Reviews for The Devil You Know
Lemonmelons chapter 24 . 4/23
Oh yeah! Bella is growing up - and finally on to whatever is going on with Haven and his men.
Though I find the disregard for the few women in Bellas life a bit concerning, (they are either just partners like Kim and Emily, or plot tools, like Ellie, Lauren, or there to underscore something, as the very phrase "even Leah" suggests.
Even Angela is flat. She seems to only talk to Bella about guys and be there so Bella has someone human for her teenage life.
"Like a teenage girl" is used to indicate that is not to be taken seriously or something, when Billy and Charlie talk? But - Bella actually IS a teenaged girl. Why would she disown that.

I am a bit embarrassed by her weird bashfulness, too. Who would also wearing a bra under the PJs, that sounds so uncomfortable. And then all and wonders when confronted with the idea of sex ja is she 'measures up' to some strange standard - instead of well-being if it would feel good or what she could do to make sure it does.
She seems familiar with orgasms, at least, which lets me how that she has experience masturbating (though I don't know how or why she would ever have some that, being always surrounded by overbearing makes: first Edward, Thema the Wolve "brothers", not to mention her embarrassment around Charlie) so why doesn't she ever even think about pleasure?!

It seems a bit like the setting to a porn movie, the now I progress. There is this very inexperienced and bashful, but overly sexy, just turned eighteen girl - ans then there is the overly sexy, muscled, masculine guy1, but also the overly sexy, muscled group of male wolves, and now the handsome, masculine, group of males at Haven - all her 'protectors' now, but it seems very believable that at any moment Jonah's take on her role is coming into play.
Lemonmelons chapter 22 . 4/22
Ugh man. For all their talk about never doing anything a girl doesn't want them to, Paul is doing just the same to Bella. Ok maybe she likes it - but nothing she does could tell him. So he's basically roughing her up against a tree, she can't move, he holds her throat for Gods same - and she goes limp. Nevee having asked him as he seems to imply. That she is drink for the first time in her life does not help his case.
The way you wrote this makes it into assault.

Now I don't think that was the intent...
But for all the bashing of improper behaviour and men not respecting women, you write Bella as a victim of her 'protector' in that passage

"She only had time to squeak out something resembling a questioning sound before Paul's lips were leisurely dragging across the fullness of her own.

Bella jumped then went limp, eyes huge and full of shock. She could feel him smiling against her mouth, even as he gently tugged at her lower lip with his teeth, suckling on the soft bit of flesh. She could feel heat spiraling through her in shivers as he shifted before pulling her leg up over his hip and pinning her there, freeing his hands. One went up, curling about her delicate throat and further trapping her. The other went who the hell knows and all Bella could do was gasp and arch her neck under his hold as he..."

Don't get me wrong, I like this story a lot and I'm really glad you're putting in all the effort and sharing is with us. This is meant as friendly feedback!
Lemonmelons chapter 20 . 4/22
Im frustrated with Paul and Bella. They should just TALK. Yeah, physical contact is important and it can help in a lot of situations -but Bella uses it to allow having to talk things through!
I like your story, it is quite gripping, especially considering the slow slow slow burn.
Lemonmelons chapter 19 . 4/22
What the fuck, why would an eighteen year old blue be allowed to close the door when they have a guest?! Weird weird world.
Irishpotato123 chapter 35 . 4/21
Hello !
Late to the awesome party )
Just wanted to let you know that you still have people ready to read what you write ))
I think it was one of my all time favorites !
Come back when you can
AMadBell chapter 35 . 4/15
Incredible story one I wish was finished but I completely understand that life has different plans.
safethechaos chapter 35 . 4/7
Estou triste que não está finalizada :( Mas parabéns pela escrita. Essa história é incrível!
ashreena chapter 1 . 4/5
I desperately need to know how this story progresses. Please come back
Guest chapter 35 . 3/21
I read chapter 35 in 2021... the chapter that was posted in 2016... I think I may cry. The story is just so wonderfully written; the plots so wonderfully woven. We don’t even know WHAT HE IS! Add in Haven and Illarion and Alice and - and - and - yep, I’m crying.
QWhidbee10 chapter 35 . 3/16
Hi ladies! Hope all is well with your families and lives. I just wanted to drop a message to let you know that I absolutely love this story and I hope you finish it, but to let you know your presence is truly missed. I look forward to when you have the drive and tome to write again.

HoldYourBreath-Hiccup chapter 16 . 3/6
So glad you made Bella understand the animal, pure perfection
Jane chapter 35 . 3/4
I keep hoping...
HoldYourBreath-Hiccup chapter 15 . 3/6
YES! aul needed to let out some anger, I loved this
HoldYourBreath-Hiccup chapter 14 . 3/6
Finally! Oh I can't wait to see what Jacob does, I hope he can turn himself around.
HoldYourBreath-Hiccup chapter 13 . 3/6
oh our poor sweet Paul
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