Reviews for Amusement |
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Ryoji Mochizuki chapter 1 . 10/2/2017 huh, cool, pls write the gold one |
fluffpenguin chapter 1 . 9/13/2014 awesome story, wish you continued it though |
threerainydays chapter 1 . 5/24/2013 That was awesome. There were moments where I literally laughed out loud, it was great. I love seeing how people characterize Red and your version is definitely one of the best I've seen. It's hilarious but at the same time highly believable. Thanks for the laughs, I really liked this. |
chjoogdssacvbj chapter 1 . 11/30/2012 Lolol. I am cracking up XD Great job! |
Do a Barrel Roll chapter 1 . 6/8/2012 I wish this was in the game. |
Girloveswaffles5 chapter 1 . 2/15/2012 I almost busted a gut reading this, Especially the last part! Great job! |
digipokefangirl34 chapter 1 . 9/24/2011 This fic is downright hilarioius! XD |
Fatalis Ultima chapter 1 . 9/12/2011 You really need to continue this! One for every protagonist in the series! It would be awesome if you did the Gold one! And hilarious! |
E-123 Omega mk2 chapter 1 . 8/1/2011 This thing just made me burst out laughing. Just for the heck of it, why don't you write out when Ethan comes for a battle? (Still can't believe you based this off of fanart.) |
JohnTitor chapter 1 . 8/1/2011 I really really liked this fic. Loved your interpretation of Red. Loved the whole Lyra being talkative, but then being shy when he hit on her. Great job. Not so much a fan of yaoi, even if he's just acting so probably won't read the sequel. |
Darkpetal16 chapter 1 . 7/29/2011 :D Oh Red you're so silly~ D: Poor Lyra though, after all that training to be defeated so easily... Oh well, she's still my favorite character. Anywho, back to the story. I thought it was excellently written and for having not edited-you did an amazing job. The story itself is pretty interesting, not to mention funny. So overall, great story! |
Tri17 chapter 1 . 6/20/2011 This story has made my day! I love it! I love Red's thoughts, his characterization, everything! And I absolutely love the ending! It was amazing! Awesome job, this story is going in my favorites! |
fhfhfhhhrh chapter 1 . 6/20/2011 Oh my! YES! You should have continued with that idea of Red "flirting" with the next challenger. I would have laughed so hard, but the way you left it made me feel really amused. Actually I don't think I want to know what happens next, it's funny as it's left. The whole fiction is, well. . . kinda pointless? XD I mean that in the best way possible. It was really good and the way you analysed Red's thought was really interesting, but I naturally just felt disappointed when he didn't do anything at all after his small flirtatious stand with Lyra. If he was to be more of a dick, then I'm sure he would have taken his actions further. "Manly man"? Um. . . What? I guess you're saying this man would be more masculine than most men Red would see. You could say "rough-looking man", "bulky man", "rugged man" or something like that. "Manly man" seems a bit meshy. It's sounds kinda funny actually. I was blown away by how big and fat Red's ego is all the way through. You did really well on that part, and he really reminded me of you, although I don't think you could be arsed to chat up a little lady. You could have written more about the battle, I suppose. Maybe explain Lyra's determination throughout, and prove to the reader that Red is far more professional than she. Is she nervous when she battles against him? I thought the battle - which is one of the 'things' about Pokemon - was too short. There could have been more to it. I love the thoughts that whirl around this one-shot. All in all, I thought this fiction wasn't bad at all. You're really great at writing, but you don't seem to write a lot. I think you should because your grammar, structure of sentences and everything seem fine to me, although I may be wrong. Good work! |