Reviews for My worse enemy
Guest chapter 2 . 7/5/2012
Pretty good begining but it falls apart in the last few sentences take away the "get out you bastard" and the "as you wish" because they wouldn't talk like that. Other than that keep going!
kataragurl27 chapter 2 . 9/15/2011
i like it
bellzlovesbooks1 chapter 1 . 8/14/2011
this was simply BEAUTIFUL! TEEN WOLF & i like the twist you put in the end.. keep it up & please do another chapter cause i want more! :)
wolfpack3422 chapter 1 . 7/25/2011
Cool start to this story, I've been iffy on these two shipped but this is starting to bring me around. Look forward to more, thanks for posting!

~wolfpack3422
Edjen chapter 1 . 7/16/2011
That was so freaking like Stiles would think! OH MY GOD! Fantastic! Great I have no words. I loved it. Hey...wait... do not let it be a one shot. Please? *Hands cookies for your muse*
ArbarbTube chapter 1 . 7/15/2011
I always wanted them to get together! It's great, keep writing!
AmethystSilverDragon chapter 1 . 7/13/2011
Please continue, pretty, pretty please with sugar and cherry on top :)
ryu433 chapter 1 . 7/3/2011
wow i liked the movies and this show is way better. i would love to see more of this story. and you can now put it in the tv shows. just thought you would like to now.
Kisuke17Night chapter 1 . 7/2/2011
more pleassssseeeeeeeeeeeee
xxxxxxPUCKLOVER20xxxxxx chapter 1 . 7/1/2011
I just absolutely love this pairing, whenever i see these two on the show, i always feel like they are kinda flirting with each other when Derek threatens Stiles. You did an awesome job with this and i cant wait till the next chapter.
Paper Route chapter 1 . 6/30/2011
Wow. This was pure JOY! Thank you for such a beautiful creation!
XXXMystery chapter 1 . 6/29/2011
Good to see that someone else noticed the GLARING homoeroticism between theose 2. Everytime Derek threatened Stiles, I just heard Unresolved Sexual Tension.
SocksForDobby chapter 1 . 6/29/2011
I was hesitant to click on this story, because the title itself has terrible grammar and capitalization (My Worst Enemy as opposed to My worse enemy). I should have listened to my instincts, as I could barely finish the second paragraph.

I would go back and study proper grammar and writing. Grammar really is a pain, but the basics shouldn't be hard to grasp. There are some excellent sites out there that I would link to, but does not allow links.

First-person ('I did this' as opposed to 'he did this') is really hard to pull off. Most serious/experienced writers avoid writing in it, because it comes across very amateurish (not your story specifically, but even published novels written in that POV). The repeated "I mean"s and ill-placed commas are very distracting, so of course I suggest reading more about proper punctuation. The best thing you can do to improve your writing is to read, though. Not most fanfiction, but articles and published books. You take in comma usage and grammar without even realising it!

I hope you take the time to learn more about how to write properly, and edit this story. I would really like to read a Derek/Stiles, and I think with effort on your part, you could have a brilliant one :) Good luck.
Iloveyaoi2much chapter 1 . 6/29/2011
Awesome start! Plz plz update to the next chapter! :):)
elaine30432 chapter 1 . 6/28/2011
i really like this. this is my fav. couple pairing for this show i cant wait for the nexr chapter! if you like jacksonxscott would you read my one shot about them? thank you! and please upload the next chapter soon :)
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