|Reviews for My Tribute to Josephine Darcy's The Marriage Stone|
| laleo chapter 26 . 2/27
I can't wait to read more of this story. I am no fan of incomplete stories, but this had called out to me. Thank you for trying to write an ending to Josephine Darcys story and I could only say: Yes, you are a vera capable writer in your style and wording to follow up her story plot. And I am ancious awaiting the next chapter. Thank you for your very great courage to take the torch and let us read more of this so very intriguing and interesting story. And please write fast and let your muse take you by her hand and give you a lot of inspiration.
| patolozka chapter 26 . 2/23
What, what, what?! The last chapter? Nooo! Oh, yeah, I knew it will come one day but... *breaths in and out* OK, I will wait, of course I will;-)
The wedding was cute, I like the way Sirius and Remus behaved and that there was dance and that Severus was dancing *jumps and claps here* Severus and dance and... you-know-what-it-means...! Im impressed. Dance is nearly as amazing as mastering of sword.
Oh, and Im really relieved that there is not so much pressure on Harry. Albus made it quite clear. Its a bit embarassing that everyone knows (except Sirius obviously), but... At least I know now that there will be more practising. And hopefully one day Severus be free of Voldemort and his past.
Thank you, YenGirl, Vine Verrine, fot all this story. I love your plot, your patience, your style and direction. You are wonderful and I hope there will be more. I will be waiting and as Im patient and Hufflepuff, dont worry, you pulled me in and you got me now;-)
And when we all are here, Voldemort dont have a chance!
| patolozka chapter 25 . 2/23
I read this particular chapter twice! It was... oh... wonderful! I love every single moment that Harry spent with Severus. I love that Harry is not so shy, that he can enjoy their love-making, that he can see their magics that he want it... And I love the way Severus guide him. And I definitely love the scene from wedding where they both are in pulic but have their eyes only for themselves. And the kiss was... yeah... Im really glad that Sevrus did it. I hope Harry knows now that Severus is not only fond of him, but that he loves him. Sorry, Remus, Sirius, I know that it was your wedding but... you know, Harry and Sev are my priority;-)
Thank you for this chapter, YenGirl and Vine Verrine, so gentle and sweet and tender. I secretly hope there will be more...;-)
| patolozka chapter 24 . 2/23
Oh, Salazar, what the devil are you doing! Harry is only sixteen, he cant have teh weight of the whole world on his shoulders... But its good to know that Harry now knows how to summon ravens;-) But Im really afraid of Harry. I hope that Albus and all the elite wont force Harry into something... I dont know something risky;-)
Of course I like the scene with Severus. It was so cute;-) They both are. Cute and teasing and a little tense but so loning. Love them!
Thank you for it!
| patolozka chapter 23 . 2/21
Oh, there is something I missed about the room at the Three Broomsticks... Why would there be wards of Marauders? Something from canon? But I like the way Albus renewed them.
Im really enjoying the way of Sirius jealousy, oh, its so great that he can ohly think but cant speak beacuse Remus dont allow it to him! Congratulations Remus! *pats you*
And Harry and Seveverus was at Honey Duckles? Very interesting. The redness of their lips had to be from lollipop, then. *blinks*
Harry determinations is... oh my poor boy. So pressure on his tiny shoulders. How could someone so young resist it? Oh, yes, I know! He has Severus and Sirius and Remus and Hermione and Ron and Albus and... yes, Severus for the second time (never enough Severus, dont you think? Dont you dare to tell him...) *is hexed*
I totally love the way you push Salazar into the story. And I like his - I dont have any obligation to listen to any of headmasters of Hogwarts, pff;-) So Slytherine! Welcome old man!
And in the end there was a kiss and promise for some new events and ideas. Brilliant, YenGirl, Vine Verrine, thank you!
| oolfloo chapter 16 . 2/21
Well, I really like the increase on snarry interaction, but I feel that many of the romantic scenes are too fluffy (or rather, too feminine). Keep in mind both their characters are strong, manly warriors, perhaps you can approach romance from a different angle. I particularly like how you describe Sirius getting turned on by Remus' dominance and Harry admiring Sev's anger when they confronted the Dursleys. That's how I picture two alpha males' romance to be, rather than moonlight picnics and blushing every other second and stuff like that.
Just an opinion, hope you don't take offence! I still like the story a lot!
| oolfloo chapter 2 . 2/20
Thank you thank you thank you. God knows all of us need closure to the marriage stone. Please do not abandon this story ever!
| patolozka chapter 22 . 2/20
Oh, I almost forget to review;-) But now Im here again;-)
This chapter was... full of many things. Albus... Sirius and Remus... and their sudden decision and of course Harry and Severus. I cant understand why Remus and Sirius urged Harry to Hogsmeade. It was a bit cruel from them. I know that they may want interestiong ceremony somewhere else than in Hogwarts but... I dont think they fully understand what it would be for Harry. But Severus was great, in the castle and in the village too.
And Charlie and his dragon. Its really difficult to understand Draco who was raised in absolutely different background. He is so... vulnerable from some poit of view. But I like that way Charlie stepped in.
But I have some questions... Voldemort is nowhere found and Albus is worried. So what will they do? What about the Dark Mark on Severus and Lucius arm? What about Harrys magic? I know there will be some problem, I accidentaly read a few articles when I download all these chapters... And what about the Wizengamot and Harrys role as a King? There are too many things... OMG how could something at the beginning so simple grow into such a huge story?
Thank you very much, YenGirl, Vine Verrine, you force me into thinking and its good;-)
| Vine Verrine chapter 26 . 2/19
When you first posted this I kind of fainted a little in relief :PPP You know I was getting ansty about updating. We both were -_- It's so nice to see the chapter here.
Wonder what you're planning for Sirius/Remus. I think we came to a very important conclusion regarding their sub-plots. I expect big things that now those confusing, blurry lines are clear now. It does feel like a weight off, stopping from struggling where they fit and why. Now we can set a clear line and the things will write itself afkajfkahlfafdaf How many times did we suffer through "why, why did JD white this for? what's the purpose" and them me pulling on your hair and being a pain in the arse because of it. But look, the chapter came out beautifully ;;
Have to be honest, for disliking Draco, writing him comes really easy to me. I don't know, I don't like his person much but there is a sense of... duty? When it comes to him, for both canon and fanon Draco. There is just something that makes me want to give him as much justice as I can. I have to tell you too, there were things I wanted to erase but maybe we just needed a glimpse of a more vulnerable Draco for once, just so that we... well I already told you what we should do. I have a few ideas to make the next scene involving him be even more acute than this one. A contrast of sorts, if you will. I hope you like it. It's just a vague idea though, you know I don't come up with anything unless it has to do with the plan you have for each chapter, so if you plan to have Draco coming up again in the future, depending on the scene, I'll write something for you to see if you like it.
I was a little bit afraid about the Voldemort part. The scene didn't give us as much trouble as deciding where we could place it *and* why. Of the 'why'. I was overbearing there. But look ;; how it looks. The scene looks stunning. What's more, it feels strangely raw and unassuming, which just makes it that more compelling.
There is too much to talk about in this episode. From Charlie/Draco, Molly/Draco, to Harry's training (:BB) to Lucius and Aventine and how much we can risk it without throwing JD's wishes and ideas away (*involuntarily wiggles eyebrows*). To Voldemort and... dang. There is just so much, the problem right now narrows down to the order we must use with everything.
| patolozka chapter 21 . 2/18
OMG, girl, your chapters are so long that yesterday I had energy only for this one. This brilliant and sweet one! Yes, Im talking about snarry, of course. You are so good in writing both Severus and Harry. Harrys shyness... OMG, I couldnt do it... I would be impatient, too fast and... I dont know. But you show us the part of Harry the Boy to the contrary to the Harry the King. And I like it. The moments with Severus, the intimate feelings, kisses and touches... oh... Im melting here. But I like the picture of Harry the King of course. Both parts - a little like wolf and man but in a different way.
Oh, and it was interesting at Malfoys. I think that Draco was feeling betrayed by his father nad his mother too. He knew only their coldness, the "right" behaviour of aristocrats and they now behave otherwise, not too different but still, its confusing for him but I hope Charlie will solve this or help Draco to see what is behind. I hope we all will it see too;-)
Thank you very much!
| patolozka chapter 20 . 2/18
Oh, so Harry is now the one who want more? And Severus is waiting for him to understand it? But, Sev! Harry will never ask for something more, he will rather think that you dont want him... Or Harry will surprise me, I can be hopefull;-)
The scene with kiss (am I dependent on kissing now?) was gentle and funny too, their poor noses;-) Its great that Sirius and Remus added Severus to their family. And I like the fact that Severus sat on the arm of Harrys chair;-)
But, girl, what have you done to Lucius? Im starting to think about him in a bad way and I dont want it! I only hope that you will explain it in the next chapter. Now, Lucius look really evil. Or Narcissa could do something... Well see.
I dont know what is the real role of lord Aventine here, expect the fact the hes a vampire and quite scared and unpredictable. What does he want? The cure for vampirism? The power? The game? I dont know. I only know that he wont be any danger for Harry and its good. But the interactions with Lucius are really interesting...;-)
Thank you for this chapter. My eyes were really tired yesterday, but I had to read even though and I cant regret it;-)
| patolozka chapter 19 . 2/18
*Blinks* What? Wow! When you said to me that there wont be wedding and you were smiling at me, I started to be afraid that Wolpine will try to do something to Remus that wont allow the wedding. And I was still searching something... dangerous. But no! Girl, what have you done to me? I cant imagine how could someone write such a wonderful story! When I think that I know what will be next, you do something that totally surprise me and I like it! (btw. its not as unusual to surprise me, normally Im not thinking about stories much, I only read them and let them infeluence me by its charm)
I like how totally in love Sirius and Remus are here and I love the possesivness of wolf. And I hope you are not going to devide them one day (same with Harry and Sev and Charlie and Draco, please).
Brilliant chapter, girl. *Clapping here.*
| ani chapter 26 . 2/17
eww eww eww, i can't believe Sirius offered! sure, he probably didn't understand, but still!
i'm loving how Aventine keeps toying with Lucius. is it just vampire mind games or is he flirting with Lucius? remember Josephine was keeping Lucius straight.
overall, so far you've got a very compelling continuation. felt alittle clunky at the start, the sections jumped a bit too much but you've fallen into a good pattern here. you've definitely extended the story alot, and still got a long way to go. i love how Harry and Severus's relationship is playing out, that Severus finally stepped up. this twist with Harry's control seems alittle out there, but it is a form of magic that hasn't been used before. the only hitch is how he maintains control later, especially when he's using his magic on others.
| ani chapter 23 . 2/17
why didn't i think of that indeed? ;) this is only the second time i've seen someone using the portraits for the knowledge they have.
| ani chapter 20 . 2/17
okay i had to back up and look at it, and it's funny that Lucius remembers his father's advice at the end especially since he failed to follow it and Draco didn't. ;)