|Reviews for UnderWorlders|
| Xxdamnedforeverxx chapter 2 . 9/25/2011
Awesome blowjob, alfie!
| Alistine chapter 1 . 9/22/2011
Wow. I'm hooked.
Let me just say that usually, if an author claims they won't continue a story unless they get reviews, I won't touch it again. I believe the writing should speak for itself.
In this case, though, the writing does speak for itself. You have complete mastery of grammar, setting, plot, and characters, and that's hard to find on this site. This story has the potential to be absolutely epic, so please continue!
| XxDamned ForeverXx chapter 1 . 6/19/2011
I really like this its cute and well please?
| HiddenChaser chapter 1 . 6/19/2011
I love the writing style you did. It was a great start.
| HaphazardPeach chapter 1 . 6/18/2011
This definitely has potential, I'm curious to see where it goes.
The only con/crit I really have for it is that it feels very rushed. Maybe take a little more time to elaborate on a situation? Like when Ivan yells that he loves Alfred - maybe point out that the room grew silent, everyone looking at him, and then have him realise he spoke in English.
Perhaps its the feel you were going for, but the fact that 1-2 months pass in this short chapter jsut feels too fast.