|Reviews for Paradox|
| Guest chapter 7 . 9/24/2012
Really amazing story so far! Having played RIFT for over a year now I had wondered if there was any fan fiction created for either Defiant or Guardian. This is a very well-written story with nice intrigue, strong primary character interactions, and some great explainations for how characters in the game might view the RIFT experience. I look forward to more chapters in this story and will recommend it to my friends who also play the game. Great job!
| marekarawn chapter 7 . 8/4/2012
a bit of editing/revision wouls be a very good thing - the top middle paragraphs are a little confusing.
Changing 'voice' doesn't mean going from clear writing to jumbles.
| marekarawn chapter 6 . 8/4/2012
opt for something other than "fuck"
| marekarawn chapter 1 . 8/4/2012
Very good begining - though I got confused as to the protagonist's and the 1st tech's 'race' in this paragraph: (...) I found myself staring face to face with a middle aged Eth man, who was smiling as if he had just defeated Regulos all by himself. While I cannot claim that I am like a sister to the Eth, I was quite close to them for the majority of my life (...).
I assume the tech is Kelari and not Eth.
| Bondubras of Devoncroix chapter 7 . 3/4/2012
That was an interesting take on soul ascension. It actually makes sense, too.
Looking forward to more.
| Mijarion chapter 7 . 10/14/2011
Update! You need to update! Please! :)
| Mijarion chapter 1 . 10/13/2011
Great job! It's aweseome so far!