|Reviews for Back home|
| Dan chapter 1 . 6/15/2011
You're in need of a proofreader, not necessarily a beta-reader because your story is fine overall, but someone who checks your spelling. There are numerous errors that detract from my enjoyment I've had reading "Back home" - "preciated", "possesion", "unfoloded", "happines" are only those that were glaringly obvious from one read-through.
If one manages to ignore those mistakes, then your story really is fine. I like it mostly for one reason: "Back home" exudes innocence and truly portrays Harry as an eleven year old going on twelve. Many other stories would have you believe that Harry was in his mid-teens already, he seems so very grown up all the time. I've been reading Harry Potter fanfiction for a number of years but this innocence has been missing for a long time, so good job on that.
| Annabelle chapter 1 . 6/15/2011
This is actually a pretty good story. Your writing style is very good.
For further writing, you may be interested in this site:
www . sapientimagic . com
It's a role playing site based on the Harry Potter world.
Either way, good luck with your writing and I look forward to reading more.
Annabelle Morrow, SUM student