Reviews for The Line Between Jealousy and Hate
MoonbeamMidnight chapter 1 . 2/6
OMG... I ship these two so much!
The Song Has Spoken chapter 1 . 8/18/2013
Love it! Very nicely done.
What's-Yer-Offer chapter 1 . 6/20/2013
Good God. It is 4 in the morning and here I am torturing myself with your beautiful story! I loved it very much
Wow chapter 1 . 11/12/2012
Keeps true to the style and really analyzes an interesting KND character. I'm all for 86x362. It's the only slash that makes sense.

Great Job!
Aleatorik chapter 1 . 9/20/2011
OH MY GOD. I love you. This is like the most perfect thing I've ever read with these two. This is what I've been looking for my entire KND-fandom life. One sided 86/362 is the win. You, sir, win the internet.
tmcala chapter 1 . 7/10/2011
Awww, shucks. A birthday fic for me? You shouldn't have :) 2 things before my review starts. 1. I loved Steph review...I can't read, but she can't spell :) 2. Someone called you a giiiiirl. Ha. Except, I don't blame her because me and Steph discussed it A LOT before we figured it out.

Review time. I looooved this. If indeed I asked you for Fanny for my birthday, I now remember why. You're really really good at writing her. You get that irrational, bitchy side of her I have issues capturing. This could be a lead in to Radical Adventures...sort of. You should write more stuff like this. You're a hilarious dude, but you can also do this characterization, thinking stuff too. I don't think that made any sense. On to the next fic :)
Traipeze chapter 1 . 7/10/2011
I look read through the archive, clicking on random stories. Some are okay; some are... to a lesser extent. And then I stumble upon your story.


This is truly a remarkable piece of work. The way you managed to get deep into Fanny's character and capture it perfectly is amazing.

I'm gonna go look through more of your work, 'kay? :)

angelraider chapter 1 . 7/10/2011
I'm so happy you support lesbains.


Short review is short. I'm outta practice.
MaxandFang101 chapter 1 . 7/9/2011
Wait, so is this Onesided FannyxRachel, or Fanny being jealous of boys taking away her best friend? (Sorry, I'm a little dense.) xD
Arty B. Good chapter 1 . 7/9/2011
I love you-your work. I love your work.

It's pretty cool how you walk us through Fanny's thought process. You take these simple ideas (jealously, hate, like, love?, loss), which aren't very simple at all and you take them apart and give them their due. It makes Fanny's plight all the more real and heartbreaking. Her epiphany is well handled with a simple "Oh." You don't continue along that thread, but you don't need to. The "Oh" is all the piece needs for that.

Your formatting is pretty awesome too. It gives us a sense of pacing and flow and it gives emphasis to the important one liners left to themselves.

It's also clear when the narrator is talking and when we are being presented with Fanny's thought process, but it's not jarring. The transition from one to the other and back is smooth.

The scene at the end of this hammers home all the things we've been told in the exposition. We get to see Fanny's disdain and her frustration and we also see how resigned she is. You don't tell us how she is, you just show us.

I can't find anything wring with this piece. Keep writing.

Like a boss.
LittlePlagueSpirit chapter 1 . 7/9/2011
Alright, nice work Phenon! I already got where Fanny was heading when you were describing the looks of Agent Nineteen-Century, but it was really interesting to see how Fanny herself figured it out. How she worked it out was well build up, with the questions she was asking herself and the boys that played a head-role in her life, especially Numbuh One and how he comes between her and Rachel.

And I love how Fanny started just like any other girl, but changed because of Rachel. It's much more realistic than make her a girl that always hated boys (there needs to be a reason writers, you aren't just born with these feelings).

So overall, I really like this story! Keep on going my girl :)
Depthcharge2030 chapter 1 . 7/9/2011
Wow... this actually makes a lot of sense
NICAGURL chapter 1 . 7/9/2011
Very interesting perspective of Numbuh 86, Keep up the good work! *smiley face
Gamewizard2008 chapter 1 . 7/9/2011
Imagine the look on Fanny's face if she heard Numbuh 1 got accepted into GKND!