|Reviews for Watching the sunset|
| Creative Fictional Dragon chapter 1 . 10/16/2011
awww this story was adorable. I loved it.
| Higuchimon chapter 1 . 7/16/2011
It's...not bad, but there are a few points that need to be fixed.
First of all, they go to school on a *tropical island*. It's been shown snowing *once* there and that was back in first season. Winter isn't exactly *that* cold there. Also, really? The weather didn't seem to make a difference to the story.
Another note: if it's winter, then they've only known each other about two months. Classes begin at DA in October, and the first of winter is in December. That's hardly time to be declaring True Love Eternal, even when Juudai and Johan have chemistry like they do. Also? Two months into the year they were kind of busy with Dark World and Sand World and saving the world.
The characterization itself is kind of...off/not-off. They do have lovely chemistry but the way it's presented here just doesn't feel like them. Juudai's not really shy about his feelings. It's just not like him.
Other notes: spellcheck and read it over, because you've left out a lot of capital letters and used the wrong words. Juudai might dangle his *feet* over the edge but I doubt he would dangle his *feat*.
And why would Johan *smirk*? That's hardly the right expression after you just did a love confession. Smile, perhaps, but smirk?