Reviews for A Spark Neglected
SnowLeopard7 chapter 15 . 7/13
What an amazing story! Can't wait to read the sequel.
Darth Freya chapter 14 . 7/5
Hey
Wow that was a really great and exciting fanfiction!
I loved how you described the characters and especially this last scene with Charles and Onslaught and how he chosses the black side on the chessboard and leaves Erik the white. It could mean that Charles wants him to stay on his side, or that he's never gonna be the exactly same person he was.
And this flash of orange, that was really interesting! Loved it!-
This whole story was just great!
I would love it if there would be a sequel! :-D
Really good work! Keep it up!
I enjoyed it till the last word! :-)
Greetings
Darth Freya
Darth Freya chapter 4 . 7/3
Hm but can they really get Charles back?
And what game is he playing? I think he plays the role as Shaw's ally but maybe he has plans to kill him and wants to take over the world himself!
And he could work together with Erik to try and reach world domination, that would be an other ( and more interesting) ending than the normal happy endings!
Or Charles will come back when he hurts Erik or Raven and this could lead to him using his new powers to bring down Shaw and his gang.
Also why do you call them the Hellfire club? ( Ok the name is fitting but I still would like to know why :) Is that a name from an au?)
And by the way you did a really good job in making Charles evil!
First I wondered about how he could control the metal but I think he has/ used psychokinesis. He can throw/ lift/ control things with only his will/ thoughts. ( I hope I wrote it right')
Can't wait to see more from evil Charles! *-* Love it!
Darth Freya
Darth Freya chapter 1 . 7/2
Hello there
I like the first chapter and I can't wait for more!
Hm but is Charles really going to turn? I think he won't go down without a fight, at least his light side. His dark side, well we'll see what the future holds for both of them.
I hope Charles will turn evil because I love it when the heroes turn evil/ into villains!-
And yes " Schüler" was right. I was surprised to read a german word in an english fanfiction but it was also very cool! :)
Keep it up.
Greetings
Darth Freya
zaylo267 chapter 4 . 5/28
Love this awesome story!
TheGirlWhoLikesTooMuchStuff chapter 14 . 7/9/2015
Oh dear... Set up for the sequel! Loved the story, I will see if I get around to reading the sequel. If I don't, then let me just give you the well deserved praise for this story: 1. It's good, 2. Love the whole Charles Onslaught thing {not enough people write stories with them}, and 3. Everything you did was flawless. Great work, my friend. ;)
TheGirlWhoLikesTooMuchStuff chapter 1 . 6/24/2015
Cooool! I think I'm going o like this story. ;)
Guest chapter 6 . 6/18/2015
Interesting idea. But...

Too much telling instead of showing. You don't have to try to explain everything. The dialogue ends up being very unrealistic.

Hopefully you've gotten better in the past few years.
Guest chapter 15 . 12/7/2014
Omg it is amazing so far, cant wait for you to start writing/posting it
weemcg33 chapter 15 . 6/22/2014
You are a terrific author. This has to be one of my favourites now and I love how you write both Charles and Erik...also Onslaught ;)
On to the next one!
weemcg33 chapter 10 . 6/22/2014
Love, love, love this story! OMG the bit where you had Shaw say the words that Erik said in the movie made me really happy that it wasn't Erik this time. And Onslaught RULES!
weemcg33 chapter 5 . 6/22/2014
I know I probably shouldn't say it but Onslaught is awesome!
Great chapter!
weemcg33 chapter 1 . 6/22/2014
Awesome start my friend. I so wish they'd done this in the film, Charles is a very powerful telepath and with Emma in custody it would have made sense for Shaw to take another.
Laughed at the snarky Charles, their conversation about planning ahead was a nice bit of humour before the cliff hanger.
Nostalgic Beauty chapter 15 . 5/28/2014
Ooh ominous! Nice preview.
SoulMore chapter 15 . 2/17/2014
FAN!
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