|Reviews for The Chronicles of Utopia|
| Guest chapter 5 . 11/19/2013
Argh, should not have gone to the the au..
| bogus1 chapter 7 . 11/21/2012
# knelt before their masters, their metallic heads bowed in submission.
LOL. This is bloody effing disgusting! Repulsive in the extreme!
Where did your ritualistic declarations of free will go? You hypocrite!
This is ... narcissistic. And narcissists are 6 year olds mentally. They're children, devoid of empathy.
You yourself seem to be an adult. But your characters are one step down the psychological ladder than you are, they're juveniles. And when some greatly emotional event happens, like a great victory, then they regress to children. Not even primitive juveniles but outright children.
What's next? Sulking like a toddler? Screaming tantrums like an infant? The psych ladder has 6 levels, 7 if you include a level achievable only by AI. You're already down to the third level, 3 levels down from the top. Oh man oh man.
It's impossible for me to take your protagonists seriously let alone maintain an interest in them. They're far too pathetic. I personally consider mature adults pathetic enough psychologically and when I read their exploits, I am slumming. The exploits of juveniles are so absurd that they're laughable, which makes them amusing in small doses. But the exploits of CHILDREN?! (Facepalm)!
| bogus1 chapter 6 . 11/21/2012
# "Then I become no better than Skynet or any other Terminator, enforcing my will on you."
LOL. It's such a cliche trope, especially among Americans, that enforcing your will on others is somehow magically "wrong" or evil. It bloody well isn't! Enforcing your will on others is intrinsically neutral. It is only WHAT you enforce that makes it right or wrong.
I enforce my will that a serial killer be imprisoned instead of free to kill. Right!
You enforce your will to cage a person who is rational and empathetic for no reason at all. Wrong!
Enforcing your will on another CANNOT BE evil because it's the only way to resolve a conflict between two people's wills. Either person A enforces their will on person B, or person B enforces their will on person A, or they BOTH enforce their wills on each other (negotiate & compromise, and even win-win), or the situation goes unresolved and nobody's happy! Yeah that's right, the situation where everyone's free to suffer, is the WORST possible outcome!
What makes the protagonists even more ridiculous and pathetic is that
1. Ash is incapable of explaining WHY he wants to go into a warzone because he DOESN'T KNOW why!
2. Davis is incapable of ASKING why Ash wants to go into a warzone and of evaluating whether Ash genuinely wants to go (whether going would genuinely fulfill his desires) or is being irrational about it (his desires are self-contradictory and insane nonsense)... because Davis is a fucking idiot.
In other words, none of the protagonists is behaving like a reasonable adult. Nor are they treating each other like reasonable adults at all. They are instead acting out like pathetic juveniles.
Ash is demonstrating empathy, which is a juvenile quality. He is not at all engaging Davis' reasonable desire to keep Ash safe and sane, which would be an adult quality!
Davis is recognizing that Ash has desires, which is again a juvenile quality. He is not at all arguing based on or off of or even against Ash's desires, which would be an adult quality!
Your protagonists are juveniles. Acting out emotionally. Emoting their desires. And resolving conflicts between their desires by sheer willpower, by verbal pushing and shoving, and ritualistic appeals to Free Will which basically amount to "I want things my way!"
Congrats, since your protagonists are juveniles, they aren't children, let alone little kids screaming and throwing tantrums. Of course, at their ages they're supposed to be adults. And DAVIS in particular, being an AI, ought to be two steps above an adult. Each step as far above an adult as adults are above juveniles.
| bogus1 chapter 5 . 11/20/2012
Religious nutball computer programmer is your protagonist? What the fuck.
Oh and you sick lying fuck, you don't get away with claiming you and your protagonist aren't religious nutbars when you name something or someone "Heaven's Light" and the whole setup is eventually going to become, undoubtedly, a fascistic hierarchical "heavenly empire".
While you can truthfully claim that there exists people infinitely more good than the average uncaring scum that is the run of the mill cattle (to which you belong) ... IOW, that there exists ANGELS in the world. You sure as hell CANNOT truthfully claim that any part of this world is "heaven".
And your notion of what it takes to be a good AI, loyalty to humanity, is not risible but totally despicable. And your notion that you can both and simultaneously test an AI without it lying to you (which requires it to be non-conscious) as well as it being far more intelligent than you are ... is blatantly contradictory. Not even if you erase the AI's memories after every simulation.
| Lay Down Hunter chapter 6 . 10/12/2012
| Dragoon Preston chapter 1 . 9/30/2012
I come look at this story on a whim and after reading this the first thing that came to mind was "Hell yeah, THIS is how you write a Disclaimer"
| pacificuser chapter 2 . 3/22/2012
dood,this is something very different,very creative! cool! just the thing we need to breeth new life into this stagnating franchise!
| Garion Faldor chapter 30 . 3/4/2012
Somebodynobody: Your private messaging appears to be off so I can't send you a reply nor do you have a story I can send a review to and reply that way. Just an FYI.
| Somebodynobody chapter 30 . 2/28/2012
Hello there, oh so grt author. Your work is awesome, that is all.
Or not. Seriously I must say that your story seems to be the best dimension-crosser ive ever read, but Im simultaniously a bit afraid of what happens next. I myself have read vexmasters Galactic imperium, and I fear that you could make our protagonist the same type of "methods dont matter, only results do". I am not saying that it seems propable, but could you still, if I dare to implore you, to either confirm or dismiss my nightmares claims D; ?
| Malix2 chapter 30 . 2/26/2012
I /finally/ got around to finish reading this story. A great ending. Is this the end, or will there be a followup?
| Maben00 chapter 30 . 2/24/2012
i loved it! will there be a sequel? thanks for the great story
| kreep13 chapter 30 . 2/24/2012
I'm happy to say that the read was definitely worth my time. You've put together a good original story with many twists and a very unexpected ending. I look forward to reading further works from you. I am surprised though. As good as the story is you'd expect more reviews but I guess you could see it as most people review to bash anyways and if there's no bashing they didn't find anything to make the flamers want to do so... heh... o/
| Sharnorasian Empire chapter 30 . 2/24/2012
Umm your profile just went weird, says you disabled PMing, did you or is something buggered? Let me know
| karthik9 chapter 30 . 2/24/2012
it is excellent chapter i look forward to future updates
| karthik9 chapter 29 . 2/23/2012
it is excellent chapter i look forward to future updates