|Reviews for Homecoming|
| Queenie13 chapter 15 . 11/11/2013
I must admit that I wasn't originally fond of Al/Mei, they just felt thrown together. Sort of 'pair the spares'. But you make it make sense. I can see how they would've gotten together realistically. Thanks for that :)
| Sage of wind Dragons chapter 22 . 11/10/2013
nice, always sorta hate the bully hunter, because that makes them some ASWHOLES in a lot of ways.
cause really if the BULLY cant defend themselves at all against YOU well...
nice with all the kids, all the dead peoples names is kinda cruel, but yeah.
MESSY. still nice end, would have ended witht he parents and all but nice.
| Sage of wind Dragons chapter 20 . 11/10/2013
smart work there, dislike how open Als new power is, but still NICE.
yeah Mustang already has enough things weighing him down in responsibilities to add THAT, love the bluff though, quite nice, quite nice.
and ahh, new blood I wondered why they were being stupid.
didn't really get Dramchmas threat when Oliva handled them well in hand WITHOUT any alchemists and shes desperate for MORE when she had barly really worked with any before but yeah.
a fun ending, quite fun.
| Sage of wind Dragons chapter 19 . 11/10/2013
nuclear ddetterence DOESNT work, especially when your the one holding all the cards, in this case if he did it, ti would be evil.
sure sympathetic reasons for it and all, but evil. and GODS are the Elrics unhealthy, if AL wanted to truly wanted to destroy the world and so long as it wasent Eds family there, hed probably HELP him or at least not condem him. Al is really oen fo the WORST people to have accesses to this kind of power, in stupid amounts and all.
I think you kept the chi and alchemy mixing to open ended, but still quit enice.
not sure if you handled Kimbley quite right there, but then its really not a world that they CAN interact with its like smoething lving on a omountain compared to the deps of the sea, they arnt apart of each others world and stuff.
Big softies, have no SPINE in them that would break if they tried to go to far past themselves, cause they can be sympathetic, and empathetic and be a BLEEDING heart and understand and feel so GUILTY, and they could go right on and do something cause they got to and its right and protect someone else cause im empathetic...
of ocurse over their life being to sensitive might leave themselves to dull, and to scar and all sorts of other things.
but GOD od they need some rules of war, acceptable targets and shit like that, cause kill them all at once leaves no chance of surrender and killing an entire city takes civillians and is just WASTEFULL in any time period of combat and YIKES.
and wow why wont you HELP me? GODS Al that's a sucker punch into some messy stuff.
still youg ot to get stuff out int he open and TALK aobut it, although Mustang would be the better person to talk to, that actually KNOWS, have the conversation with Lietenit Armstrong AND Mustang and all.
(do Homonculas count as deaths and stuff? do collateral that maby not with their BLOOD on your hands, but if I know over thos domino which knoks over that and that knoks over that and a wall fall on your head?
still funs tuff! interesting considerations, but theirs got to be some limit on stuff like that, cause hes only ever practiced on capturing like a FEW fish right? how int he hell will he be able to gather up hundreads allin an instant and do it QUICKLY and...
not the point I guess...
anyway fun story,Eds showing how fucked up he is and and Als sorta abusive in an odd light, but probably on accident.
| Sage of wind Dragons chapter 18 . 11/10/2013
Oliva isn't an alchemist and she really has no understanding of the art does she? she just sees a toll a weapon of sorts and shes DESPERATE. no truth in her, and from some of her earlier comments she didn't GET Ishvala in some ways at least int he beginning. probably a mistake to take the stone wall of Brigs out form under her... but YIKES is that a mess.
im a tad on both fences, ELrics positon on KILLING(NOT murder) is a tad shaky but all of them are desperate and awkwardly horrible things in their fights...
Ed was a civillain type, he FOUUGHT but he was more akin to a cop of sorts with alto of the fighting
while Mustang... HE like ALphones has the power to destroy a city, and hes had it for a WHILE now, and he has MORE control AND weather wont stop him anymore.
luck traps and surprises are really the only way you can get either of them.
but stil goes back to what I said, Olivia have the BEST experience of what all GOOD soldiers have in the best of conditions, saving the country and fighting against for what was RIGHT while Mustang has had some of the WORST and a lot more subfurge and spy and daggers and shadows to deal with.
but GODS do they got some akward issues. some connecting is part of it I think. only there IS no way to SHARE really.
and yeah the lineage of the Armstrongs... well both of them have a sister right?
perhaps that's their secret, one person to have a good normalish life and continuing the line while the others go on EXPLOITS AND GRAD STORIES OF THE ARMSTRONG LINE FOR GENERATIONS which COMPLETLY sqrew them up and all.
still good people just don't GET IT. in alots of ways, I cant think that Dramchma WANTS to force alchemists back into the field and get them DESPERATE seriously that be just suicidal when their is still combat trained Alchemist around, should wait a generation for them all to kick the bucket and THEN move in.
| Sage of wind Dragons chapter 11 . 11/10/2013
I LIKE the poloticts right here, as well as the detail over everything.
and ROy being still injured and everything? quite nice, got to love him sqrewing with Olivia , like that everyone is messed up ALOT the philosophers tone while powerful and MANY is a HORRIBEL price to use,s o fix the eyes? make sure his man can walk again? fine
fix some issues witthe hands? no, make it so you have no pain in your legs? no.
quite nice right there, really with all the stuff with a lot fo the ALL of them should be crippled a lot more. ALOT
Fullmetal when he got implaed, did he actually fix that up correctly?
like that its four essentially power players here, ESPECIALLY after the Homonculus have been overthrown its got to be a BITCH to try and fix things up, especially when your country is a perfect circle and has ONLY other countries surrounding it, meaning that NO places with any reprieve of a big ocean or a huge river or something.
liked RIzas position, it makes sense that theyd work it a lot better and stuff. her actually working makes alot more sense.
still this two people in charge of the government is sorta... messy, sure it will work with Olivia and Mustang but, that's going to be an ISSUE later in the future for later in the life of the government.
| Sage of wind Dragons chapter 10 . 11/10/2013
still confused on why Mustang is a MINISTER, as well as what this nonsense of him not practicing means, I mean sure it seems that he isn't in a military outing at the moment, so hes not using it for COMBAT but... you don't get out of SHAPE with something as dangerous as that at your fingertips.
having your charecters have different opinions than yourself about things is EXCELENT, cause it WORKS makes your story more of a story than sole insight into your OWN mind,
which is nice, and part of writing and all but still cahrecters should have a tad more life to em, putting a character ina situationa nd say what would THEY thinka bout all fo this stuff or grow up this way or have this OPINION on stuff...
still! wondering where this prime minister position came from as well as the Fuhrer being someone else than Mustang, but it should be interesting!
hope Armstrong and mUstnag can WORK with each other, its quite interesting really, general Armstrong was int he BEST of the military where all fo their GOOD is shown and where they are NEEDED, I always get the sense that she is more of a defensive repell the invaders type commader, she WAS in charge of the fort but she never really had LOTS of stuff with invading, and evne when so shed probably be met with ONLY military first. really she delt with only military to military from what I gathered.
while Mustang has Ishval which is... a horror.
and Miles SURVIVED, some how, and got allt he way up to the north from the east through milliterized territory, meaning he was probably quite young AND was lucky enough to escape some of the worst of the fighting. so GODS is that a mess, and after Ishval he was dealignw ith more internal traitor amtters and the like...
GODS do they have such far differing experience with war even if both are EXPERIENCED, them acting WITH each other and trying to work together... well that should be fun.
| Sage of wind Dragons chapter 4 . 11/10/2013
you know the bit about state alchemists not being apart of the military...
don't really like it there. oh yes RESTRICTIONS but considering the stuff that just the XING get up to...
Edwards general approach to alchemy is VERY interesting as well in regards to him and Als relationship, it shouldn't be athing but it still EXISTS and stuff.
although I dunno, the rock alchemy int he gorund while DANGEROUS and ESPECIALLY to civillians, well Mustang could probably unleash the same amount of damage only WORSE in a direct line and all and other alchemist should be able to protect themselves more...
but yikes, what in the hell was he THINKING trying to make this? I cant see the point of how hes shown as anything BUT a weapon...
still Scar, Mustang(especially with his OWN clapping of doom) are among the very few that could match Al here, the VERY few.
its kind of hilarious that they think he can be a good enough judge of character and that the people HE trains wont tell someone else or get info form someone as second hand or as two desperate eleric did, who were GOOD kids but even THEY well the brightest lights cast the deepest shadows...
his first step should have been to learn how to DEFEND yourself from another alchemist, one should never learn how to make a flame until they know how to put it OUT.
Al time in foreighn land probably distracted him a bit.
and La fan and the Emperor! well out of all the clans, doesn't his OWN clan need an heir?
how Eds going to double up on both... that should be interesting. REAL interesting.
with catching the fish and stuff and all of that, if All cant mess with the air than he can only do stuff on land or in water and that makes him DANGEROUS BEYOND BELIEF, well he isn't the soly dangerous person in the world. still should be interesting, especially the last bit about alchemy , cause by the time they are adults, well they are going to have their own careers wont they? in stuff they are allowed to do.
hope they don't experiment or get curious or nothing.
and you know considering how much his father and the Father and all the hommonculus did and all, Edd learning all of the history lets him SEE exactly how such things came into being and all, which is a MESS, should give him more of an understanding with everyone else, ESPECIALLY with the foreigners and all.
| inukai44 chapter 22 . 8/30/2013
I really hope you make a sequel to this story and I want to see what Winry say's to those kids who were being mean Trisha
| HypRRNeRd chapter 22 . 8/5/2013
This story was a wonderful read. The kids are awesome, and I laughed so hard at the line 'Xingese had all the best insults'. As someone bilingual, I would agree Xingese (Chinese) has a lot of creative insults.
I must also commend you for the number of languages you know as you mentioned in an AN.
I would love to see a fic with all the kids being kids and badass and getting into trouble. I think this story has become my cannon.
Thank you so much for writing this! *applauds.
| HypRRNeRd chapter 11 . 8/5/2013
Recently just discovered this fic. And an postFMA with realistic politics and tariffs and union bargaining rights? Thank you so much! 3 The world building is what makes this fic unique. A lot of people can do the cutesy day to day stuff with lots of wonderful moments of heartwarming, but it's the complicated, messy details in the back (be it Father using the entire country as his playground or Al developing new 'magic') that make all those moments better.
This story is lovely.
*Goes off to read the next chapter.
| Rubikcube124 chapter 22 . 7/9/2013
Aw, this is the first Fanfic I ever read! I'm lucky that the first one I ran across was so good! I love this story and I always will. Thank you so much for writing it!
| choirgirl20 chapter 3 . 6/13/2013
I absolutely loved this chapter. It was really heartwarming to see adult Al comforting adult Ed. You are a brilliant writer! :)
| Cap'nHoozits chapter 17 . 2/16/2013
I have read this chapter, and I approve!
Seriously, I had a grin on my face the whole time. Yes, I loved it! I also love how you blended it into your own work and really made it your own.
| Cap'nHoozits chapter 11 . 2/15/2013
Since I'm at the halfway point, I figured I'd take a breather and tell you how much I'm enjoying this. I tend to stick around the Ishvalan areas of FF, but then I miss stuff like this. I am massively impressed by your detail of all the political goings-on.
Also, I'm absolutely tickled pink by your mention. I saw halmi in there and I nearly squealed. I'm so flattered!