Reviews for Fistfight
brigitwritesstuff chapter 1 . 3/7
This story has potential, but I would suggest putting more emotion into it. Like when you told the reader that Alanzo's mother was murdered, it felt a little abrupt. When someone is suprised or shouting, it would help to use an exclamation point instead of a period.
Qoheleth chapter 1 . 6/26/2012
Dear AlanEatsSkittles:

If it's an original story, what's it doing in the Never Back Down subcategory? (Or even on this site at all, instead of Fictionpress-dot-Com?)

Sincerely,

Qoheleth