Reviews for Make It Real
Guest chapter 1 . 7/17
Awesome story. Very sexy Hotch!
gitana082 chapter 1 . 12/9/2013
HOT.
AlpineHolly chapter 1 . 10/21/2012
I really liked what you did with this story, oh so romantic, and all around a very nicely written piece.
Guest chapter 1 . 7/6/2012
im on my best way of reading all of your stories tonight. thank you for this perfect way of spending my time:) anlemi
Spring7 chapter 1 . 5/21/2012
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cherrymystery chapter 1 . 5/12/2012
That was passionate but also so very romantic! And trust me when i say, i've read enough smut to know tht u dn't come across these 2 elements COMBINED as often as one would think! WELL DONE ;)
GiveInToTemptation chapter 1 . 11/19/2011
That was great! I liked the end, very cute :)
suallenparker chapter 1 . 11/12/2011
I liked it a lot! The banter between them at the beginning was funny, even though Hotch felt a bit OOC to me, because he was so loosened up and funny.

I loved the scene in the office and that they both were a bit insecure. It was sweet and hot and it felt like more than just sex. The end was perfect. I'd give him a second try too. And a third and a fourth… So well done!
iheartHP1234 chapter 1 . 10/3/2011
hot and cute! Great fic!
CaptainPagemaster chapter 1 . 7/19/2011
More! I wouldn't mind more banter and interaction between them. Great one-shot!
Scousedancer chapter 1 . 7/19/2011
WOW! That was amazing! Keep writing!
HPforever-after chapter 1 . 6/28/2011
Wow great job n luvd the ending ( second third fourth time) great job
x-MJ-x chapter 1 . 6/28/2011
Ok Girl...

This was so fabulous and I am only sorry that I didn't get the chance to read it earlier...

Wow, I am left kind of speechless after this one and you know that is unusual for me right? But you also know that I ALWAYS find something to say!

I just loved everything about it, I thought it was a brilliant interpretation of the prompt... It had just the right mix of sweet "I'll hold you if you hold me" kind of dancing and then as they become more confident how the flirtation, need and desire just seemed to go up a notch until I was getting a little hot under collar and feeling slightly like I was intruding on very personal intimate moment.

I adored how you had Hotch making the first move and approaching herand I love how you retained some of the qualities from 'Sacrifices and Saviors' like the kind of dark, brooding romantic hero thing Hotch is totally working... I think every woman wants to be with this guy right?

I also thought the transition from dance floor to office was perfect. Since they were in front of a crowd it was kind of impossible for them to escape unnoticed but then that just added to the awkward sexiness of these two which you are just the Queen of! When he nodded at people who were staring, I felt like he was saying "yeah look at us... it's me leaving with her"... It was delicious and yes I spend way too much thinking about these little nuances I know! But I adore your writing and I always feel like there are two elements to your work - the obvious (as in what you present for us by way of plot) and then all the hidden facets you take us (or in some cases just me!) down.

Then when they were searching for a room and the doors were unyielding I found myself laughing at them purely because they were clearly desperate to just rip each other's clothes off... That's what I love about you my dear, you are the Queen of understated making love (as S and S proves) but also of fast little episodes like these... Don't ever stop writing the way you do... It's fast becoming like sunshine to me, there's always something to make me smile from ear to ear...

Oh and the loving itself, I almost died and went to Heaven. From those first tentative moments and that initial kiss right through to the frantic undressing and Hotch's thoughts about the way things should be done compared with the way things could be done.

What I noticed here was that your narrative and the way you described everything so slowly and meticiously was the 'should' part and Hotch's desperation was the 'could'... it was like a battle between narrative style and character voice and that is an amazing technique and just so utterly readable...

Oh and the love bite... am I wrong for getting Doyle allusions again? Do I spend way too much time thinknig about him? Probably but you know, it's only because I can't stop thinknig about Emily's return...

I just loved how that bite meant that whatever else happened between them subsequent to this, she would never be able to deny that it happened... Isn't Hotch just one clever man... I just thought it was gorgeousness and I loved the openess of the ending and that she was willing to let him earn a reprieve... Yummy...

Love love loved it as always my darling.

Love,

Michelle xx
nataliebianca chapter 1 . 6/27/2011
Teehee, that was a fun little story, very cheeky ;) and very, very hot. You so rock at H/P. Love xoxo
charmony chapter 1 . 6/27/2011
Hot hot HOT!

Whew! I think I'll go take a cold shower now.

Brilliant!
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