|Reviews for Naruto and his Uzumaki Heritage|
| AidenWIP chapter 3 . 2/28
Okay, I really like how Naruto handled the situation with Choji there. That was probably the most decent thing he could have done there without being out of character.
On a different note, your Anko idea is the most adorable thing ever and I really hope I get to see her portrayed that way sometime. Like, soon.
| fellow chapter 13 . 1/29
| fellow chapter 11 . 1/29
I love the little akatsuki scene. Go sasori and deidara.
| fellow chapter 6 . 1/29
That was awesome.
| fellow chapter 3 . 1/29
Lovely tale. I love this naruto's point of view.
| The Royal Queen Akito chapter 13 . 12/13/2013
Damn. Just, dayumn. This is fucking fantastic, like seriously, you writing style is wonderful(and it suits the story) and the take on the Uzumaki clan and sealing is just so cool like wow.
| locked out chapter 13 . 11/24/2013
I come back and read this story at least every other month because while you're a good author this is probably the single most powerfully written piece on this site. And please please update soon
| andres.mullerbeck chapter 9 . 9/22/2013
Would've been better if the guy had gotten the luck seal right the first time
| Baradine chapter 13 . 9/21/2013
His proposal rates at an 11/10, for sheer badassery.
On a critical note, your story's good, but you shouldn't bold any part of your writing. It's jarring. At the most, you should use italics, but even those should be used sparingly. Also, the "You're gonna be my wiiiiiiiiiife!" is also a little ... adolescent is the best way to put it. There's no need to literally extend the word, even though you're trying to go for dramatics. Your readers will understand what you mean when you say "He roared." Also remember that exclamation points should be used sparingly. A single well placed exclamation point will stand out to your readers more than a large amount of them. Less is more.
Naruto seems a little too strong and wise for his age, but I do like the sacrifice he had to pay for using the Hiraishin.
| gartang85gmail.com chapter 13 . 9/15/2013
well that was AWESOME. SImply great i want more and more. wery interesting i like it wery much. about uzumaki they are not much of that i always wanted to read about it. so many fics and they all almost copy of one another. and i like that naruto is not on sakura that always ... me how he could like that f...ng sakura. Thank you for this and hope you write more.
| TheNStorm chapter 11 . 9/8/2013
Really, truly funny. Critically good too.
| TheNStorm chapter 3 . 9/8/2013
Hm. The soul of Tenten? I would probably start with her desire to become as strong as Tsunade and her inability to do it in the same way as Tsunade-she doesn't have the control necessary to be a medic, she doesn't specialize in ninjutsu (and hardly knows any at all), and in many ways she's like Lee-constrained to a world of chakra users, fighting a weapon battle.
Bringing a bow and arrows, and swords, to a magic fight. That's got to take some bravery, and you know she has to be used to disappointment and defeat. Look at her chunin exam fight! Utterly crushed. And she keeps going.
| Darksnider05 chapter 1 . 8/5/2013
Nope you shot yourself in the foot their aware of Madara their aware the Kyuubi was controlled by someone. That's the person to hate and in fact would be the leafs enemy.
The Kyuubi was a tool in this event as he always has been.
| TrisakAminawn chapter 7 . 8/5/2013
Hah, cool work with Tenten. Who was an Academy student last chapter, so now I'm confused. Did you retcon everyone up a year, or did I just misread?
Daaaaamn angst. Shit. He really needs someone, and apparently it's TenTen? Okay. I admire the thought you apparently put into this.
| TrisakAminawn chapter 6 . 8/5/2013
I love the sealing fights. I like a lot of the characterization drama. I liked Naruto teaching the tag lesson, and the thing with Hinata. (She has kind of won the pairing competition in my mind, mostly because her supporters are the least obnoxious and creepy, and Sakura/Naruto seems to diminish both of them somehow.) Naruto's feelings of the hopelessness of trying to make the perfect Minato proud were especially cool, and the dynamic with Chouji. Ooh, will we have Kakashi later? And maybe someone who knew Kushina? (I am a sucker for the fanon-so-far-as-I-know idea that Uchiha Mikoto and
With Naruto trying this hard, I don't think he and Sasuke will wind up on a team the normal way...but there were other reasons Hiruzen gave them both to Kakashi, so. Oh, and is the Sandaime Hokage in his life as a sort of distant grandfather, or did he lose that relationship in this continuity somehow in exchange for knowing his background?
Note: Lee learned most of the mannerisms he displayed in this chapter from Gai, after becoming genin. He was previously intense, awkward, a romantic, and probably loud, but he hadn't yet picked up those buzzwords or the behaviors that make him such an unignorable existence later on. I know this isn't 'serious' story-ing, but it's relatively important to anyone who likes Lee.
I also support Uzumaki!Naruto as a tag. Will check your favorites later to see if you found anything.