Reviews for The Viridian Isles
Rumbuss chapter 1 . 12/11/2013
FINISHHHHM pleaseeeeee!
Gitana del Sol chapter 1 . 6/27/2011
not too shabby :] i am glad that i peer pressured you into posting! jajaja! Jack is difficult to grasp but i think you have done a nice job so far. i'll definitely be looking at that as you continue. i also liked the dialogue between Jack and the other pirates and how they were a little suspicious of Jack at first but then quickly reassured with a quick "Well mate, we're all pirates here." :] i also liked that you used proper grammar for Jack! it bothers me so much when people use slang for Jack. he has an accent, a pirate's way of talking but it's educated! i know i know, almost contradictory but there you have it. please don't change that. the only spelling error i like is "Wot?" instead of "what?" and THAT is only on occasion.

critique: it was a bit short but as you said this was only an intro, i understand. at the beginning i think you were a little too OVER-describing, trying to get every action, thought, and motivation in. for example, the last sentence of the first paragraph: "He strained his ears, being nosy and wanting to hear what they were whispering about." you don't need to tell us readers that he is nosy or curious; we will assume that if you just say "he strained his ears to catch what the old pirates were whispering about". it's not a really bad thing or anything, just a bit overdone, if you catch my drift. let the reader make inferences. last, i am a bit confused when you say "Espanola". do you mean "española", a lady from Spain? or "Hispaniola", the Caribbean island? i think you mean the latter, seeing as at the end of this that is where they are sailing off to. it's spelled Hispaniola, mate :]

all-in-all, a job well done! that's the beauty about writing: you can never get worse, only better, and tehre are no limits to where it can take you :] update when you can. bit of advice that i got from a reviewer when i frist started: haste makes waste. don't rush
AleydaSparrow13 chapter 1 . 6/19/2011
great start! awesome, cant wait for what will happen next
liine 95 chapter 1 . 6/18/2011
continuar porfavor hay intriga ! :D
Harrison chapter 1 . 6/17/2011
i like it so far! now on with chapter 2! ) is angelica or barbossa gonna be in it? just wondering D
IamStoopKid chapter 1 . 6/17/2011
Yay for Angelica! Please don't make them all angst I hate that haha. Oh and it's España not espanola just so u know cuz it was in the last chapter like 4 times wrong... Haha

Update soon! :)