. Glinter, to me, is like a dog who leaves a dead bird on its master's rug and then Annek is like that master beating the snot out of that dog. Neither the dog nor Glinter knew any better and, in their own ways, were trying to be as helpful as possible.
I feel like he was approaching histrionics when he's "curled against the wall in a miserable heap". Considering he's a young dude who's been through hell, got survivor's guilt like no other, and more bodies on him than Marlo Stanfield, I'm willing to forgive that. He seems interesting and readable. I'm hoping we get to see what went down in the Games, because he seems like he went a little Martin-Sheen-at-the-end-of-Apocalypse-Now on the other Tributes.
Speaking of whom, you were inconsistent on whether they were Tributes or tributes. A small problem, but easy to fix. Other than that, I didn't notice any SPaG issues. One thing though, you were straddling the line between being delightfully wordsy and pedantic. You stay on the former side and I think it will compliment your writing style well, you start heading over to the latter and you run the risk of coming of obnoxious. Still, all-in-all, a pleasure to read. Good work!
| Aiko Isari chapter 5 . 3/9
Oh goodness the irony that ran through this entire chapter. Or at least the latter half. I can debate the first part but the part with his family? Definitely.
What's interesting about the first scene isn't just he conversation, to me, but Annek himself. he's a kid, still, because loves the trains, and the cynicism is clearly washing off a little from being able to go home for the first time in... well, ever. However, there's a feeling of shallowness as he goes and admires all the luxurious stuff. (Not that I blame him, I doubt I'm going to be able to afford even half of it, but still!) It's clear where his heart lies however, and for that I'm grateful, but his actions remain a touch tainted by the Capital's world, even if he's really at the bottom of that place.
Meghan remains awesome. Even though she gave advice that from an outsider's perspective, seems obvious, it's clear it wasn't to Annek, and she really does know how to handle him and his... being Annek. And it's also clear how much she really cares. Because he's alive and so many weren't. Though I do have to wonder about the feelings of parents in the Hunger Games, bringing in their kids in fear that they will be slaughtered once they're up for the Reaping.
Anyway, the second half proves that great big wall that time and distance can create. There's no way he can slip back into his old life, it's just too temporary and too painful, and to do so would disrespect the time his siblings made without him. He didn't belong there anymore. You can feel the crushed hopes in this, because he was hoping he could have his old life for a moment, when he lost the chance for that life the second he left. They all had to live as if he was never coming back, and he might as well not have done so, for all the good it did him.
It's sad that he wants to go back to the Capitol already, knowing that. Ironically, he's wanted there, even if it's just for his body and not for anything that really matters.
So much for a good trip I suppose. Everything's snowballed downhill and they haven't even gotten to the Q and A yet. Oh that's going to be a treat. Catch you later!
| Edhla chapter 20 . 2/13
So I figure this is a massive long chapter of massiveness in nine chunks, which means I shall be gracing you with nine reviews. :D I know if I tried to tell you what I think of this whole chapter in the one review I'd end up ripping you off bigtime with the details. In retrospect, this is what I should have done for the whole story so far because... you know what it's like. You work hard on a piece of writing and dearly want someone to comment on ALL THE THINGS. ALL OF THEM.
I absolutely knew, despite being canon blind, that Annek's naive excitement about his party night was going to be utter, epic, traumatising fail. It was only a matter of when, not if.
I love the sulky defiance of "Lina could bite him." Every now and again you remind us - Annek is basically a kid and just as stupid as one.
"Dreamed of Doe..." GODDAMN YOU I DIDN'T WANT TO BE REMINDED OF DOE :(
"2230" is this canon? If not, I'd consider 22:30 or ten-thirty. If it is, rock on :)
"Responsible for some of the gifts..." And he will want to be repaid and OH GOD ANNEK RUN. *cries*
"Whispered wealth" - I really love this because it's an inversion of "screamed wealth" - classy, wealthy people do not scream :p
"Annek tried to decline"- Despite the length of this chapter, I felt this was a little summarised and would have preferred some dialogue here.
"Why would he be so interested?" Oh, Annek :( The way you draw out this agony is one of the best examples of dramatic irony I've read, in fanfiction or out of it.
"Laconic man ranted..." Again, I would love an actual dialogue here. The description, though, is top notch and COMPLETELY HORRIBLE but that is what you were going for, so. Jesus, Kitten :(
I love the pain being "burned away" and the horrible but understandable viciousness of Annek's desire for Copperful to die "screaming." Which, you know, you have the most visceral, no-holds-barred, Stephen-Kingesque gory descriptions and I love them and please teach me to write like this :(
Bringing it back to a thought of June was a brilliant and poignant move. I wish there was more of this for me to love, Kitten! No seriously... moar. Plz.
| Rosawyn chapter 15 . 2/7
It has been so long since I read this story, I hope I haven't forgotten most of it! I remember poor Annek, but then he is the main character, so he's pretty hard to forget! And I when I was looking through to make find where I'd left off in the story, I did remember who Erica is, too. Based on the chapter title, it doesn't sound like she's got long left to live, though! :(
Ugh, having just recently watched 'Catching Fire' in the theatre, these melting trees seem somewhat familiar. It still feels like the game-makers being “cheating bastards,” but that's Hunger Games' canon.
Ouch, just thinking how eating a full meal may have lessened their chances rather than helped them is depressing. :/ I mean, I know Annek wins, but still.
Oh, such a creepy image when Annek feels like he and Erica are the only ones left alive and that the ghosts of the dead tributes are watching them. Kind of makes me shudder. It makes sense that they'd walk close to one another; they're probably both terrified. And when they took each other's hands for comfort, I couldn't help smiling.
I, too, am wondering whee Ore is. If these five are the only ones left, it seems he's the only one without an ally at the moment.
Wow, a three-foot ponytail would be somewhat dangerous to have in a hand to hand grapple.
Considering all the dangers in the arena, it seems like a bit of a jump for Annek to assume Bella is the cause of Doe's bruises, but he's obviously not thinking very clearly at this point.
Ouch, I guess it's not as easy to shoot someone in the back as one might think. Especially when you're as exhausted as Erica is at this point. :/
I appreciated the commentary on how all the Careers seem to have been trained to attack as soon as they've been attacked. It seems pretty fitting.
I have to say that I find the whole idea of kids trying to get the courage to kill each other really uncomfortable. And I'm pretty sure that's exactly the reaction you were going for at this point, heh.
Ugh, feeling the back of one's shirt begin to dissolve must be a really, really gross sensation.
The disconnect Annek has when he doesn't realize she's stabbed him until he feels the blade in his mouth is really effective. Really gross too, for the record. As he says, he can't focus on that. I imagine his mouth is quite injured, so it makes sense that he can't speak.
It makes sense that he'd feel guilty for killing Doe. That must have been horrifying. I do wonder what motivated her to try to kill him; if he knows that District-mates aren't supposed to kill each other, she should know that too. But maybe she was just trying to survive and saw this as the best way to do that? I guess there's no way to know. :/
I actually thought with Doe, Erica, and Bella all dead that Annek had won, but then I remembered Ore! I wonder how the heck Annek is going to beat him, considering the state he's in. It doesn't seem like he could survive much longer let alone actually fight anyone at this point.
I really have to shudder reading about how most of what he's drinking is leaking back out of the holes in his face! Yikes! And then he's gone and over-dosed...oh man. I do wonder if PainAway normally hurts before it helps, or if it's just because he's drank too much.
For as much as Ore's being a jerk, I really can't argue with his assessment at this point; Annek is already half-dead, and it really isn't fair. That said, it would have been smarter strategically for him to just attack Annek rather than talking to him; Annek didn't even see him. And since Ore is perfectly healthy, apparently still looking like he'd just stepped off his platform, not even a scratch on him, it really does seem like Annek has no chance.
I can't help wincing as Annek is injured but doesn't even feel it. Seriously can't help wincing. I had to smile, though, when Annek thought that he was either incredibly smart or incredibly stupid.
It seems as if Ore is incredibly stupid, though; he could have killed Annek several times over, but he's trying to put on a freaking show. And people actually respond to his questions? Wow. That also seems like a pretty quick response time, though I guess Annek really can't tell how long any of this is taking. I do appreciate the one that suggested Ore kiss him, lol. That's either someone with a sick fetish or just a troll, probably a troll.
Oh man, I have to admit I approve of Annek's idea. Ore wants the glory of killing Annek, but Annek doesn't want to let him have that. I can respect that, his desire to die on his own terms, or at the very least not at Ore's hand. Though, it seems perhaps he's actually got a plausible plan to kill Ore here. And I really do like how Annek wants to go down fighting, if he does indeed need to go down.
It actually seems like they might both die here, like that's a very real possibility. I imagine that would anger a few people, heh.
Oh wow, that's amazing when he hears the cannon and thinks it's his. Extremely powerful writing there.
That's actually kind of gross that they decided to leave his scars because they gave him “character.” I think that's a decision he should be allowed to make for himself, but he's not someone who gets to make decisions for himself.
I love how this chapter ends. It's a nice call back to the PainAway, and how he didn't feel anything for the last part of the Games.
| pixileanin chapter 14 . 1/17
Oh BK, how I've missed you!
I've been holed up in my own little world, so it's nobody's fault but my own. I must say how deliciously easy it was for me to jump back into your story. I was delighted with the action and pulled into the suspense.
As always, your writing is crisp and vivid. I admire your ability to navigate through the action and give us a feel for the characters without slowing down the pace. It is truly a joy to read.
Can you tell I really love your story? Even after being away, it is still as good as I remember it.
Could he kill someone who'd just saved his life? He knows he's supposed to, but Annek doesn't necessarily do what he's told. I like that about him, that he has a heart, and a strong instinct for survival. You never make things easy for him, yet you give him a chance to breathe and eat, and well, that seems to be enough for now.
This poor girl who hasn't yet killed anyone... she's a wild card. I don't yet get a feel for how desperate she is to stay alive. Will she have the coldness to kill anyone to save her own life? I think it's too soon to say. But with only, what did you say? Five left after just a few days? She's going to have to stand up for herself soon. I'm sure you won't disappoint, and make her dilemma brutal, as you do for all your characters.
I don't think you'd let them dawdle for too long, and I was right. They didn't even get a decent night's sleep. I love how you used the dream as a transition to reality. What a way to wake up! Burning trees! The fact that Erica wakes him up instead of leaving him to die makes me think that she's less inclined to kill him right away as well.
Really great chapter!
| Anla'shok chapter 20 . 12/27/2013
That was an excellent chapter and seeing the last of Annek's naiveté crushed was horrible and remarkably written. I've rarely seen characters who enjoy their new status as victor (except your stereotypical career) and you depicted Annek's powerlessness brilliantly. He learned the rules too late, and it seems Snow was counting on it to control him better.
I think your writing has improved, the chapters are more intense. I'll be looking forward to updates.
| Anla'shok chapter 18 . 12/27/2013
He's such an idiot to skive Q and A.
That thought pounding in my head kept me from enjoying the rest of the chapter. You've shown to plot things coherently, so I'm sure Annek will pay. I guess it wouldn't be realistic for him not to make mistakes and he's a wreck.
I'm also not so convinced how Julia and Annek got together so fast. It seems he's so fragile he needs something good to latch on. Well written though.
| Anla'shok chapter 17 . 12/27/2013
This could probably have been a standalone one-shot. Annek seems almost an afterthought. The attention given to the description, the carefully crafted idyllic image of hard-won love which is then shattered by the deaths and made even grimmer by the role of the peacekeepers (Again, I like how you do not demonize whole groups but actually make things gritty by their realism.) was extraordinary.
The emotion in this was staggering and yet never felt piled on. Truly, I'm stunned.
| Anla'shok chapter 15 . 12/27/2013
I really like how Annek is more feeling his way through the Games as thinking it the more tired and hurt he gets. Also that alliances aren't confused with friendships and also shift. I also like how the lines between murder and survival blur and that luck wasn't underplayed.
Again, the writing flows very well.
| Anla'shok chapter 14 . 12/27/2013
I like the way the Gamemakers are front on and also how when something happens it's the kind of show stuff that looks good on TV (mermaids, acid rain) . I also think Annek's hand injury is downplayed or I've been reading too fast and missed when he got healed. I like how you handle interactions and how no one loses sight of the stakes.
I also like how propaganda and people's general ignorance shows through details.
| Anla'shok chapter 12 . 12/27/2013
Neat Games. I found the interactions between Annek and his family more poignant, but Games are usually such a disaster when it comes to genuine emotional portrayal (and I'm guilty of making them stale in my writing too) that these came through as rather great. You're not afraid to make Annek act like an arse and be self-centered and that makes it all so much more realistic. He's focused on victory rather than on how horrible everything is while still keeping his humanity, my kind of tribute, lol.
The arena is elaborate enough to be original but simple enough to keep the focus on the tributes and that's cool. You also don't develop the supporting cast more than necessary but still enough to give some depth to the story, so kudos.
| Anla'shok chapter 3 . 12/27/2013
This is really well written and cleverly thought out. It reminds me why I like OC centric fics. Usually, to stay afloat in a Katniss-Peeta crazed fanfic ambient, they have to be really good. I like how you do not demonize Capitolites (while still showing them as shallow consumerists) and do not have your protagonist pity himself too much. I also like that you didn't feel the need to heap too much backstory right away.
For now, you really could have made this Finnick's story, but I suppose there will be divergences later and you probably have more freedom this way.
I wonder if Glinter will become a real unwitting antagonist with her inquiries or if she's gone for now.
And I love the titles.
| Aiko Isari chapter 4 . 12/5/2013
So. Much. FASHION.
Not really. Still can't imagine buying two dresses at once. I really need to stop commenting on the absurdity of Glinter. I'm not sure its helpful, since I know this is on purpose.
I do give her credit for trying, though. Glinter has persistence down to a science. And obliviousness. Her friends are supportive though, as supportive as they really can be. They are rather decent friends, though this is a kind of awkward talk about the new date scene. Probably just because of the context of the setting. It makes it really hard to really feel with these characters in this situation.
ANNEK! Dude, dude, dude. You need to stop jinxing these things. Goodness. You just got blindsided by an over-eager teenage girl. Man. Well, at least you know you're not interested, at the moment. Things can change.
"fluorescent orange tuxedo" Well, that's a haunting image that will pervade my mind for the next several hours. Well done... maybe?
The explanation of the television channels shot me straight back to the paranoia about Communism, and to all the stories my mother told me about when she first got a television. Great, great image.
Also, you're doing awesome showing Annek's awkwardness with social things in general. Considering his life, it's natural to be that way but with a rich citizen the rift between them is all too clear. He can never really feel comfortable with the Avox or the large room, or the poshness. He is only a tool, rather like the Avox.
I'm going to be honest: the cookie thing was creepy to me. I know why you did it, but... ew. That's kind of weird. But it was Glinter so I'll roll with it.
This story is still leaving me going: This is going to be bad, very, very bad about the whole District Four affair. This chapter did not disuade my suspicions. You can't fool me! You can't!
See you later!