Reviews for Part of the Script
Melle22 chapter 8 . 3/18
oh gawd. i have tears in my eyes. again. this is a brilliantly written. i've not had to deal with such a situation, but this feels so real. her pain is profound. her confusion and denial is realistically written. This is beautiful in its realism, and very very sad.
PuzzledBookie63 chapter 9 . 12/12/2014
Stop. Please. I was reading this and Ben Rector's "When a Heart Breaks" started playing at, like, the perfect moment and I'm crying now because JJ. And your writing was so good that it just made the story fantastic.
Mangst chapter 9 . 8/12/2012
Excellent. Having JJ focus on the death notification script was genius. :)
OfficiallyObsessedwithPyro chapter 8 . 7/5/2012
Goddamn you are good at making me cry.
Mierke chapter 9 . 5/12/2012
Heartbreaking. JJ's shock and grief, her dissociation from the horrible reality, are portrayed so beautifully it will haunt me for a long time. Thank you for writing this.
AndreeaRaducan chapter 9 . 3/28/2012
Oh my god...I just read the whole thing. It's so sad at the end! Now I want to know if they manage to resuscitate her, but I'm assuming they don't.

Wow, I'm actually so sad now. Such a powerful story. Thanks for a moving read.

SQ215 xxx
ficdirectory chapter 9 . 1/14/2012
This broke my heart the first time I read it and has the same effect the second time. This was so, super well-written, if it wasn't super late right now I'd happily read every one of your CM fics in a row just to see what I've been missing. I'll just have to wait til tomorrow to indulge in all the goodness. Thanks for a great story.
ficdirectory chapter 8 . 1/14/2012
It's interesting how seeing Jack prompts JJ to remember nightmares she has of Haley's last moments. For some reason, I'd never considered that might give the rest of the team nightmares, though it seems entirely plausible. I love Jack trying to comfort JJ and Garcia saying her parents would be there and they "loved a good party" and how Spencer pulls JJ away before she can "say anything inappropriate." So right on.
ficdirectory chapter 7 . 1/14/2012
The complexity of JJ's emotions and raw grief is amazing here. I love how she is so thrilled by the baked ziti and then concerned Henry won't eat it. Confused about where Will and Henry are. For some reason, the line that has struck me the most both times I've read it is when JJ insists, "They're out back!" I don't know why but I can really hear her saying it in that moment and her behavior being just how you described.
ficdirectory chapter 6 . 1/14/2012
I'm loving these little moments between JJ and the team, individually. I like how compassionate Hotch is and how he simply is there with JJ in her grief and is exactly what she needs him to be. It's also interesting how she thinks back to being taught by Hotch how to deliver notifications in the first place. Not something I had considered before, but I can see it, nonetheless.
ficdirectory chapter 5 . 1/14/2012
This chapter might be the most heartbreaking of them all. Because she doesn't even know Penelope. It's great for it's unexpectedness and for the fact that it's not overdone. I like your stark style in this and the short chapters. Great work.
ficdirectory chapter 4 . 1/14/2012
The fact that she is in the treehouse for the duration of this chapter is heartbreaking. She's trying so hard for composure and so obviously in shock, watching Spencer case the place. :(
ficdirectory chapter 3 . 1/14/2012
I love how JJ clings to the script she has learned here and persists in asking Reid to come over, and then will not continue talking to him while he drives. So interesting how some people will cling desperately to rules in the face of tragedy. JJ seems like this kind of person.
ficdirectory chapter 2 . 1/14/2012
What I loved about this chapter were the little moments. The small lines. ("Someone, right?") And how, though the team overlooks birthdays and other important moments, they always seemed to know just what JJ needed from the lemon poppyseed muffin to the Celestial Seasonings Peppermint tea. And the part at the end about Henry having shaved his eyebrows off and there being a closed casket and "Would she even have a choice?" broke my heart in the way honest and beautifully written things do.
ficdirectory chapter 1 . 1/14/2012
Just found this in kdzl's favorites and wow! Seriously have I never read any of your stories before? And if not, how is that possible? JJ is my favorite character and this is just jaw-droppingly good. I read it once already, and then a second time so I can comment on each section. I love JJ's inner-monologue and how the officer is "doing it wrong" and giving "too much detail." "Too much detail." Seems SO realistic and her mentally admonishing him for not trying harder to stick around. Her shock is visceral. So well done. Hurrah for you!
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