|Reviews for The Chase|
| Crimson Velvet Tears chapter 19 . 2/16
| MyRandomName chapter 19 . 9/15/2013
After reading some of your other works I had high expectations for this story and you didn't disappoint.
Off to read the sequel now.
| Sakarya chapter 19 . 9/12/2012
I LOVED THIS! going to continue reading more of your stories
| Sakarya chapter 7 . 9/11/2012
so passionate. love it
| Sakarya chapter 6 . 9/11/2012
I love the mystery and dramatic irony !
| Writer Rider Dirty Thirties chapter 19 . 8/12/2012
This was amazing!x10
| Guest chapter 19 . 8/2/2012
As much as I LOVED this story and am going to go read the sequel, sometimes I got a little confused. Is Chem a bad dude or just having the wrong sense of good? And I have a pinch of trouble understanding Ursa's story... But asides from that I love the way you are portraying Zuko and Katara and their relationship!
| Writer Rider Dirty Thirties chapter 1 . 7/30/2012
| Soul93 chapter 2 . 6/28/2012
This is a very unique spin of what could have happend after the war in a Zutara verse.
I love how you've written Zuko and the premise is also quite promising!
| jazzpha chapter 4 . 1/9/2012
OH HEY. Sorry this review took so long, but y'know... one-shots. Hope this helps brighten up your day even more!
Just to start off, I want to address one of your comments in the A/N about there not being much plot progression to speak of in chapters 3 and 4. I actually think that's for the best, honestly. Plot progression is important, yes; but in a character-driven story like this one, the focus should be on the characters. I really, really liked that you took this chapter as well to slow down and focus on Katara and Zuko as people- I really think these low-key, emotionally heavy moments are some of your best.
Atem continues to leave a strong impression, and I really like the pacing of your dialogue in that part. It feels really naturalistic, and just fast-paced enough to convey urgency without coming off as sounding clipped.
And then we get into the next emotionally-charged Zutara segment of the story, which are turning out to be my favorite parts of each chapter. It's nice, as always, to see Zuko let his guard down around Katara and be his insecure self; that happens far too infrequently in stories from what I've seen. The internal monologue Zuko has with himself over his break with Mai was also good to see; it's a lot more realistic and mature than him just breaking up their relationship with a crowbar for the hell of it. He realizes that she'd be happier without the burden of being Fire Lady, and lets her escape the pressures that he has to bear regardless. Good stuff.
It was rough seeing Zuko get the letter concerning Ursa just a bit too late, but of course it wouldn't be that easy. Nice to see it go out on a lighter, sweeter note considering how tough of a night Zuko's had. It's a good way to keep the tone of the story hopeful, and makes me feel like it'll all work out in the end. Which is a good feeling to have, for sure.
Another solid chapter! Three and four went together really well as character-focused installments, and as far as plot goes, well... it can take a bit of a break for all I care, if what we get in return is stuff like this.
| jazzpha chapter 3 . 12/31/2011
What's this? I got over my laziness and general inertia? Shocking! Let's start at the top, as per usual.
I really, really liked how you structured this chapter in general, balancing the first real burst of action with some continued, emotion-heavy character development.
So much for a dreamless sleep, I guess; looks like our boy's still struggling with some demons from the War. Which is to be expected, honestly. Don't know if he'll ever get over that, and I wouldn't be surprised if he didn't. At least he has someone who can empathize with him, so that counts for a lot.
The break-in marks the first real intense action moment so far in the story, and I really enjoyed watching it play out. When will people who're trying to be stealthy figure out to shut up during an assassination? Sloppy work, really. It made sense that Katara and Zuko overwhelmed the intruders without much of a fight, but their display of dominance was still punchy enough to be satisfying. Atem managed to pull a June and make a quite memorable first impression; I hope to see more of her in the future.
The quip about Zuko having more than a little Ozai in him struck a couple of nerves, and it made me glad to see that. Truth hurts sometimes, and that's certainly a side of himself that Zuko will have to keep very, very close tabs on as he grows into his position as Fire Lord. Seeing Katara Bloodbend again was unexpected, but welcome; it's nice that she's made some degree of peace with it (after using it to save Zuko's life), but it's also a very interesting moral question to puzzle over.
I also like that you're working in some political complexity here, with the idea that not everyone in the Earth Kingdom is pleased with how the War ended up. I assume that'll continue to be a theme in some way, and I look forward to seeing it explored. Maintaining peace is a lot harder than winning a war, and it's good that you're not shying away from that angle of things.
And of course, this wouldn't be a complete chapter without some emotional rawness, and it was gratifying to see that Katara trusts Zuko enough to turn to him when she's grappling with a memory as dark as her encounter with Hama. Zuko's bitterness and jealousy at Aang's clean exit from the War is wonderfully human, and helps to continue his general character development. Of course his preferred avenue of comfort is physical rather than emotional, but Zuko's never been the kind of guy to wax poetic about his feelings... so it makes sense.
I really liked how you managed to make the intimacy between them here feel like both a genuine stab at comfort and a slightly-failed attempt to mask mutual pain and discomfort, since that's a very hard balance to pull off indeed. Also Katara's exit was a great note to end on. Poor Zuko, making it way too easy for her.
All in all, another really solid chapter. Looking forward to the next one!
Also, I saw you reviewed Twist 21 while I was in the process of finishing typing this up... well played. Well played indeed. This round goes to you, it would seem.
| jazzpha chapter 2 . 12/29/2011
Another chapter, another review. Let's get it.
I gotta say, I love how the intermediaries in cloak-and-dagger stories are always, invariably, enormously difficult to deal with and generally asinine. I wanted to smack some serious sense into that little lackey bellhop twit, and the woman actually running the joint was no better. It takes some serious stones to try and extort a bounty hunter, and the Fire Lord to boot- even if she didn't exactly know whom Zuko was... although Zuko's later meditation on how effectively he'd been able to hide his identity kind of calls even that into question. All the same, though- what a crotchety old coot.
But I digress; moving on, I really, really liked the second part of this chapter. Huge amounts of respect for your choice to use nudity here for the sake of demonstrating emotional vulnerability, rather than titillation. Balancing Zuko's desire with his shame and mild self-loathing was a great contrast, and you really got that moment right.
The next part of the scene continues the trend of openness and emotional transparency, and the whole conversation between Katara and Zuko is a great way to use implication to build up just how far their relationship has come by this point. Anyone who can be totally at ease being this candid- both physically and emotionally- with another person speaks to a very strong bond between them. And the contrast between Katara's optimism about their relationship and Zuko's guardedness that borders on a fatalistic attitude was great. I love that you're already taking the time to dwell on the emotional side of the character interaction, rather than sacrificing the quiet moments on the altar of rapid plot advancement. It's not something a lot of people take the time to do, so it's always great to see.
It was also a good call to break up the two serious halves of the conversation (their relationship with each other, and then the relationships they're both leaving behind) with a moment of levity. Like we were talking about earlier, it's very common for conversations to snap back and forth between the two on a dime, but managing the balance of the tone is always tricky. So kudos for doing that here.
While it is kind of sad to see Katara and Aang breaking apart as irrevocably as they seemed to be doing, it was nice that Zuko tried to step up to the plate a bit for Aang, even if Katara was having none of it. I guess it's just comforting to see that the romantic entanglements surrounding them haven't completely sundered their friendships at the same time, even if they have strained them.
Also, before I close this out, I have to say that the notion of Zuko wishing for a dreamless sleep was an incredibly subtle, poignant and sad moment, considering everything you managed to encapsulate in that one line. The idea that the War has screwed them up so badly that their dreams and nightmares are one in the same; that even when they have each other, it isn't a guarantee of a peaceful sleep... that's some heavy stuff indeed. Well done!
Another solid chapter (no surprise there), and I'm looking forward to the next one!
| jazzpha chapter 1 . 12/28/2011
A review? What is this devilry!
I'm just sorry I couldn't get to it yesterday; time slipped though my fingers. But hey, better late than never, right? Let's start at the top.
I thought this chapter worked very well as an introduction. Starting it off in the middle of an intense recon operation was a nice choice, since dropping the reader right into the middle of the action forces them to pay attention from word one. Beginning with the scouting bit rather than jumping right into the raid itself (which I assume will happen soon enough) was also good, since it's easier to establish character relationships and dynamics in quiet moments as opposed to loud, chaotic ones.
And speaking of character dynamics, I really enjoyed the fact that you used Zuko as the POV here; seeing his internal conflict over how to treat Katara was good stuff. It's a hard balance to strike in that kind of relationship, and I assume the tension on that front will continue to build for a while before either of them say anything to clear the air. Of course, Katara might surprise me, but that remains to be seen.
Seeing Zuko get a chance to cut loose a bit in terms of his soldiering prowess with the sprint through the forest was also fun, and I hope he gets more chances in the future to demonstrate what skills a life of military training can give someone.
Inara going after Zuko was amusing, as was Zuko's indignation over being slightly objectified... but you also did a good job of including some real potential snags in the midst of an otherwise comedic exchange. That's a difficult thing to balance, so well done there. I'm interested to see how the state of Katara and Zuko's relationship evolves over the course of this story, and how often (and to what extent) they each let their pride complicate things unnecessarily.
All in all, this was a really solid chapter that got me excited to read the next one, and that's what it's all about. Good work!
| Zepphyra.Snow.Storm chapter 7 . 10/24/2011
I love how you made Zuko... I mean he's exactly like my boyfriend. No joke. lol I would marry this Zuko XD Dayum this makes me think Katara should literally be crackin the whip here... I mean this is a total bondage relationship set up! I mean he has the ability to top but Katara is his Mistress...
But I meantioned my bf earlier... it freaked me out cuz this wasn't the 1st calter that reminded me of him. Then Zuko called Katara Kitten... that was too much. My nickname is Kitty or only for him, Kitten XD so yeah, a little freaky :P
| Meadowbrook chapter 19 . 9/5/2011
This story was really interesting! I enjoyed it very much. Can't wait to read the sequel!