|Reviews for Double Life|
| 7PenguinPrincess7 chapter 18 . 7/20/2013
I really enjoyed reading this story! It's really interesting. If only we could actually play Pokemon like that I only noticed a few minor mistakes, but overall it's well written and detailed. A lot better than what I could ever do xP I can't wait for the next chapter, please update soon!
Oh and 300th review! ;D
| True M. Vega chapter 18 . 7/18/2013
I never thought Red teaching Yellow how to swim would be so adorable, but then again, it's Yellow, SO HOW CAN IT NOT BE?!
'Boom, headshot!' XD I love that video...
Great work, and keep it up! :D
| TKM02 chapter 18 . 7/18/2013
I just want to say one thing... BRAVO! You are an incredible writer and I can't wait until you put up the next chapter. BUT! I have noticed that Ho-oh was captured twice and I thought since either Moltres or Articuno hasn't been captured yet how could Ho-oh been captured twice? I'm sorry it's just I wanted to point that out. I will MOST DEFINITELY be following this story (I think i pressed follow twice now Haha Whoops!) and favoriting it! Keep up the great work!
PS I love how you're portraying the characters ESPECIALLY YELLOW! A sweet girl with a past?! Fabulous!
| splitheart1120 chapter 18 . 7/18/2013
Its nice to see everyone relaxing a bit after all the trouble they just went through...
| PokeSpLover chapter 11 . 7/18/2013
Holy s***! Was Blue wearing a bra!?
| PokeSpLover chapter 18 . 7/18/2013
The headshot thing was hilarious! I remembered when I shot someone who I really hate with a Nerf gun by 'accident' and a friend of mine yelled "Ooh, headshot!" And the whole class began to laugh (it was a party, and the teacher wasn't there). And did Silver literally have a nosebleed?
| CJ122 chapter 18 . 7/17/2013
You definitely gave Yellow some flavor (flavour idk) in this story. She's like two sides of a coin! (I would've said two face but that's just mean). She actually has a back story so I like her very much. *thumbs up*
Then I guess SAO anime creators can't say you took this idea from their anime lolz. But the book itself? I wasn't sold.
Please update soon! :3
| ZXCVBNMEM chapter 18 . 7/17/2013
I loved every moment of this chapter. I especially loved the part where Blue's top came off and Green and Silver's reactions were totally hilarious. And for some reason I imagine that little kid that snapped Blue's top off as Emerald. I'm looking forward to reading more!
| TigerSneak1 chapter 18 . 7/17/2013
Well, well, well. It's been a while, hasn't it? I guess work caught up with you for a while, huh? Glad to see you back! Now, onto the review... Very light chapter, amusing. Of course, it's a beach chapter! Can't go wrong with one of those. Not too much is developed, but Lyra sees that Silver's into Blue, which could be important. And apparently next chapter, something important is going to happen soon. Looking forward to it! Great to see you again!
| bri333865 chapter 18 . 7/17/2013
Hey, your not dead! :D that or I missed an update email... _'
Anyways, this chapter was amusing as always!
| japaneserockergirl chapter 18 . 7/17/2013
Oh, Silver, what did Lyra DO? XD
So glad you updated! It was nice to see the gang take a little break from virtual ass-kicking and for Yellow to recover a little. Some guys are such noobs/douches. 'Bra snap!', really? And I figured that Blue wasn't going to go down alone. XD
| LittleSpringroll chapter 18 . 7/17/2013
You really did totally awesome with the characters' personalities, and the way you tell the story is easy to follow. I also like how you have a balance of serious stuff and humor. One of my favorite funny parts was when Blue said, "...my slave, er, friend, Silver."
One thing I noticed is that you seem to have a bit of trouble with apostrophes, so I'd like to help out. For instance, you wrote:
'The two Pikachu's were mirroring Yellow inner thoughts.'
and 'Gold half-smiled. "I need your Pikachu's."'
When you want to make the word Pikachu plural, you don't use an apostrophe, just an S. So the sentences should say, 'The two Pikachus were mirroring Yellow's inner thoughts.' and 'Gold half-smiled. "I need your Pikachus."
Another things is that the ending of chapter 17 (before Blue's notes) read, "I look forward to working with you Giovanni." I think the sentence would sound more the way you wanted it to if you added a comma: "I look forward to working with you, Giovanni."
All in all, though, you have really good spelling and grammar for not having a beta reader. That's all for today! This is really good! Please update soon!
| Tomboy15103 chapter 18 . 7/17/2013
That was an awesome chapter! I'm usually not a fan of slice of life writings, but this had to be the greatest ever! Will we ever find out what happened between Silver and Lyra while making sand castles? Will the other dexholders show up? Have I asked that question before? And will the authors and artists ever publish the next Pokemon Special/Adventures manga volume? Ice been dying to read it, or at least a new black and white chapter.
| StattStatt chapter 18 . 7/17/2013
Uh-hu. An update. Was it worth the wait? ... Hell. The f***. YES! This was so very much worth the wait! I died about five times while waiting, but now everything is okay!
Best part of the chapter: Red and Yellow fluff. THE FLUFF! You've got to love it. There is nothing to hate about it at all, especially when it's so wonderfully written like in this story.
Hehehe, Yellow is funny. CX
I laughed my body to tiny pieces at the last part! Remind me to never piss of Blue when she's got a frisbee with her.
Hehe, and poor Silver.
Btw, Blue said "It's too back he's already taken." Shouldn't it be "too bad"? Just something I thought I'd point out.
Keep up the AMAZING work, looking forward for MUCH, much more! (o'w'o)
| OnlyNeeded151 chapter 18 . 7/17/2013
Thanks for updating! I've loved this story for a long time and it's nice to see that it's not abandoned. :P Update soon!