Reviews for The Loss of Innoncence
Sister of Mayhem chapter 2 . 4/29/2013
Wow, Kings and Queens, aren't you sweet... :-)

All right, perhaps there are some errors in this story, but at least you took the idea and did something with it. The story has a fast pace, but it didn't bother me, on the contrary.

I admit I skipped the part where you introduced every family member. To me it's not really relevant to know how everybody looks. But the chemistry between Draco and Harry is good. You should continue this. Good luck!
Bloody kitten chapter 3 . 4/6/2013
Please update soon and greet job so far!
Jackie-B-123 chapter 3 . 1/6/2013
I look forward to seeing where this goes.
guest chapter 3 . 12/1/2012
when will you upload more i love it
Of Kings and Queens chapter 1 . 2/29/2012
Ok. Two things.

1) this story sucks. It is written so stupidly and childishly it's rediculous.

2) it's plagiarized. Wow. Aren't you fucking pathetic. do the world a favor and stop posting soneone else's work like a retarded monkey who can copy and paste. Go die somewhere.
Life Sucks 4 Me chapter 3 . 1/29/2012
Awe! At least he's out of that hell! Awwwwwwe now he's with his old friend! That's so cute! I can't wait for the next one... Though the first made my stomach turn... :-$ CAN'T WAIT!
whoever chapter 3 . 11/20/2011
Chapter 3 was much better written than the previous author's chapters- good job. I look forward to the next update!
sjrodgers23 chapter 3 . 10/14/2011
I love the story so far please come back and write more of this story thank you very much
Silencer chapter 1 . 8/26/2011
Okay- there a few mistakes here. The main one being you go past moments faster than a speeding bullet. Try to describe -for example- Harry getting beat 'till pasted out. Describe the punches and the bruises. As well as Harry's feelings and his pain.

You also use American terms for a British book/movie.

Mom Mum

1st Grade (If you say they're 7) Either P.2 or P.3 (Primary 2 & 3)

You also describe unnecisary things at the beginning like their full names- appearances , family, backstory, etc.

As well as 30 lbs is a non-reachable weight without dying. Most people end up dead at 90lbs. Even for a 10 year old.

I advise you get a "proof reader" or "beta reader" who's basically an editor whom reads you'r fic and maybe takes bits out, puts bits in.

-Kellie.

(Apologies for my English. It's not my native language)
Hazel Moonlight chapter 3 . 8/23/2011
Love love love this story . It's so well written. But would harry be going to school or anything like that it would add a twist to the story.

Update soon

Xoxo
Bam4Me chapter 3 . 8/23/2011
Oh. I can't wait to see how this turns out! How cute too!
Mrs. Tavi Malfoy chapter 3 . 8/23/2011
O cliff hanger! Please update soon. I'd like to see how Harry reacts to getting his best friend back, and that she doesn't seem to like him.
Bam4Me chapter 2 . 7/17/2011
Yay! This is such a good story that I can't wait for the third chapter!
xXxHeiress101xXx chapter 2 . 7/9/2011
Hi, you misspelled Coraline it's supposed to be Caroline.
sora-aeri chapter 1 . 6/22/2011
Can u update chapter two and three at the same time? Since most people read two already
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