|Reviews for Night Life|
| skywiseskychan chapter 14 . 8/6/2014
Wow, how have I missed this? I usually follow all the good BGC stories and I hadn't noticed this one. Part of course is that I'm writing my own but the other is that I love BGC. Your story here is great and I now am utterly hooked.
Your plot is interesting and detailed, with intriguing meta world events. But the subplot between Saber Green and K-11-2 well thats golden. So I just wanted to let you know I'm really enjoying this story, from escaped 33-S's (a soft spot for me), to USSD actually doing something, to all the upgraded tech being thrown around. My one comment is to remember to have updated the Sabers as well, though you probably don't have to worry too much about mentioning it, other than to keep them relatively on par with the USSD stuff and only making mention of it when one side or the other proves to have a decisive advantage.
| Rieverre chapter 14 . 7/29/2014
Still the best BGC story in a good long while, and still the only one I know from the perspective of a K suit driver, if not going into the minutae as much as I'd maybe prefer it to (what can I say, I like my gun porn). Glad to see it's still getting updates and looking forward to more.
| dylanredefined chapter 13 . 1/19/2014
| Wingman0 chapter 13 . 12/1/2013
Nice very nice. Really enjoying the story
| Guest chapter 13 . 12/1/2013
Someone is playing with fire here. Probably multiple someones. I can't wait to see the fallout from all of this..
| Edhla chapter 12 . 5/18/2013
Again, I can't praise your last lines enough. This was an interesting line: "The response got a grin that was almost feral." I love your use of the word "feral" here. My only suggestion would be to perhaps change "got" to "was", as I'm assuming the grin was a response to Leon's request (which in itself was witty and awesome.)
| Edhla chapter 11 . 5/18/2013
"Oh shit." Yeah, you're not kidding, Linna! Incidentally, I've usually seen it written with the comma: "Oh, shit." YMMV. There were a couple of places in this chapter where I thought more punctuation might improve it, like "The landing was rough, they always were" being separated either by a period or a semi-colon. Again, YMMV and damn, your dialogue sings.
| Edhla chapter 10 . 5/18/2013
Before I heap more praise; Minorest of SPaG nitpicks: '"Quiet evening," Leon observed."' Other than that, this is the usual quality of chapter I'm now expecting from you :) You're doing very well with what seems to be a host of canon characters. I'm particularly interested in Leon here.
| Edhla chapter 9 . 5/18/2013
"Why am I here? Linna Yamazaki was currently lying on her back, looking up at a Megatokyo night sky so choked by light pollution that no stars were visible. Not because she wanted to, but being thrown around like a ragdoll was an occupational hazard of wearing what amounted to an armored catsuit and fighting insane biomechanical robots." What a wonderfully witty, succinct pair of sentences. Explains so well what's going on without sounding like an infodump of sorts.
Linna's line about whether they're "losing" was brilliantly timed, and I love how undramatic it sounds- which of course makes it all the more chilling.
| Edhla chapter 8 . 5/18/2013
You have a real talent for first-and-last lines. I'm also really impressed with your author's notes- you've obviously thought this through really well, which is not something that can be said for all fanfic writers :) I like how you're explaining your reaction to canon. Nice work x
| Edhla chapter 7 . 5/18/2013
Again, a killing last line. Very tight, tense writing, except for "actually quite tense", which struck me as quite loose and almost fourth-wallish. I'm following the action as best I can, but being non-canon, I'm mostly just impressed with how well you write these details, and again, your dialogue :)
| Edhla chapter 6 . 5/18/2013
This chapter is a lot longer than your previous ones, and I like the amount of detail and the range of characters you use. Again, your dialogue is excellent and seems so realistic. The only thing I noticed is that this sentence is a little confused: ""Get this bird in the air in the next two minutes or you have my word I'll shoot you and find somebody who will."" I know you meant, "find somebody who will get this bird in the air", but the way it's worded sounds like "I'll find somebody who will shoot you." I'd perhaps play around with the wording, because it's one hell of a statement and gives great impact to the chapter :)
| Edhla chapter 5 . 5/18/2013
"K-11-2 thought it, and was cynical as he did so because he knew it wasn't true." I thought this sentence seemed a little robotic, which is surprising because your prose flows so well generally. This chapter was a little harder for me to follow than previous ones but, again, that's probably a canon issue, not your writing x
| Edhla chapter 4 . 5/18/2013
"Five coffins." What a fantastic, attention-getting way to start this chapter- bravo. I particularly liked how you tied in that theme with your last paragraph, and overall this chapter held such restrained emotion and language that the events spoke for themselves and you weren't tempted to help it along with any extra drama. Really excellent stuff. x
| Edhla chapter 3 . 5/18/2013
Particularly like that last paragraph :) "Revolt" seemed a bit of a formal word to use in the context of the scene, but as I don't know how the canon character speaks, I could be wrong there :) Bit confused by all the K-codes, but I've got no doubt that that's because I'm a canon stranger, not any fault of your writing :)