|Reviews for The Voyage of the Starship Hedwig|
| Wonderbee31 chapter 7 . 8/21/2011
Whew, it looks like it's going to come right down to the wire here, and will be hopeful that things turn out for the best, even as the wizards continue to get stymied one way or the other when they try to take an offensive role.
| orochi.exe chapter 6 . 8/20/2011
Awesome story! Continue this, It's Great!
| george17 chapter 6 . 8/14/2011
[there had been several other "Perenelles" before Nicolas had finally settled on this one.]
That's a great twist! I don't think I've ever saw anyone use that idea before and yet it seems so plausible for a 600 year old wizard! In hindsight you wonder why it's not used all the time.
Colonel Poshepny and the whole muggle situation seems kind of weak in a sense. You really can't imaging that the Prime Minister, let alone the President would have any real problem stopping or killing him if they are already capable of ordering their troops away. Then all the power he seems to have is crazy for a colonel. On the other hand it is no more unbelievable than the typical James Bond villain. It's no more ridiculous than the mysterious Colonel Green of Star Trek. It maybe only stands out a bit compared to how well everything else hangs together.
The wizards and Harry are doing some really stupid things. Yet, that's nothing new for wizards and this story takes place with 17 year old Harry who didn't even finish what is effectively his last year of high school. Also, contrary to typical fanon, this Harry is starting from canon and has no real leadership experience beyond a very small group and running a dueling club. He's mentally and physically exhausted from the Voldemort years. It's actually incredibly realistic that he makes screw ups especially at first. He is totally stressed out while being jerked in difference directions as he tries to figure out whose advice is correct.
| Inziladun chapter 6 . 8/14/2011
Good job with this chapter, I cant wait to read more.
| Trufla chapter 6 . 8/14/2011
Ok, this was a pretty good chapter. You filled in some of the areas I'd been wondering about regarding the other sentient magical races, dealing with the captured wizarding population, and at least some of the ship-related engineering issues. Harry's idea to neutralize the unruly elements in his passenger list makes a lot of sense, and I have to admit that I like the plan of using basilisk gaze via reflection to induce stasis on the fauna portion of the cargo. As long as the Mandrake Restorative Draught is a potion that has a decent shelf-life, they won't even need any brewing time on arrival to revive all the petrified beings.
On the matter of Harry's on-going personality alteration, I can see where Neville and some of the others might be concerned, but looking at things from Harry's side, he's dealing with a bunch of hide-bound traditionalists who are still playing the sort of games that almost got him killed, along with every single person that he still has any sort of feelings for. I can see where in this set of circumstances his tolerance has narrowed to a very thin thread. Harry can't afford to relax even the slightest amount until the Hedwig is in space and away.
The whole scene between Harry and the colonel makes way too much sense, it's a classic black op, and from the Mundane's side of things, getting one of their problems to deal with the other can only be a win-win situation. I wouldn't be surprised to find out that the detainment facility is booby-trapped with something like a deadman tactical nuclear device or some form of lethal bioweapon to deal with any rescue force. That recovery operation is going to be a pain, but I also can't see Harry not at least trying for a rescue. Hopefully, his figurative slaps to the cheeks of Luna shocked her out of her depression. I'll admit, her plan was what got a lot of Harry's most reliable strike force neutralized, but given that they were dealing with incorrect information about their enemy, setbacks were to be expected.
And finally, nice way to demonstrate just how much of a powerhouse Harry is magically. I can imagine just what sort of looks he gets now that people have a concrete measure of his power levels. That is one seriously impressive Space Expansion Charm.
Here's hoping your Muse continues to feel frisky for your inspiration.
| Wonderbee31 chapter 6 . 8/14/2011
Wow, a lot going on here, and really enjoyed some spots, while others made me think hard. First, it's sort of sad that Harry can use the crucio effectively, as it does show that he does mean to use it, unlike year five, he's got more than righteous anger going for him. Flamel turning out to be a pervy jerk is quite a different take, and will wonder if he will be making a pass at Ginny after the current Perenelle might meet an unfortunate accident, and if Ginny will fall to his wiles if he continues to set his sights on her? Will be looking forward to the launch and if the departure of the magicals might mean very bad things for Earth's ecosystem, and if the non magical's will realize that too late?
| m-f42 chapter 6 . 8/14/2011
I like the coup
| AiSard chapter 5 . 8/9/2011
loving the story, the whole starship thing is just on the right side of wacky and still be believable. Harry is complete crap at politics. would be really interesting if someone took a larger hand at fielding Harry's political field like Delacour and Aberforth did at that one meeting, but on a permanent basis. injecting a bit of political/leadership intrigue into the whole thing. the result of the shoddy politics is cropping up into the story which I cant quite decide if its a good thing or not. On one hand its a direct result of Harry's weakness in politics and larger-scale leadership skills. On the other hand it gives the story a feel of ..uncontrollability? kind of like theres a whole big story just underneath this one, but because we're looking at over Harry Potter's shoulders, Harry who doesn't seem too have that much of a politic's/leader's/manipulator's crafty acumen, it feels like we're missing a whole lot of it. social tides are happening and Harry doesn't have the skills to see it, but we see the effects of the tides afterwards. would be much more interesting if we could actually see it as it happens is my thought. though that would fatten up the content of the chapters as well i guess. anyways, thats just my opinion: bring in a political aide. the other thing that keeps nudging at me is the actual population thats in this hidey hole. I think I missed it but my understanding is that theres a paltry amount in here. probably no more than say.. 200? tops? or even just 50..? it seems like an insanely small amount to put in to a 'safe-house' when you've got one.. there doesn't seem to be missions out to kidnap more wizards nor any sort of recruitment drive. I would think that if the MoM, Hogwarts, Hogsmeade and the Quidditch World Cup just got annihilated the Wizarding World would be in a full-blown panic trying to find safety (or wandering confusedly to the MoM to be tagged by soldiers) On the flip-side, any thought of a community larger than that hiding in the Forbidden Forest seems implausible in terms of living space and Harry's leadership would become instantly moot in that case anyways. which has me in a conundrum on just how big this community at the moment is, as well as how big it'll be when they lift-off. Anyways, loved the fic and hope you update soon la.
| EmperorTippy chapter 5 . 8/7/2011
Meh, I could accept the muggle first strike and their actions in the first few chapters as setting the basic premise. But this is really going way too far with the muggle wank and is drastically understating what the wizards can do.
Story is crap.
| timt020 chapter 5 . 8/6/2011
Great story going to read your others now, update soon please.
| peopleareretarded chapter 5 . 8/6/2011
Definitely unique, one if the better and more interesting ideas on here..
| Trufla chapter 5 . 8/5/2011
Well, I guess that was a pretty straightforward wizard response to being pushed like this. While I can certainly see it as a logical response, given the established wizarding mindset, it's too bad that more of Harry's outlook weren't able to swing the thinking before this happened. On the other hand, if this setback doesn't prove to the survivors that getting the flock out of Dodge isn't the right plan, the entire Wizarding culture deserves to be stomped out, anyway.
I still want to know what's happening to some of the non-human magical cultures out there. The goblins got pretty much whacked during the initial overrun of the commerce centers, but what are groups like the merfolk, the centaurs, and others doing? I can see the merfolk just retreating away from any easy contact with humans while this whole thing plays out, but given the searching going on, I have trouble believing that any other groups like the centaurs can fool themselves into believing they are outside the effects of the fight.
You're still doing a great job, and I'll be looking forward to the next installment.
| Wonderbee31 chapter 5 . 8/5/2011
Oh dang it, I liked Luna's plan here, just too bad that the Military was planning ahead as well, and will look forward now to what happens when Flamel pops in, especially as they thought he was dead.
| Inziladun chapter 5 . 8/5/2011
It is a very entertaining story, at first I wasn't sure about reading it because I though that it may be a better plot for a crossover... but as I started reading it has gotten my attention and now I'm hooked.
I like that even though it is admitted that Harry is nothing great (the cannon one) he has lots of potential and he is willing to do what it takes to save them. I just hope to read some progression in his character: he starts to understand what the people need, Mr. Delacour teaches him a coule of things about politics,... in definitive, Harry needs to continue showing a drive to get things done. As long as Harry doesn't become the puppet of anyone I'll be happy.
Also, great job with Ginny, its the Ginny I've liked most in a long time. Maybe making her too similar to Bellatrix would be a mistake, but adding some of her traints is an improvment.
Anyway, I liked your work so far. Keep it up (please).
| Lady Jade Scribbler chapter 5 . 8/5/2011
I love this!