Reviews for A New Place To Stay |
---|
![]() ![]() ![]() Fantastic story thank you |
![]() ![]() ![]() part of this chapter is a repeat of a previous chapter., enjoying story so far |
![]() ![]() You should do a story we’re Harry has a half sister who is the daughter of Severus Snape and Lily Evans-Potter |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very interesting story but unnecessarily harsh on Hermione. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really enjoyed this story! Its beautifully written! Could you write one about how harry met his wife? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well... I enjoyed this, despite it being the single most overwritten piece of fiction I've ever read. It's nearly 360,000 words, and at least 250,000 of those words were superfluous. Every line of dialogue and/or action doesn't need a full paragraph of explanation of the character's feelings behind it; in fact, most shouldn't have ANY explanation of the character's feelings, as that robs the reader of divining those feelings for themself. Still, the quality of the plot kept it interesting, despite having to slog through all of that, so you clearly have talent. I know this was written a few years ago, but looking at your story list I see works with even longer word counts - get yourself a good editor who will slash and burn away all the unnecessary verbiage and that can only help you. Good luck in your continuing pursuits! |
![]() ![]() ![]() The “lemon drop eating bastard” absolutely killed me, i was on the floor giggling like nevet before. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I only recently found this story and absolutely loved it! I liked watching the gradual shift in their relationship- it made it more realistic. I wish that Harry had had an adult like this in the books. Thank you for sharing! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I've never understood why the character - and a lot of readers - see using the notes in that book as cheating. I've bought used textbooks before and some have notes in them. I mean, its definitely buyer beware but its not like having an answer key to a test, just another information source. If he had a tutor who said 'this is a better method' is that cheating? I feel with Hermione, it was more 'you are doing better than I am so you must be cheating.' |
![]() ![]() ![]() well phooey, I've been commenting all evening without being logged in. darn my luck. :) |
![]() ![]() Is it canon that there was a taboo on his name? Because with Dumbles being convinced he would return, his insistence on using 'Voldemort' just becomes so darn irresponsible. Or did he only tell Harry to use it? See, all these logic holes are why fanfic has so many opportunities to make Dumbledore a manipulative jerk. |
![]() ![]() I notice that there is no mention of Sirius writing Harry again this whole term...or did I miss it. |
![]() ![]() lol I love the Cheshire Cat of it all with Dobby. |
![]() ![]() You know, I always thought it batty when they were sending Harry around with a guard when they could have just allowed him to floo or apparate. But it occurred to me this time that they could have sent the families along with Harry under his invisibility cload as well. They could have created a pretense that he was sent by portkey or whatever even if they did want him to 'be a child' and go on the train. Of course, then they also did the whole polyjuice-broom-mob bit later on. Wizards are daft. |
![]() ![]() ![]() this is one of the best stories with dadSev that I've ever read. Great job! |