Reviews for Master of Foxes and Serpents |
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![]() ![]() ![]() This story is interesting but has been sitting way to long it feels abandoned. Then there happens to be all these skits before and after the story. Let me remind you most of your readers are here for your stories and not your skits. Second you need to work on your grammar. Why you ask? Because good grammar helps the story flow the better it flows the more fans you get. The type of grammar that you need to improve on. Naruto picks up Neji and throws him into a three. While fighting against Neji Naruto picks him up and throws Neji into a tree. The difference should be there in front of you with those two sentences especially the correct spelling sense I am unaware that the number three is an actual object. You have a lot of words misspelled and will never be picked up by spell checker sense they are misspelled with other words that were spelled correctly. You and many other authors always want reviews that point these things out yet a lot of times it just seems like you ignore the ones that do try to help you out when these things get pointed out to you. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great Chapter. Anko's test was awesome :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() AWESOME CHAPTER! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hehehehehehe, Anko and Miko :) Awesome Chapter. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great Chapter! The Great Anko has Arrived! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great Chapter. Loved the summons in the hospital :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome Start! |
![]() ![]() This was a awesome story. Hope you continue it. Can't wait till your next update. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I wonder if Nosebleeds are how anime people collect blood? Given the amount that usually comes out it would be far more efficient. "Just hold this bucket under your nose sir, holding it tight? Good. Annnnd PORNO MAG! Whew. Good thing we had the chair bolted to the floor." What? It could happen. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Could he have 3 Contracts? Not asking for the story, just hypothetically, one for Right Hand, one for Left Hand, one for Both Hands? |
![]() ![]() ![]() So far I like this story. But really dude you have Mikito and Anko become naruto's adopted parents and now from what I am reading you're planning on adding Zabuza into it. That's weird even for fan fiction. Also is this harem story? Because I don't think the council we let it be with him only banging his summons, because wouldn't any child of a summons be raised in the summon realm instead of the village. |
![]() ![]() Yo you white donkey pirate, why don't you scurry back under the rock that you slithered out from under with your bed partner. (a digi-cookie for those whom guessed it's kabuto) |
![]() ![]() Hahahaha! Nicely done Naruto. |
![]() ![]() SURPRISE Anko! |
![]() ![]() good chapter, although could have made her Naruto's adopted aunt. But your the aunt. |