|Reviews for Toy Soldier|
| random-k chapter 1 . 4/5/2013
Its chilling how true it is
| somebodi-else chapter 1 . 3/22/2013
This was beautiful. I have never seen someone take vauge inklings to what might be a wholly disturbed society, and present the reader with this deep analylitical piece that describes such a society in depth, down to every last depraved brick in such detail. I applaud you. I feel as though it would be impossible for this not to be the true beleifs.
Please never stop writing. :)
| Okkusenman chapter 1 . 1/11/2013
I almost wish the manga would ponder on the whole "child soldier" aspect of it all. Almost all of the protagonists are under eighteen and yet they've seen such things.
| BiblioMatsuri chapter 1 . 11/23/2012
A story of idealism and cruelty...
| lea chapter 1 . 8/11/2012
this was depressing the Children are used, used a shields, soldiers, anything and everything for another's greed without a care of what will become of them and those who tried to stop it die and all their efforts become dust in the wind. but i think the worst part is it happens in our world.
| Laforet chapter 1 . 11/21/2011
Apologies for the lack of reviews. I get too caught up reading to stop and review. I always wondered how Sasori got to be the shinobi he became. In the anime, Chiyo just says Sasori turned bad because of the "evil teachings of the Sand Village" but that's it. I always love when a fan fic author fills in those blanks in the story. That was so true about Itachi. I also enjoy someone making Hiruzen out as a bad guy because he was. He did good things, yes, but he was human, too, and he did make mistakes (Orochimaru, for instance). Thank you for another awesome story.
| QuietShadowz chapter 1 . 10/24/2011
yup that is a very cynical way of looking at the ninja world...I like it its not all suger coated and stuff awesome job
| twentyonepilates chapter 1 . 8/17/2011
"Wind them up and set them loose on the world."
That was what hooked me.
Brilliant story, very insightful. Thanks for writing and sharing it.
| Sofsofi chapter 1 . 6/27/2011
What I liked most about your OS? Besides the fact that it is well-written and explores the psyche so very well, I liked how you made out Hiruzen to not be the white Kage everyone had thought him to be. Until we realize how many mistakes he's made and notice that, in the end, Hiruzen wasn't "that" strong. His judgment wasn't that kind, and truly belonged to a shinobi world. Great work, as always.
| fiesa chapter 1 . 6/23/2011
A very insightful story - with many different ways open for interpretation, I think.
First of all, thank you for introducing Shikaku into a story! I can't remember whether you have done so before but I love him and I'm glad he has some time on stage, as well. Of course, the reason why he has it is tragic. The fact that he cannot sleep for such long times shows how much people get hurt by things that have to be done, and how much it influences them. Of course, in the main story, he seems like a calm person and a good father, but he has made his own experiences, as well, and noone can tell how he looks on the inside. Or what he dreams of that makes him too scared to sleep.
Anko is a character I love, too, and your Anko is another one in a row of tragic characters. I like the way you describe how she came to be who she is, even though it's so sad. Same with Sasori. Though I don't read much about him, it was interesting to get to know him a bit better in your story.
The difference between Suna and Konoha which you pointed out were interesting, as well. I've never thought of it like that but Konoha has a few shinobi who probably never would have passed a thorough psychical examination. Itachi is the best example. I like your version of him - the Itachi who hated killing and fighting, and I agree it was the beginning of the end that he was so good in what he hated doing so much.
I've expected Minato to change the laws regarding child soldiers and I'm glad he did so. The more sad it was that his orders were revoked when Hisuzen took over the office again. And here is the place for interpretation I mentioned before.
When I read the last sentence for the first time it sounded like the Third didn't care about the children as long as they fought and stayed alive, something that made him look like a villain for a few seconds. But then, he cares for the fact that they stay ALIVE, too. Perhaps he thinks it's better to break their minds so they won't break in a fight, now matter how much it costs. He prefers a broken child that's able to defend itself to a sane child untouched by war that will die in the first encounter...
His thought, of course, is preferable to instant death, and still I wish children could grow up happy and unscathed by fear and war and blood.
It's a double-edged sword, the dilemma you voice here, or so it seems to me. Thank you for this story!
| cerise888 chapter 1 . 6/18/2011
And you did it again! :D
An excellent piece of writing with insightful observations keen enough to cut a reader's heart. Packs a punch in the gut, too. I love how you characterize Minato as the one who tried to institute a change, only to have it crumble when he died. Naruto's world is truly a sad one. Hopefully the protagonist will be able to accomplish the very thing that Minato could not. BTW, congrats on reaching 1000 stories. Keep on writing!
| Miss Epiphany chapter 1 . 6/18/2011
Brilliant. A really lovely fic - although I'm not sure the term 'lovely' is appropriate in this case. Thought-provoking, is perhaps better.
The voice and phrases are a bit confusing ('we're sure you've seen them') - but it's cleared up at the end, when you work it out.
I like that you've used the standard Japanese way of putting the surname before the forename - it goes well with the tone.
You've clearly put a lot of thought into each and every statement, and trust me, it shows.
I just wanted to know if I've read it the way you intended - Hiruzen is speaking as an unreliable narrator? The 'we' and the last sentence reminded me of that and, it could certainly be read that way.
Congratulations are in order! Your 999th fic! A marvellous feat. I look forward to reading your 1000th fic.
| Chocolate Pencil chapter 1 . 6/17/2011
Once again, a wonderful job. I liked the comparison to toy soldiers and how each shinobi related to that. I liked Shikaku's the best, but they were all really good.
| xporcelain chapter 1 . 6/17/2011
this is so sadly and eerily true. the naruverse is actually a veeeery twisted place, when you think about it. anyways, great job. (:
| GoldenHorde chapter 1 . 6/17/2011
Do you have anyone related to you or close that is serving. I know several and they saw death and they were just barley past 18. This feels slightly rushed, it needs a little, more to make it shine, but it is still good. Have to say, it did make me a little sick.