|Reviews for The System|
| SecondGear chapter 4 . 7/23/2011
Interesting how this story is turning out. Xavier seems strange; I can't tell if he is a jerk or not.
Keep up the good writing.
| keyking24 chapter 4 . 7/21/2011
| Nauran chapter 3 . 7/5/2011
Alright, so we got a look at how he has changed. Not bat at all, in my opinion.
But next chapter seems to be where it all REALLY begins...
| NekuSuzume chapter 2 . 6/18/2011
I loved this chapter it really brings out a true essence of how pokemon will be hoping 4 da nxt chapter
| Nauran chapter 2 . 6/17/2011
Now THAT'S how you give an introductory backstory!
A rival like this can only bring great trials for the main protagonist.
| AudaciousAJ chapter 2 . 6/17/2011
Gold silver crystal red yellow blue ruby saphire and emerald? Coincedence?
| Nauran chapter 1 . 6/15/2011
Eff the system!
In my stories, the system's so screwed, you don't even know if you're in it or not!
I'm likin' this. You sound like you've got a good idea on where you're goin' with this story. A few noticeable mistakes, but overcome them and you've got a pretty amazing story!