|Reviews for Without John|
| KC chapter 1 . 6/28/2011
The story is good, but it would really be better if you would use quotation marks to denote speech. The story was slightly difficult to read without them.
| doctorjay chapter 1 . 6/17/2011
A few typos and English grammar issues, since you asked- it is so often the silly prepositions that are hard:
when a soft male hand grab his arm, forcing him to react.
a soft male hand grabbed his arm
Sherlock and his self-satisfaction whenever he could prove people wrong.
Sherlock smiled with the self-satisfaction he felt whenever he could….?
He didn't give much details,
He gave another look to his friend
at his friend
A few days later, John finally got allowed to go back home.
John was finally allowed to go
He'd already had two visits of DI Lestrade, for filling in the gaps intentionally left in his report by Sherlock.
two visits from DI Lestrade
when him and Sherlock had both been hurt in the explosion
when he and Sherlock
John knew better than to be annoyed by such an antisocial behavior
annoyed by such antisocial behavior
| The-Devils-Playpen chapter 1 . 6/17/2011
Its a nice stor and you did extrodinary on it.
| Spirit the Fire Dragon chapter 1 . 6/16/2011
Good story! Very nice how Sherlock reacted and went back to drugs when john left. But the biggest thing for me was that when someone speaks, "it's in quotations, not dashed off with a single -." There were little mistakes too- nothing horrible, but like
'...and weigh on his shoulders' should be '...a weight on his shoulders'. There were a few other things like that, but otherwise, it was a brilliant story!
P.S. I would try using line breakers or something like
SHJWSH to show the end of a certain part or chapter instead of 'Chapter 2:' It flows better.
Keep it up! Whoop!