The angst and feeling in this fic were off the wall! Great job!

Probably one of the best, honest reactions to the memory charm I've seen.

Wonderful. Please write more muggle /squib HP fanfic.

Creepy, but good. I found this to be very thought-provoking if a bit morbid at times. I have to say I'm not really pleased with it but it's not because it's not well written it's more because I find it to be a very dark story. There wasn't any kind of resolution in any way for anybody in this story. not saying that every story has to have a happy ending, but I feel like this had a very open-ended ending.

this story is amazing

About 1/4 of the way through, and loose strands of hair are a common theme. Why not use polyjuice?

Hi,

Sadly depressing, but very well written.

Thank you for sharing your story.

Old-Crow

obliviation is horrific on many levels, the dresden files wizards are right to have the death penalty for memory modification like that

You know what? I absolutely loved this story because it shows, in no small way, one of the many reasons why a magical community shouldn't exist; why it wouldn't be as fun and fantasy like as many imagine. I remember being a child reading the first Harry Potter book and wishing so hard it was real and witches and wizards existed... A cute dream for a kid, but a nightmare from a realistic point of view. It is human nature to be evil. Humans always find excuses to deem themselves as superior to others, based on ridiculous notions such as superiority due to skin color, religion and so on. What if part of humanity was magical? The non magical would be treated like subhuman, like animals, like trash. So though the books are quite an adventure, I'm very happy the story is over once I close them.

Chilling story, though a very unsatisfying ending. All the evil bastards get away, nothing is changed, and justice is only meted out in exceptional cases, and by breaking inhuman law, instead of breaking an inhuman system.

This is very good. It doesn't become a grand epic about the fall of a society, or a full-scale biography. It is a nice sized short story that examines the problems of a society and human nature. This belongs in a FanFic version of a short story anthology. (You know, the kind that selects for merit.)

The allergy to magic is pulled out of the author’s ass to make the girl immune to legal obliviations. Likewise Bones was given an idiot ball to swear an Unbreakable Oath where a simple Confundus or Veritaserum would’ve sufficed.

Good idea but what about chapters? This is all one big long text like you did it from your smart phone. Yuck!

Very disturbing. But that's what you get when you dig beneath the surface of the Harry Potter universe. Sure, magic's cool an everything, but just look at their attitudes toward non magical people. Even the most pro muggle character (Arthur Weasley) treats Muggles as very clever animals.

Good story, well-written, I only noticed one problem: If Amelia poured over her book, it would get wet. The correct word is pored. Thanks for writing! -"-

A very, very well thought-out story. Kudos to you for the sheer depth of the concept and plot.