Reviews for Mistaken Identity |
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![]() ![]() ![]() That was both adorably awkward and deliciously naughty. Kudos to you for a very entertaining read. Not really sure what I think about your Gai-sensei after reading this (pickles and dick chocolates, really?) but I'm sure I'll get over it. Thank you for the read. KTN |
![]() ![]() ![]() lol nice that was a great trick |
![]() ![]() so cute!1 |
![]() ![]() this is the best! |
![]() ![]() lov it |
![]() ![]() One of The Best Kakashi x Iruka Fanfictions i have ever Read. Nice Work on it to ;) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thank you for the story I really liked it. It was so funny and very clever Kakashi is realy a weird guy but he is so adorable Iruka could not resiste. |
![]() ![]() ![]() so cute & hilarious! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Iruka, pile of goo. Classic. Loved it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Holy Honey! I love your story. I couldn't stop laughing through every delivery Iruka received. I just LOVE Iruka's character. And the lemon was just nose-bleeding-superb. (-) I can't wait to read more of your KakaIru stories when I get the chance. You've got yourself a new fan. (_~) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Lol This story is interesting on so many levels! I liked the way you made Kakashi "woo" Iruka like that, it totally captures Kakashi xD Lol on the chocolate penises xD! Oh and that bit about "Umino Iruka-Man of ..." It totally made me lol the whole time! xD And the little girl bringing him the books was ust a nice touch that had me rolling! xD Loved your story and I'll be faving and adding you to my authors to stalk list! xD |
![]() ![]() ![]() Okay, my absolute favourite is the Kunai of the Month. Seriously, that's so awesome. And the little girl delivering porn, haha. There are so many good things about this fic. Anko as an avid porn reader. Iruka thinking about Kakasi's 'creme filled centre.' The line "Sensei... such undergarments." Kakashi getting embarrassed over the kimono. Talking during sex. Gai "helping." And the way Kakashi logic makes it so that Iruka can't argue that it was a stupid way to woo someone. And the only criticism I have for you is your punctuation (you knew it was coming). Try to use less italics. The more you use, the less effective they are. Also, avoid using ellipses when at all possible. But the main this is your dialogue. When you have something like, "Well, that's me, but I didn't order anything." He said with a frown. It is technically all one sentence, so the period should be a comma and the 'he' doesn't need a capital. That's in comparison to something like this, "The delivery charges, of course." She smiled bravely. Which is two sentences. heh heh. If you don't get it or I'm telling you something you already know just hit me up about it. Though you're right to be proud of this, it's very giggle-worthy ) |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was wonderful! I love how Iruka is all 'Umino Iruka-eager pile of goo!' but at the same time not COMPLETELY uke. This entire story is definitely something Kakashi would pull... you made him in character AND still had smut... WHAT IS THIS SORCERY! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I laughed this entire story. I can just see sweet Iruka sensei's im-gonna-f-ing-kill-you glare he gives to every dilevery person. And I love the way you gave Anko a personality. A lot of people just make her a crazy smex crazed whore -which, alright, she may be that but her and Iruka's relationship is so well explained in this even if its only mentioned in a few lines and in some short banter between the two. Oh and Kakashi gettin' caught. perfection. He so would be creepy send nameless presents to the one he admires guy. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this! Iruka and Kakashi are so cute! And you write them very well. Great great great work! |