|Reviews for A Favor for a Stranger|
| Glashtyn chapter 1 . 12/2/2014
The ideas are promising and you're off to a good start, but there is a distance yet to go, I believe. The first paragraph sounds as if you are describing your MC to someone who is not reading the story. Try giving the reader these details through descriptions. I also think that this story would benefit from a rewrite in first person. Descriptions of the places would have helped too. I felt the pacing was a bit off when I had to make sure of where they were by rereading. Try the five senses approach - what do they hear, see, smell, taste, and feel. We experience through all these things and omitting any one feels less than complete.
| YazzyBoo chapter 1 . 7/26/2011
Wow! Really good!