|Reviews for Teenagers|
| gothchic6 chapter 28 . 11/19/2013
This is the best Roger/Oc story I have read.
| margaretwells chapter 28 . 8/30/2013
oh. my. gosh. I have no words. I am CRYING over, well, everyone. this was the best fanfiction I have ever read. You showed how each of the characters grew into savage, and you depicted the characters AMAZINGLY. ohmygodgivemeasecond.
Erin was perfect, in an imperfect way. she wasn't beautiful, or super hot like other fanfics usually make the girls. Actually, she very much reflected me, which kinda creeped me out... in a good way...
Roger. perfect. I loved how he didn't start on Erin till later in the fic. he also was extremely violent and sadistic: which is good. very good. Also, you described his physical appearance very accurate.
ok I'm really crying right now over Roger.
I loved how the Simon/Erin started off slowly and awkwardly. Just like Simon. ;)
The thoughts and words you give him are so, so SIMON. amazing.
Jack is terrifyingly. But he's also extrmemly hot.
I love how you make him just yell his mind out, while Roger keeps e dry thing in his mind. ugh I love Jack. toooo much...
Pig- excuse me, DANNY, ahem, terrified me when he died. nooooo why did he have o die? 。・・(ノД)・・。
Ralph was just plain adorable, being the typical blond jock. although, I do t think he would have NEVER gotten annoyed by Erin. But I guess all in all you made him perfect to his character in the book. thank you am much for not killing him...!
And the minor characters like Percival and Samneric and Maurice were also very realistic and had distinct characters. I felt so sorry for them because you could tell that deep, deep down, they hated everything g hey were doing for Jack.
I hope you actually read this all, and thank you so much for all your work at this extremely depressing but amazing fic. I love it.
rogerrrrrrr...(*locks self in bedroom for week with iPod while slowly bowing insane after reading a perfect fanfic)
| Random Reviewer chapter 4 . 5/21/2013
Soooo... I realize this is probably a dead story, since it hasn't been updated for a year, but I just wanted to give you a little writing advice. The biggest thing when writing a story is to keep in character-especially if you're writing in 1st person POV. You say Emma is shy and scared to death of teenagers, but she doesn't really seem to express this enough. She was frightened of Ralph at first (in chapter numero uno) but as soon as he put down his knife, she went ahead and let him help her up; someone who's afraid of spiders isn't going to pet one, let alone go anywhere near one, so it stands to reason Emma would be a bit more cautious than that. Also, even though you try to keep up the notion of her being shy and quiet, you allow her to relax and befriend Piggy and Simon quickly and easily; this wouldn't be an issue if she were a naturally out-going person, and loved talking and such, but she's not supposed to be. I would also advise that you try to keep the outside references down as much as possible. Saying two people bonded over something is fine, so long as you dont spend forever on it and you continue with your own original ideas as soon as possible. Otherwise, youre doing pretty good, I'd say :)
| AmethystWren chapter 28 . 5/17/2013
I've been reading this for a few days now, and I love it :D I'm kinda sad I'm at the end now, though. But then, there's Going Under (is that named after the Evanescence song? Just curious...). I'll go check it out once I've done my homework.
Anyways, I love this. Erin's a great OC; very believable. I also love how you manage to make me laugh, but it's still a serious story at the heart of it.
| Sadistic Blonde chapter 11 . 5/3/2013
Okay, just so you know, we sadist can show our emotions, its hard for us to show love, sure, but none the less. And I really wish that you could've given Roger a chance. :'(
| windsurfergirl chapter 28 . 12/10/2012
How did I only just take the time to read this story?! Its AMAZING, by far the best girl on the island fic I have ever read, I can't even express how much I loved it! I would have reviewed every chapter if I'd been reading it all along.
Erin was the perfect girl for this story, you wrote her so well! She was witty, funny, entertaining, resourceful, tempered, unforgiving... and REAL. She's not a sue like so many of the other girls in fics like this. Her relationships with the canon characters were as believable as she is, the brotherly friendship with Ralph, the cute/awkward relationship with Simon, and, well, obviously her and Roger.
I really like your writing style and how you wrote the boys. Ralph(abercrombie model hot, too fucking good to leave anyone to die), Piggy, Simon(you made him Jack's little bro, such a good twist), Jack(arrogantly epic) and o my god Roger McAllistor(love the last name). I've always been a Jack fangirl but you've made me love Roger too as sadistic and frigid hearted as he is.
And your My Chemical Romance, Linkin Park, The Offspring, etc... references! They made this story even more epic. Whenever I play Welcome to the Black Parade, Mama, Disenchanted or To the End on my guitar, I think of Lord of the Flies, its pretty cool how you incorporated them into your story. I was surprised when Erin sang Your gonna go far kid cause I used it in one of my LOTF fics (which sadly will probably never end up on this site, I'm an elite gymnast, no free time, except maybe in the summer) almost the same way, my OC sings it to Jack. Its the perfect song, Erin was brave to sing it ;)
Yeah, so that ends my ridiculously long review. The ending was sad, love the song choice, and I can't wait to read the sequel to Teenagers! Your writing really is amazing, keep it up! :)
| ksbg chapter 28 . 12/8/2012
Oh Gosh, best final chapter EVER.
y'know?, watching lost, helped me a lot to understand this without having to read it in parts. lol.
It was just so beautifully written and I could imagine it as a movie beggining, with the music and all.
I'm gonna miss Roger in Going Under, even though he's never been of my favourites, you know the way you write him makes me love him!, actually, I cried at the last sentence.
and I LOVED being e-mailed every time you updated :') this is by far the best story I've ever read in ff.
| Revenge and Rainbows chapter 28 . 12/7/2012
Why am I never logged in?
I'm so sad this is over! And this song makes me cry, so it's good for the last chapter.
Roger died? THIS DEPRESSES ME D: D: D: D: I really hope Roger was writing to someone completely random (like Ralph or Maurice or something. That would crack me up) but I think it's pretty safe to assume it was Erin. So will Going Under take place before or after Roger's death?
You're welcome! It was my pleasure reviewing this story and I loved watching it grow (well I started reading once you were already 18 chapters in, but you know what I mean. It seems like it's been longer than that).
I know this is kind of cheesy, but I really want these to be my last words to my last review:
So long and goodnight!
| FadedSunset chapter 28 . 12/6/2012
That ending was so sad, but perfect! I'm gonna miss this story so much. It was very entertaining and interesting to read. Please put your new story up soon!
| Angel4eva-15 chapter 28 . 12/6/2012
Oh my god this is so sad! can't believe this is the last chapter *sob*
The ending was just perfect and this whole story is perfect and I have no idea how come u don't have a thousand reviews. I really do think u have a future in writing so plz never stop.
Gonna miss reading this so bye for now xxxxx
P.s. looking forward to reading ur other stories!
| SideshowJazz1 chapter 28 . 12/5/2012
Aw, that's sort of bittersweet. I like it.
Since I'm already following you as an author, I'll know when "Going Under" is up. I can't wait to see what happens to Erin next. See you there!
| ksbg chapter 27 . 12/3/2012
What a perfect chapter!, Simon IS ALIVE!, OMG!, this was totally mindblowing, and guess what? I cant wait to read Going under! that sneak peak was GREAT! and it'll be amazing -as far as it has Simon moments in it. and Ralph gets a girl lol- btw, I was listening to this song and couldn't help but think in Roger (the way you write him) :) : www. youtube watch?vkHYb3GRgSWI
| Just Another Believer chapter 27 . 12/1/2012
That story was so fucking amazing! I can't wait to read the sequel!
| Angel4eva-15 chapter 27 . 12/1/2012
I fucking love you! This is just amazing! I love u even more that u didnt kill Simon, I always hate it when he dies. And aaaaaah just so excited to read more! Can't believe there will be only one more chap left
| SideshowJazz1 chapter 27 . 12/1/2012
So is this the penultimate chapter or the last chapter? If it's the former, update soon! If it's the latter, I'm watching out for Going Under and will R&R, just like your other stories.