Reviews for Two for One
Guest chapter 1 . 10/3/2015
Very nice story, but let's be honnest , I've never heard of a first time being orgasmic for a girl, faaaaar from it!
Lauren Saint chapter 1 . 1/25/2015
Haha poor Ron gets nothing, nice one shot :D
i am mark son of hades chapter 1 . 8/3/2014
hell of a good story i think you should continue it
Guest chapter 1 . 7/26/2014
Can you write a lemon with hermione and viktor that was briefly mentioned in this chapter?
S.L. Cooper chapter 1 . 6/7/2014
Good story. :)
Qoheleth chapter 1 . 1/25/2014
Dear randompandattack:

"If you don't like that kind of thing..." What if it's a question of more than just likes and dislikes?

Frosty Wolf chapter 1 . 11/9/2013
A nice read.
doubledamn chapter 1 . 11/7/2013
I hate being jealous of fictional characters...
Silver Heart11DOOM chapter 1 . 9/7/2013
more plz
Animalover205 chapter 1 . 7/17/2013
Not bad, I liked this one.
Runecutter chapter 1 . 5/7/2013
Okay. As lemons go this is not a bad one, the style is okay and the action gets along pretty nicely.

BUT and it is a really big but... it doesn't feel halfway right for a bunch of not very experienced 4th years on the verge between 14 and 15 and for most of them describing their first "all out" experiences... actually the scene where you "lost me" was the short glimpse at Hermione on the ship acting like out a professional porn video... Yeah right like the character is even distantly like that... on the first date with a guy who can't even say her name the right way then instant shower sex... of COURSE.

And it's not that i'm uncomfortable about their ages, i'm uncomfortable about how this does not even TRY to make it somewhat believable for their ages and several virgins included, this is nothing more than some porn tape adapted to fit Harry Potter with the names and places... which does not make it into a good HP story or even a good HP lemon PWP moment...

Especially since there's absolutely no need to let them have a go at it like rabbits right during the ballnight... why not make them date first and set the shagging into a more distant future where they were a little more credible with going about it like pros? It's all about context, situation and integrating of the characters into your setting. THIS does it (regrettably poorly) and could have done much better.
Igor De Souza Santos chapter 1 . 5/2/2013
Stephanie O chapter 1 . 3/12/2013
I can just imagine the rumors that will be flying after seeing that little "breakfast" show!
Guest chapter 1 . 2/19/2013
aahhh the wonder of twins only a few men can experience that in a life time and sadly i am not one of them :( far
LordXeenTheGreat chapter 1 . 1/8/2013
harry, my hero!
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