|Reviews for Narrative Discretion|
| Rachel Noelle chapter 1 . 7/29/2014
I have to say I was following along right up until the end. I don't know if I'm just having an off day, but I'm not sure why they're discussing the poison. Is it the tentacles thing, the taint, or something else I missed in the context clues entirely? And the broken promise: was that about using the poison, or talking about it?
The narrative is well written, and you did a good job capturing many of the characters. I hope you have continued to write since this was posted. You have a good writing voice.
| Mialiah chapter 1 . 10/3/2012
Choo! Shivery. The whole turning women into broodmothers thing has always been creepy, and I /always/ kinda wondered why Ander's didn't bring it up in the game. Not that it matters, really. This is SO freaking well written.
| mille libri chapter 1 . 8/21/2012
That was a tricky way to tell the story, but it worked beautifully and the reveal was powerful - I hadn't seen it coming at all, that particular truth of the Deep Roads, and then everything else immediately clicked into place. Really well done!
| BlackLeatherRain chapter 1 . 7/8/2011
It is evident in game play that Varric enjoys his bardic creative licenses, but it hadn't occurred to me - despite what we know from prior installments - that there are things they would see that are just so horrifying that they cannot be retold.
Great job with this.
| thechickenlittle chapter 1 . 7/4/2011
oh wow. awesome story! this fits perfectly with the reality of how awful the deep roads really are, including the threat of broodmother-hood. *shudders* ewwww...
| Anonymous chapter 1 . 6/30/2011
Excellently done, though I must admit it took me a little while to remember just how horrific the broodmother sequence was in Origins.
| tulzdavampslayer chapter 1 . 6/26/2011
Wow. Perfect. Loved it.
| Syntia13 chapter 1 . 6/26/2011
Holy sh*t, that was beautiful.
The double layer, the story told and the one not told, is fantastic. I love it.