|Reviews for New Girls In Riverton|
| Ted Theodore Logan chapter 2 . 10/6/2011
Cute story but there are many gramatical errors. Also I found it hard to read because everything is pushed together. When someone says something new you should always start a new paragraph. It helps reader understand who said what. It's also more organized. I did like the idea of the story but at times I didn't understand who was talking. I've only read this one story but I'm sure you are a great author. The idea was something I wouldn't have thought of and it was great. Keep on writing.
Ted Theodore Logan (Sarah)
| Envylicious-Chan chapter 2 . 8/24/2011