|Reviews for Untitled Smutfic|
| IShipItAllAndThenSome chapter 1 . 9/27/2011
You were right. Abso-fuckin'-loutely no plot whatsoever.
| Queen of the Kassocracy chapter 1 . 6/27/2011
I just have a little bit of advice on how to expand and make this story better. This fic needs a tad bit of editing to make it easier to read. Dialogue should start a new paragraph as it is done in a book. This makes the story less clunky and makes it flow better. Some of the material you present also needs to either be explained or taken out all together. I do realize that you have some leeway given that this clearly would never happen and is not cannon, however some things may be too subtle or confusing for a reader to grasp. If you could add in some more details it would be helpful not only for you but for your readers also. I would suggest that you get a beta or a friend to read over your work. There are places where there are not spaces in between words mostly next to Blaine's name. This is also pretty similar to a story written by GeniaTheParadox just FYI. It is a fine story for the subject matter presented but clarification and formating would make this a better read.
| Basilisk Ishikir chapter 1 . 6/24/2011
WARNING THIS IS NOT A FLAME, JUST CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM!
1. Very, VERY vague.
2. You can't say "he" in a story, unless you indicate "who" first, very confusing since they are all "he's".
3. Background is confusing for all characters, why is Dave there? Why is a prude like Kurt there? Why can Puck get Kurt anytime he(puck)wants?
4. Very Meh, but not BAH!
This is a great story, but not as good as it COULD be. Good luck in future writings.