|Reviews for Girls' Night Out|
| Edhla chapter 1 . 5/2/2013
Disclaimer: not familiar with the fandom, sorry :) That said, this was really interesting and quite well-written and I enjoyed reading it- thought it could easily be expanded into a multichapter fic of some detail.
The only thing that sort of jumped out at me for critique was your use of dialogue tags, which can sometimes become a little repetitive. Toward the end you have "Ling-Ling snickers" (which is fine), and then a couple of lines later, "Ling-Ling critiques." The first one is great, but the second is a bit repetitive in format and comes across as a said-bookism. If it were mine, I'd be tempted to go for an action tag or rework the phrasing so you don't constantly have "[Character Name] [Dialogue Tag]" as your format. Good luck x
| metsfan101 chapter 1 . 10/10/2011
this was a good chapter