|Reviews for Flames of the Dragon Mage|
| N7HadroreX chapter 28 . 3/1
Will you continue this? Recently I have read through this for the third or fourth time? I would like to see this continued, as you said it yourself, you finally don't have to write orzammar. This is still my favorite DA fanfic :)
| colin9696 chapter 28 . 12/14/2017
Love this story I got a few suggestion/questions that I wrote down as I read it so sorry if it rambles
What is it that duncan picks up at denerim the cup or the archdemon blood? which makes me wonder if dragon mage is something he was born as and the joining ritual and the corrupted old god blood which manifested themselves as dragons brought it out in him?
What happens to connor do the templar know he is a mage or not?
Can alistar learn of his real mother fiona because in the games even as king he seems unaware of his living grand entrantress mother i don't think i have seen it addressed in fanfic?
Random thought about his armour if you google Green Elven Knight Helmet and
Elven cuirass by azmal deviantart the leaves as the shoulder armor look very good i don't really like the look of the helmet and chest armor for the arcane warrior set so that's kinda what i’ve been picturing
Is the rune stone gained in the gauntlet going to be used in making his own sword as the arcane warrior said that spellweaver would be temporary until he made one better suited like fire instead of lighting coating the blade.
I love this story should probably stop before start to ramble on so I‘ll just say one of my favourite dragon age fics keep it up however long it takes please.
| Rusev chapter 28 . 11/30/2017
Amazing. Will be waiting for the next chapter patiently!
| Chaosservant chapter 28 . 11/13/2017
Huzzah! IT LIVES! HAHAHA!
MY FRIEND, IT IS GREAT TO SEE THIS.
Seriously, I liked this. I had forgotten you went Harrowmont, not exactly a good deal in my opinion but hell, this chappy was great anyway. I cant wait for more.
| BL012689 chapter 28 . 11/12/2017
| BluAsh54 chapter 27 . 5/10/2017
This story is amazing! Please make more!
| Chaosservant chapter 27 . 1/3/2017
This story was rather amazing, and despite it being two years since the last update, I hold out hope that you shall come back to finish what you started.
| Aroe001 chapter 27 . 12/31/2015
Excellent story. Truly I'm amazed this doesn't have more reviews. Your characters are unique and true individuals which is harder than it sounds, especially when writers have to use different sentence structure and syntax with different characters. So bravo and thank you for an excellent read.
| V-rcingetorix chapter 27 . 12/31/2015
Welcome back! Looking forward to the next chapter, whenever you're able to get it out; work and family comes first; this is a hobby that happens to help train the writing skills :)
So then, all six at once? Ambitious. I had to go back to Orzammar for that revenant when I did my first playthrough; a bit annoying.
The depiction of Revenants is very well done. Things dead, yet not dead, belonging to an ancient world ... very well put. The emphasis on cold alien thinking is a good touch; the only suggestion I have would be to describe the environmental effects a bit more. Frost on the ground, the stone groaning under the temperature differences ... that kind of thing.
Reunion of Fergus and Zelda, nice! For once, a meeting of family members that doesn't involve an argument about What His Mother Said About Our Gran or some such thing. Very welcome!
Honestly, there's not much I can see for improvement. SpaG is great (kudos!), the pacing is even, and you ended it on a good point.
There are two points I could suggest. First, could thoughts be placed as italics? It separates from the written/spoken sections a bit more easily in my mind.
Second, Will says: "May the Stone or whatever gods there may be guide our blades,"
Um, what self-respecting god would respond to such a vague help request? To my mind, if this is a pantheon theology, it would be similar to walking into a busy street and muttering 'help.' Yeah he might get someone's attention, but it's kinda lackadaisical. Now, if he'd referenced the Maker (ie a lot of Leliana influence), or the Stone more specifically, it might be a little more helpful ... but it seems as if his shotgun approach isn't very heartfelt.
On the other hand, it's a very small objection, and my last class might have made me a bit overly sensitive to the subject. Like a pretzel, my opinion is better when taken with a grain of salt.
Keep up the good work!
| a chapter 26 . 12/26/2015
Very good you should write more
| HonorLove chapter 26 . 10/3/2015
Okay, so normally I don't bother with unfinished stories that are over 150k words long: they're usually dragging and slow and I lose interest just after the 100k mark. I was sure that reading a re-write of a video game I've played numerous times would lose my interest even sooner than that.
Well, I'm thrilled to say that you've defied my every expectation! In fact, I'm looking forward to seeing where this whole thing goes. A large part of what I like is that, while I can pick out certain dialogue straight from the game (particularly early on in the story) and I can HEAR the characters speaking even when the dialogue is your own, you've gone and made choices that _couldn't be done in game_! I LOVE Zelda (even if her name drives me a little batty), and seeing as my personal canon Hero of Fereldan is a female Amell I like that she put in an appearance as well. And I am beyond happy that the Warden said "F You!" to the Assembly and ran off to the Deep Roads on his own! (I agree that it's obnoxious that you have two sucky choices on who to make king.) Admittedly, I'm not so happy Harrowmont wound up king, but it's a realistic choice especially with the groundwork he had laid to make it appear he was a supporter of the Wardens.
And I'm looking forward to Zelda and Fergus's reunion! That was one of those things that (when I was able to finally play all the way through as a Noble Human) drove me up the wall. I spent damn near the entire game wondering whether or not my (in-game) older brother had survived...only to nearly miss the tiny blurb right before the final battle that he was alive and well. ::sigh::
Anyway, thanks for sharing, and I hope you continue this eventually!
| Aroe001 chapter 26 . 9/2/2015
This is an outstanding story. I am actually quite surprised there aren't more reviews on it. Your characterization was spot on and the pot development was amazing, I hope to see more chapters in the future.
Thank you for an excellent story.
| N7HadroreX chapter 1 . 5/3/2015
You should really continue this. The best Dragon Age story I have ever had the pleasure of reading! :)
| The Phoenix King chapter 12 . 3/10/2015
This was a very intense chapter, with some of the best action we've seen thus far, well done! And that ending... Great job on a very gripping installment.
| The Phoenix King chapter 9 . 2/20/2015
Overall, this is a pretty good chapter. Definitely some good characterization and interaction between our heroes, and there's some decent action present as well. If there's one flaw, it's the paragraph structuring; sometimes it's a little unclear, as a character's perspective will be introduced, only to have their dialogue in the next paragraph. Still, this is some good work. Thanks for sharing!