|Reviews for Emperor of Dreams|
| Estoma chapter 1 . 10/16/2013
Oh gosh! This is really dark. You have a fantastic imagination. The image of the girl with her limbs sawn off is just terribly frightening. You could ramp it up a bit though, talking about the sounds, the smells, the way she fell when he cut her leg off, how he shoved her into the pool, things like that.
I noticed you often use 'causing' for example, [causing me to fall to my knees]. It's okay once or twice, but starts to stand out when used several times. Consider changing it up a little.
[It was a quiet September night when I was murdered by the one. The only. Freddy Krueger, emperor of dreams] Consider commas rather than full stops.
Very gruesome piece, well done; you made me squirm which I am sure was your purpose.
| bobbsnark chapter 1 . 9/18/2011
I haven't seen Nightmare on Elm Street before, but, holy crap that was brilliant. O.o The ending was the best. It really gave off a sense of fear. 8D
The only mistake I could see was: "How did he know that I couldn't swim." There should be a question mark there. :-)
Nice work. :-)