|Reviews for The Voyage of the Starship Hedwig|
| Bobboky chapter 7 . 8/21/2011
| mmendoza688 chapter 7 . 8/21/2011
Yes! Almost there!
| Inziladun chapter 7 . 8/21/2011
Now, this is evil, leaving us like this, waiting for something to happen during the rescue mission and then finding that it won't happen until the next update.
Well, congratulations (as I'm sure that's what you wanted), keep up the great work.
| Trufla chapter 7 . 8/21/2011
Well, I like this chapter. You've covered most of the concerns I've had to this point about the viability of the Hedwig venture. The fauna cargo list is right at the viability barrier, but then we are talking about wizards, so I suspect that if they make a successful planetfall, a bit of selective magical breeding can expand the species base through unnatural evolution. Nice to see that at least two of the other magical sentient species have signed on for the trip. I'll miss the dragons, but I'm with Harry in thinking that they are just too dangerous to take along. Hopefully, there will be something similar already in residence at the other end of the trip. (And I would hope that at least Hermione if no one else has given some thought to the possibility of various forms of life already being on any new planet.)
Moving on to the rescue, that was a reasonably well-thought out commando plan, and I also have to give kudos for the implanted tracer modules. That is exactly the sort of backup option I would have expected out of the military. Now, we just need to see if any of my concerns about the problems the Hedwig is going to encounter on launch and insertion to orbit come true. Wizarding transport is good, but their non-teleport-style modes of propulsion don't seem to hold a candle to top-end military avionics. The only possible solution to that I can see is if Luna or someone else in the engineering/propulsion crew found a way to adapt the Knight Bus spells to the Hedwig for atmospheric flight. I was truly sorry to hear from George about the need for a human pilot for the Floo Bomb module, but given a busted twin link, I find it a quite believable solution on his part, and quite possibly the most fitting finale for a prankster Weasley. Talk about going out with a bang and a blaze of glory. I suspect even if there was a problem with the Floo Bomb, George would make it work by simple force of will in the end.
The heating issues look like that could be a real problem, and I really want to see just what effect losing the earth and the associated ley lines and magical environment is going to have on spellcasting in general. I'm sure that Hermione and the Ravenclaws are going to be hard at work analyzing said effects once the voyage begins. It could be interesting to see that once underway, the internal magic fields of the rune spells and such start feeding on personal magic once deprived of the external environmental fields for support. Might even make for an interesting "I told you so" moment for Olivander once the effect becomes noted.
Looking forward to the next installment.
| Wonderbee31 chapter 7 . 8/21/2011
Whew, it looks like it's going to come right down to the wire here, and will be hopeful that things turn out for the best, even as the wizards continue to get stymied one way or the other when they try to take an offensive role.
| orochi.exe chapter 6 . 8/20/2011
Awesome story! Continue this, It's Great!
| george17 chapter 6 . 8/14/2011
[there had been several other "Perenelles" before Nicolas had finally settled on this one.]
That's a great twist! I don't think I've ever saw anyone use that idea before and yet it seems so plausible for a 600 year old wizard! In hindsight you wonder why it's not used all the time.
Colonel Poshepny and the whole muggle situation seems kind of weak in a sense. You really can't imaging that the Prime Minister, let alone the President would have any real problem stopping or killing him if they are already capable of ordering their troops away. Then all the power he seems to have is crazy for a colonel. On the other hand it is no more unbelievable than the typical James Bond villain. It's no more ridiculous than the mysterious Colonel Green of Star Trek. It maybe only stands out a bit compared to how well everything else hangs together.
The wizards and Harry are doing some really stupid things. Yet, that's nothing new for wizards and this story takes place with 17 year old Harry who didn't even finish what is effectively his last year of high school. Also, contrary to typical fanon, this Harry is starting from canon and has no real leadership experience beyond a very small group and running a dueling club. He's mentally and physically exhausted from the Voldemort years. It's actually incredibly realistic that he makes screw ups especially at first. He is totally stressed out while being jerked in difference directions as he tries to figure out whose advice is correct.
| Inziladun chapter 6 . 8/14/2011
Good job with this chapter, I cant wait to read more.
| Trufla chapter 6 . 8/14/2011
Ok, this was a pretty good chapter. You filled in some of the areas I'd been wondering about regarding the other sentient magical races, dealing with the captured wizarding population, and at least some of the ship-related engineering issues. Harry's idea to neutralize the unruly elements in his passenger list makes a lot of sense, and I have to admit that I like the plan of using basilisk gaze via reflection to induce stasis on the fauna portion of the cargo. As long as the Mandrake Restorative Draught is a potion that has a decent shelf-life, they won't even need any brewing time on arrival to revive all the petrified beings.
On the matter of Harry's on-going personality alteration, I can see where Neville and some of the others might be concerned, but looking at things from Harry's side, he's dealing with a bunch of hide-bound traditionalists who are still playing the sort of games that almost got him killed, along with every single person that he still has any sort of feelings for. I can see where in this set of circumstances his tolerance has narrowed to a very thin thread. Harry can't afford to relax even the slightest amount until the Hedwig is in space and away.
The whole scene between Harry and the colonel makes way too much sense, it's a classic black op, and from the Mundane's side of things, getting one of their problems to deal with the other can only be a win-win situation. I wouldn't be surprised to find out that the detainment facility is booby-trapped with something like a deadman tactical nuclear device or some form of lethal bioweapon to deal with any rescue force. That recovery operation is going to be a pain, but I also can't see Harry not at least trying for a rescue. Hopefully, his figurative slaps to the cheeks of Luna shocked her out of her depression. I'll admit, her plan was what got a lot of Harry's most reliable strike force neutralized, but given that they were dealing with incorrect information about their enemy, setbacks were to be expected.
And finally, nice way to demonstrate just how much of a powerhouse Harry is magically. I can imagine just what sort of looks he gets now that people have a concrete measure of his power levels. That is one seriously impressive Space Expansion Charm.
Here's hoping your Muse continues to feel frisky for your inspiration.
| Wonderbee31 chapter 6 . 8/14/2011
Wow, a lot going on here, and really enjoyed some spots, while others made me think hard. First, it's sort of sad that Harry can use the crucio effectively, as it does show that he does mean to use it, unlike year five, he's got more than righteous anger going for him. Flamel turning out to be a pervy jerk is quite a different take, and will wonder if he will be making a pass at Ginny after the current Perenelle might meet an unfortunate accident, and if Ginny will fall to his wiles if he continues to set his sights on her? Will be looking forward to the launch and if the departure of the magicals might mean very bad things for Earth's ecosystem, and if the non magical's will realize that too late?
| m-f42 chapter 6 . 8/14/2011
I like the coup
| AiSard chapter 5 . 8/9/2011
loving the story, the whole starship thing is just on the right side of wacky and still be believable. Harry is complete crap at politics. would be really interesting if someone took a larger hand at fielding Harry's political field like Delacour and Aberforth did at that one meeting, but on a permanent basis. injecting a bit of political/leadership intrigue into the whole thing. the result of the shoddy politics is cropping up into the story which I cant quite decide if its a good thing or not. On one hand its a direct result of Harry's weakness in politics and larger-scale leadership skills. On the other hand it gives the story a feel of ..uncontrollability? kind of like theres a whole big story just underneath this one, but because we're looking at over Harry Potter's shoulders, Harry who doesn't seem too have that much of a politic's/leader's/manipulator's crafty acumen, it feels like we're missing a whole lot of it. social tides are happening and Harry doesn't have the skills to see it, but we see the effects of the tides afterwards. would be much more interesting if we could actually see it as it happens is my thought. though that would fatten up the content of the chapters as well i guess. anyways, thats just my opinion: bring in a political aide. the other thing that keeps nudging at me is the actual population thats in this hidey hole. I think I missed it but my understanding is that theres a paltry amount in here. probably no more than say.. 200? tops? or even just 50..? it seems like an insanely small amount to put in to a 'safe-house' when you've got one.. there doesn't seem to be missions out to kidnap more wizards nor any sort of recruitment drive. I would think that if the MoM, Hogwarts, Hogsmeade and the Quidditch World Cup just got annihilated the Wizarding World would be in a full-blown panic trying to find safety (or wandering confusedly to the MoM to be tagged by soldiers) On the flip-side, any thought of a community larger than that hiding in the Forbidden Forest seems implausible in terms of living space and Harry's leadership would become instantly moot in that case anyways. which has me in a conundrum on just how big this community at the moment is, as well as how big it'll be when they lift-off. Anyways, loved the fic and hope you update soon la.
| EmperorTippy chapter 5 . 8/7/2011
Meh, I could accept the muggle first strike and their actions in the first few chapters as setting the basic premise. But this is really going way too far with the muggle wank and is drastically understating what the wizards can do.
Story is crap.
| timt020 chapter 5 . 8/6/2011
Great story going to read your others now, update soon please.
| peopleareretarded chapter 5 . 8/6/2011
Definitely unique, one if the better and more interesting ideas on here..