Reviews for Pokedex Holders Adventure
Ruby chapter 9 . 9/26/2014
Cool
Qruis chapter 5 . 5/18/2014
Rushing the story *guitar guitar* rushing the story on rock an' roll...
(just put the rythm of "we build this city")
Like: okay so... looks like we're here
Yeah! let's play poker and the prices will be your crush, you admit it or not.
Sounds fine by me...
Of course the deck will be cheated...
Everyone choose their crush even that their not admit it several times...
*blush* *blush intensifies*
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Could have been a bit more sutile... slowing down a bit... a bit of character developement here and there and BOOM one at the time start falling in "love" or admiting it at least...
sapphirewitch565 chapter 9 . 7/11/2013
please update soon! I'm really looking forward to sapphire and red's match. It's actually quite sad that Sapphire just got the badges but didn't take on the pokemon league. Then she could have become the Hoenn champion or a gymleader...hmmm...that'll be interesting,2 champions in 13 dexholders...ACK! I went off track! Anyway, great story! Update soon!
AkaruiYoru chapter 8 . 6/27/2013
Nice story, but work on the punctuation... who am I kidding I don't care about it. came you make Crystal vs Blue (make it like de ja vu), Red vs Sapphire (make ruby really happy that he doesn't have to fight her at all), Emerald vs Gold, Silver vs Pearl (don't forget to make pearl use that ability of his to know a pokemon moves by the stance), Platina vs Green (make it like green was forced to use blast burn, knocking down one of Platina's pokemon, then halfway she figured out how to counter it), Finally Ruby vs Dia (Make it like somehow, by luck, Dia won) and if you can make the final battle between Red against one of the Sinnoh pokedex holder, to make it interesting.
LonelySoldier chapter 2 . 9/12/2012
God... Please have a beta reader. I'm going blind reading this. Good story though, although there is a big lack in punctuation.
PokeFan chapter 8 . 8/12/2012
Big fan of your story. Please continue the story as soon as possible! AWESOME STORY! I think the next round should be Gold vs. Pearl!
AnimeQueen1260 chapter 8 . 7/14/2012
I think that the first battles should be:
Sapphire VS. Ruby/ Platinum VS. Red/ Blue (male) VS. Pearl/ Dia VS. Green (female)/ Gold VS. Silver/ Crystal VS. Emerald
tigrun chapter 8 . 1/14/2012
love it
Gur40goku chapter 8 . 12/16/2011
Ruby VS. Gold / Sapphire VS. Green / Pearl VS. Emerald / Blue VS. Silver / Crystal VS. Platinum / Red VS. Dia. also later in the tournament PLEASE DO Red VS. Ruby (have Sapphire make a bet or her and Blue Blackmail him into fighting seriously)
Pablo and Bobboo chapter 2 . 11/8/2011
Pardon me, but have you ever heard of these things called quotation marks? It isn't horrible, but WHERE ON EARTH ARE THE QUOTATION MARKS?
ZXCVBNMEM chapter 8 . 11/2/2011
Grammar needs to be checked. Trying to help.

Like when Silver says:

"and that is?"

Correct Grammar: "And that is?"

Always capitalize the beginning of a sentence.

Gold smirked and said "well I guess you'll just have to find out later today."

Correct Grammar: Gold smirked and said, "Well I guess you'll just have to find out later today."

You should always put a comma before the quotation marks when someone is about to say something.

I thought about something "if Red is involved in this, then where is he?"

Correct Grammar: I thought about something. "If Red is involved in this, then where is he?"

Depending on the sentence, if it said "I thought about something and said," then the comma would've been added. If it's just "I thought about something. "If Red is involved in this, then where is he?"" then it would be a period.

I hope this helps...just want to help. Not to be mean.

...PS: Isn't "pov" suppose to be POV?

PSS(or PPS whatever you call it): It's always fun to read/see Ruby and Sapphire bickering like an old married couple.
ChillinLikeaVillain chapter 8 . 11/1/2011
Cool, I wonder who's against who.
ZXCVBNMEM chapter 7 . 8/9/2011
Dates! Yahoo!
ZXCVBNMEM chapter 6 . 7/22/2011
ha ha ha...what a very mean waitress...she should be FIRED!
ZXCVBNMEM chapter 5 . 7/18/2011
Hahaha. Blue is so evil *grin*
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